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#1 2011-11-01 16:02:18
How is this?
Antonio drew his sword, and Bobby, with a shaky hand, did also.
They glared at each other, hatred in Antonio's eyes, fear in Bobby's.
"I'll make you pay!" Antonio said
"Pay for what?" replied Bobby. "What did I do?" Bobby put his head down and put his sword back, trying to keep Antonio from seeing him choke back tears.
"My wife... you KILLED HER!"
Bobby lifted his head slowly, revealing the tears streaming. Out of anger, he drew his sword again , saying, "I LOVED HER! WHY WOULD I DO THAT?!" Antonio smiled. He had Bobby right where he wanted him.
"I know you loved her. But I had her. She was MINE. You couldn't bear that."
Bobby blushed, then clenched his jaw. He swung. The sword nearly hit Antonio in the face.
There was a clang, a sound of metal hitting metal. Antonio and Bobby were trying their best. Antonio wanted Bobby to pay for what he did, and in his anger pinned him down on the ground.
Bobby thrashed around until he got so tired he could barely see straight. As Antonio retracted the sword, a single tear shed from Bobby's eye. A swung down the sword, puncturing Bobby in the chest. With that, Antonio said, "You belong to the devil now."
It's going to be in a real story.
Last edited by imnotbob (2011-11-01 17:35:14)
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#3 2011-11-01 17:28:53
- bananaman114
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Re: How is this?
they need names
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#4 2011-11-01 17:32:15
Re: How is this?
I know, but it's something I came up with in a few seconds, so how about Antonio and Bobby
EDIT: All done. I changed the story a bit, too.
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#8 2011-11-02 19:57:22
- CheeseMunchy
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Re: How is this?
I this I saw this on the sword fight topic. right?
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#9 2011-11-02 20:22:05
- PlutoIsHades
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Re: How is this?
I wanna read! Post more post more post more! Please?
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#11 2011-11-02 22:17:38
- bananaman114
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Re: How is this?
i'm going to be dead honest here
and i mean no offence
it's a bit to obvious that antonio's or whoever's wife was killed by that other guy
and that makes it a bit cheesy
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#12 2011-11-02 23:00:39
- undefeatedgames
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Re: How is this?
Whoa...
I like it
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#13 2011-11-02 23:02:34
- Earthboundjeff
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Re: How is this?
It needs more zombies and explosions
But it's good
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#16 2011-11-09 15:16:03
- maxskywalker
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Re: How is this?
Nice.
You have a very messed-up mind.
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#17 2011-11-09 15:38:20
- EmperorEvil
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Re: How is this?
I actually found it rather hilarious.
That's not a bad thing tho
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