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#1 2011-10-12 21:41:43
My Baritone -- a poem
I get home
Put down my schoolbag
See the instrument I've been longing all day to play
It's a beauty
My Jupiter baritone
A great instrument
Unnoticed by the world
I take out the mouthpiece
Put it in
Get out my band folder
I'm ready to play
Sit down
Prop up my music
Begin to play
Struggling to read the notes
Frustrated, I pack up my instrument
But I can't stay away for long. I soon unlatch the latches
On my case
And play again
With my baritone
Everything's OK
Whaddya think?
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#3 2011-10-12 21:51:58
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
nextstorm wrote:
This is more of prose than poem
Perhaps if you tried starting with iambic pentameter without rhyming?
The what now?
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#4 2011-10-12 21:57:18
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
imnotbob wrote:
nextstorm wrote:
This is more of prose than poem
Perhaps if you tried starting with iambic pentameter without rhyming?The what now?
Iambic pentameter
Ten syllables per line
weak STRONG weak STRONG etc etc
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#5 2011-10-12 21:58:06
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
nextstorm wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
nextstorm wrote:
This is more of prose than poem
Perhaps if you tried starting with iambic pentameter without rhyming?The what now?
Iambic pentameter
Ten syllables per line
weak STRONG weak STRONG etc etc
Oooh...
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#6 2011-10-12 22:51:24
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
imnotbob wrote:
nextstorm wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
The what now?Iambic pentameter
Ten syllables per line
weak STRONG weak STRONG etc etcOooh...
Well, other than that, do you like it?
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#7 2011-10-12 23:16:13
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
imnotbob wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
nextstorm wrote:
Iambic pentameter
Ten syllables per line
weak STRONG weak STRONG etc etcOooh...
Well, other than that, do you like it?
Interesting concept. Maybe you could elaborate on you playing your trumpet
60 second ruled
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#9 2011-10-13 22:44:58
Re: My Baritone -- a poem
Vurb wrote:
Back in my days poetry had actual rhyming.
Meh, rhymes are overrated
@nextstorm Thanks 
Maybe, but then it would be pretty long (BARITONE)
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