Scratch

maxskywalker wrote:

Hey, I wanna read more, too.

Good! 

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

There are a few classics that I like - Tom Sawyer, Huck Finn - that are like that, but everyone has different tastes.  Just because something is a classic doesn't mean that I have to like it.  In fact, I prefer little-known books.   And just because you don't like fighting doesn't mean my opinion is wrong.  I like action-filled, fantasy-sci fi, fighty books.  It's wrong to judge me like that just because I like those types of books.
And have you seen the new Alice in Wonderland movie?  Alice vs. Jabberwocky?

Brett, *cough*.  Do you believe my opinion is wrong?

*cough*

Why are you trying to set a trap for him? That's bad

calebxy wrote:

rabbit1131 wrote:

I say
GIMMEH MOAR

I'm glad your a fan! 

I'm moar den a fan. I just don't blow air. I wike your stories

calebxy wrote:

... the sword fight from chapter 3.    Partly because I want to see what you think of it, and partly because some of you (PlutoIsHades, in particular) want to read more of my story. 

Lol.

But it's true.

Is it out yet?
Yet?
Yet?
Yet?
Yet?
Yet?
Yet?
Yet?
YET?
C'mon dude.
YET?

"Ok. You have left me no choice, lets duel." <character 1's name> said. "Oh, so you have no fear to challenge me? Alright then, I accept!" <character 2's name> yelled eagerly.
<character 1' name> brought out a large bladed sword, but <character 2's> brought out a close-to equal sword.

Thats a starter for you. 

You can finish the rest, if you choose this.

calebxy wrote:

Well, I've finished it! Don't get too excited. It's not very good. Bear in mind that this isn't really meant to be dramatic or anything, considering they are just playing. It's also not particularly important to the story, I just wanted to write a sword fight. 
Also, I'm going to edit it slightly. 


“Do either of you two actually know how to sword fight?” Peter asked, more than a little concerned.
“Kind of,” William replied.
“Not really,” said Jacob, “but how hard can it?” he joked, grinning.

Before Peter could say any more, William, with his sword outstretched, lunged at Jacob, who hoped backwards, blocking the strike at the same time. Jacob swung his sword at William, who winced as steel struck steel. He then once again lunged at Jacob, who spun round to the side. Using his momentum, he swung his sword at William, who ducked, and then leapt at Jacob.

Jacob simultaneously parried, spun round, and fell over. William stumbled slightly, but manged to stay on his feet. He circled around Jacob, waiting for him to get up. Jacob leapt to his feet, and continued the fight. They continued circling each other and occasionally leaping in the others direction when they thought the latter was in a weak spot for a few more minutes, in the large, computer filled room, before finally deciding that they should probably get back to the party.

“Can I keep this?” William asked, holding the sword up.
“Sure,” replied Peter. “But just don’t flash it around in front of the bunch of teenagers upstairs. They’d kill each other!” he joked.

Feexed

calebxy wrote:

rabbit1131 wrote:

calebxy wrote:

Well, I've finished it! Don't get too excited. It's not very good. Bear in mind that this isn't really meant to be dramatic or anything, considering they are just playing. It's also not particularly important to the story, I just wanted to write a sword fight. 
Also, I'm going to edit it slightly. 


“Do either of you two actually know how to sword fight?” Peter asked, more than a little concerned.
“Kind of,” William replied.
“Not really,” said Jacob, “but how hard can it?” he joked, grinning.

Before Peter could say any more, William, with his sword outstretched, lunged at Jacob, who hoped backwards, blocking the strike at the same time. Jacob swung his sword at William, who winced as steel struck steel. He then once again lunged at Jacob, who spun round to the side. Using his momentum, he swung his sword at William, who ducked, and then leapt at Jacob.

Jacob simultaneously parried, spun round, and fell over. William stumbled slightly, but manged to stay on his feet. He circled around Jacob, waiting for him to get up. Jacob leapt to his feet, and continued the fight. They continued circling each other and occasionally leaping in the others direction when they thought the latter was in a weak spot for a few more minutes, in the large, computer filled room, before finally deciding that they should probably get back to the party.

“Can I keep this?” William asked, holding the sword up.
“Sure,” replied Peter. “But just don’t flash it around in front of the bunch of teenagers upstairs. They’d kill each other!” he joked.

Feexed

Nice suggestions. Thanks.    Other than the things you felt needed improving, did you like it?

Hmm... Nah, not really. But is nobody gonna get injured?

PlutoIsHades wrote:

I think it's great!  Is this chapter three or a part of chapter three?

Just a part of chapter 3. And thanks. 

bump

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

There are a few classics that I like - Tom Sawyer, Huck Finn - that are like that, but everyone has different tastes.  Just because something is a classic doesn't mean that I have to like it.  In fact, I prefer little-known books.   And just because you don't like fighting doesn't mean my opinion is wrong.  I like action-filled, fantasy-sci fi, fighty books.  It's wrong to judge me like that just because I like those types of books.
And have you seen the new Alice in Wonderland movie?  Alice vs. Jabberwocky?

Brett, *cough*.  Do you believe my opinion is wrong?

*cough*

woops, haven't visited this thread in forever.
I believe your opinion is wrong, but not because it differs from mine. I believe it is wrong because it involves pleasure at reading about violence.

To be completely honest, violent books can be exciting to read, but they're not funny, they're not happy, and they're not wholesome. You aren't a bad person, it's just that I don't like violence 

calebxy wrote:

brettman98 wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

*cough*

woops, haven't visited this thread in forever.
I believe your opinion is wrong, but not because it differs from mine. I believe it is wrong because it involves pleasure at reading about violence.

To be completely honest, violent books can be exciting to read, but they're not funny, they're not happy, and they're not wholesome. You aren't a bad person, it's just that I don't like violence 

I doubt they enjoy reading sword fights because they are sadistic. Rather, they almost certainly like it because it's exciting.

Yeah.  Plus, not much is exciting if everything is happy and funny and rainbows.  Those can come after the fight, maybe if the good guy wins.
And to your comment about it not being wholesome, fighting IS important in life.  What's the point if there are no struggles, no arguments?

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