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veggieman001 wrote:

AfraidOfClouds wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

Uh huh.

Not very good subject matter.

I apologise if you can't understand it. It's really personal, and it would make sense if you knew what it was about.

But no one does but you... and maybe puppet...

Please listen, people! 

I'll listen once I find my headphones xD

nextstorm wrote:

also, your vocals could use improving

Its true    But you're a great music artist other than that! You recorded and mixed all that right? 

It is pretty good. 

Listening to the opening right now.

It's... different. ^^ The Barf Bag one is stuck in my head X__X
Strangesubject matter, but who cares?! :3

ProgrammingFreak wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

ProgrammingFreak wrote:

Its true    But you're a great music artist other than that! You recorded and mixed all that right? 

Yeah, everything was done by me. Thanks! I'm curious, what do you think should be changed about the vocals?

Depends on the style you're shootin for.

Uh like dark depressing but trebley.

I also put some leftover tracks here.

technoguyx wrote:

Ok I'll check it out... The first track sounds really off-sync when the guitars come in, did you actually play them along with the drums? You should. 

The guitar on Poke Nelson sounds really off tune, the D string particularly.

Barf Bag is fine in the first minute (then it gets a bit out of sync), vocals are usually panned to center though 

William was pretty good though... The hi-hat is a little too loud in some parts (could be fixed with EQ). I'm not sure if lyrics "you're a terrible person" and "I'll kill you William" fit an acoustic song but it kinda gives it an ironic feeling 

It's Finally Over was decent too, though a little boring.

Overall: Your songs have lots of potential, but the equipment (you really need a better mic.) used it's that good. You also need to synchronize all the instruments - try recording the drums first and then play everything along to it if you don't already. If you do, then practice playing along to a constant rhythm (i.e. metronome) until you can keep a solid rhythm.    And course, tune your instruments before every recording, sometimes they can get off tune pretty easily.

1. I always record the drums first and then play along with them 

2. The guitar in "Poke Nelson" was out of tune, but I decided to not fix it, for IMO it fits the hidden brutal nature of the lyrics.

3. I might have messed something up there. I do like the off pan of the vocals though.

4. Thanks! I did intentionally make the hi-hat really piercing on it. It makes you feel like someone is injuring you.   
Also, I don't think the acoustic is bad with the lyrics in "William". It counters it with the minor chords.

5. It was one of the first ones I wrote with the guitar, so it would naturally not be the best. Thanks though. 

Thanks for all your feedback!

adriangl wrote:

It's pretty decent, but there are a lot of things that could be better:

1. Get a better mic. All of the vocals are pretty bad quality, and your voice itself could use a little work.

2. The chords and drums get boring sometimes. Try to layer multiple sounds and not repeat them over and over.

3. The sync isn't that great. If you write a good song, make music that goes with it, or vice versa. A lot of the lyrics seemed strange to go with the music.

Other than that, it was good 

Alright. I'll think about those. I will be getting a better mic at some point too.

Bumpsicles!

1. It'd be nice if you rapped 1 song. I love rap, and it appeals to others too. Maybe you have talent? 
2. I like it!
3. I couldn't do better... 

bbbeb wrote:

1. It'd be nice if you rapped 1 song. I love rap, and it appeals to others too. Maybe you have talent? 

Uh... no.

I do like some rap, but it doesn't seem like his kind of thing. And if he did it because it appealed to others, but that wasn't what he wanted to do, that would be selling out.