Scratch

okay so I made a short sequence of a story and wondered which you like better. or if you like it at all 

(VERSION A   *goooblamph!* ......Well, that didn't sound very good. I knew this hunk of junk that is supposedly supposed to be called a "car" was going to break down soon, but I never thought this slowly.  My mom immediately stopped the catastrophe and looked underneath to see what was wrong, ....it seems that that something was about to break off and was dragging along the road. But we couldn't stop now, we had to pick up my little sister, and it was too late to call the school to make her ride the bus. We were off the rescue! Of course going to the rescue meant we had to endure going very slowly with the neighborhood wondering if something just died. I could tell my sister was trying to hold in the giggles as we were driving, but she epically failed when we passed by an old man who looked like he thought transformers were after him as we passed by. "Did you see that old mans face?! did you mom?!" man, my sister was really pushing it. My sister has a bad habit of snorting when she laughs, its been gone for awhile now, but all the snorts held in all these years were coming out today, and all the cars holding tired, annoyed behind us could tell as much as me and my mom could. By the time a bus was behind us, my mom lost it and starting hysterically, but not in the way my sister was.
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okay I know it wasn't that good, but here is version B:
Were are off to rescue you little dear sister!    sadly we brought company with us. yep, we brought about 10 or 13 threatening faces and one bus full of kids you know, I know you love us now~  . but that is not all we brought, we also brought a huge broken car and a hysterically laughing sister with us! I hope you had a great day at school and hope you know we wuv you~ =3
sincerly
you adorable, better than you sister 

which do you like better?