soupoftomato wrote:
As he began to lower his souls
typo?
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zubblewu wrote:
soupoftomato wrote:
As he began to lower his souls
typo?
You just are too shallow to understand. I bet you haven't even found your natural high.
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zubblewu wrote:
soupoftomato wrote:
As he began to lower his souls
typo?
Nah you got to sell your soul before you can use special shoes
Where have you been?
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u broke my heart
i feel so empty
and not high
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soupoftomato wrote:
zubblewu wrote:
soupoftomato wrote:
As he began to lower his souls
typo?
Nah you got to sell your soul before you can use special shoes
Where have you been?
oh
i must have been banned longer than i thought
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Sellout wrote:
zubblewu wrote:
u broke my heart
i feel so empty
and not high
You broke mine first. You deserved it.
i don't believe in karma
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zubblewu wrote:
Sellout wrote:
zubblewu wrote:
u broke my heart
i feel so empty
and not high
You broke mine first. You deserved it.
i don't believe in karma
I don't either, but I believe in love
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Sellout wrote:
zubblewu wrote:
Sellout wrote:
You broke mine first. You deserved it.
i don't believe in karma
I don't either, but I believe in love
AWWW
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Sellout wrote:
zubblewu wrote:
Sellout wrote:
You broke mine first. You deserved it.i don't believe in karma
I don't either, but I believe in love
i used to
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but how can i believe you again?!?!
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believe them, believe them!
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zubblewu wrote:
but how can i believe you again?!?!
I'll write you a poem !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
zubblewu zubblewu
there is nothing that smells quite like you
(get it? cos i love u and you're unique)
It's a couplet
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hawt
3/10
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i'll write you a poem!!!
i saw you sitting there drinking industrial metal and listening to diet coke
and laughed when i saw you choke
do u like it
Last edited by zubblewu (2013-04-14 00:36:52)
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don't worry i still luv u
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like saccharin???
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yay it's back
maybe to get some extra feedback i should repost my story from the first topic here...
is that ok?
Last edited by ROSMan (2013-04-14 11:59:30)
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I wrote this for school like a year ago and thought it was superb but reading back, it was written kind of badly, and the whole scene at the park at the beginning is just terrible. I used to write a lot but I don't know what I did with it all.
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EmperorEvil wrote:
I wrote this for school like a year ago and thought it was superb but reading back, it was written kind of badly, and the whole scene at the park at the beginning is just terrible. I used to write a lot but I don't know what I did with it all.
This is pretty good! The entire last page is in bold though...
Otherwise, good!! If you consider that TERRIBLE I'd like to see the best you've written!
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