Scratch

Some of you might remember quite a while ago, I was making a series of topics about my series of short stories. Well, I've continued writing them, and I want to know what you think of this so far:


Goldie couldn’t move. He was inside a van, with two guards in robotic suits looking at him. After a few seconds, he felt his strength coming back to him. He still didn’t move, in case the guards would take away his energy again.

A few minutes later, the van stopped. The guards opened the doors, got out and closed them again, leaving Goldie inside the van all on his own. He stood up, and looked out of a window. He could see a group of people standing behind it. One person was holding a remote control. He held down a button, and the van started to move forward.

Goldie looked at where the van was heading, and saw it was going towards a cliff! He tried to open the doors, but they were locked. He then tried punching them, but they were to strong. Just as he was thinking of something else he could try, he was thrown against the back of the van.

The van plummeted over the edge of the cliff, flipping end over end. Goldie grabbed onto some rope. Unfortunately, it wasn’t attached to anything. He bounced around inside the van for a few seconds, until it finally smashed into the ground.

The van had landed on its roof and was now flatter than a relatively thick pancake. Goldie slowly crawled out of a smashed window, still clinging tightly to the rope. He looked around, and after he realised that he was, in fact, still alive, he let go.

Goldie stood up and looked behind him. He saw the crushed, upside-down van lying on the ground. He was glad he wasn’t dead, especially since falling from a cliff in a van would have killed anyone else.

As Goldie began walking away, he tripped over a wire. He looked at where the wire was attached to, and saw that it was embedded into the cliff. He guessed that it was attached to some explosives inside the mountain.

Not sure quite what to do, Goldie grabbed the wire and tore it apart. Unfortunately, that caused the explosives inside the cliff to explode. Tons of rocks came tumbling towards him! Goldie dived towards the van, picked it up, and threw it as hard as he could away from the cliff. He kept holding on even after he threw it, so it took him with it as it flew threw the air.

Goldie let go of the van just before it landed and rolled over several times before coming to a stop. He looked behind him, and saw the rubble finally come to a rest. He was about to run towards it, but then he had a fantastic idea. He’d just do the same thing he did a few moments ago, and throw the van while still holding on to it.

He did as such, and landed just in front of the remains of the cliff. Goldie then threw the van again, and landed at the top of the cliff. A few hundred meters in front of him, he could see there was a rather large building with a long metal poll pointing up on the roof. Goldie decided to investigate.

He walked over to a door, wondering what to do. Since he couldn’t think of any other plan, he just knocked on the door. A few seconds later, a hatch in the door opened.

“What do you want?” said a very strange, deep voice from behind the door.
“Err…” Goldie replied. “Could you please tell me where I am?”

The hatch closed. Goldie waited for a while, hoping that the person would open the door, but they didn’t. Goldie wondered if there might be another way in, maybe on the roof. He ran back over to the crushed van, picked it up, and threw it on top of the building again while still holding on to it.

The van, along with Goldie, crashed straight through the roof of the building, and came to a stop in the room below. Goldie looked around and saw lots of people, all looking at him.

“Err… hello,” he said. “Could someone please tell me where I am?”

Suddenly, an alarm went off! A cow smashed through a door and charged towards Goldie. It grabbed him and through back through the hole of the roof, but Goldie managed to grab onto the edge of the hole. He flung himself at the cow with such force, that the floor collapsed and they both plummeted down to the floor below.

The cow threw Goldie off of it, and got up. It walked over to Goldie, raised one of its hooves, and slammed it down on top of Goldie. Fortunately, Goldie rolled to one side just before being hit, and the cow’s hoof smashed through the floor.

Goldie ran over to a lamp and picked it up. The cow’s hoof was stuck in the floor, so Goldie took advantage of the moment and threw the lamp at the cow. The cow ducked, and the lamp shattered against the wall behind it.

The cow finally managed to pull its hoof out of the floor, just as Goldie jumped at it. It knocked Goldie out of the way, and sent him flying into a wall. The cow charged towards him, but he jumped up and grabbed on to a light bulb hanging from the ceiling. He swung on it and kicked the ceiling, propelling himself up through the hole he created.

Goldie grabbed the crushed van, jumped up and threw it down with all his might, still holding on to it. The van, along with Goldie, plummeted through the floor and smashed into the cow. The van continued going, right through the next floor, and the next, and next until they were at ground level.

Goldie raised the van, and just before he could throw it down on top of the cow, someone jumped at him from the side, throwing him against the wall. The person was in a robotic-looking suit just like the one that the two men were wearing that drained Goldie’s power. Goldie collapsed onto the floor, not able to move at all.

He could see someone walking over to the cow and inject something into it. The cow’s skin started to change colour. Before Goldie could see what would happen to the cow next, he was grabbed by a guard and taken away. Goldie couldn’t try and escape, as he still didn’t have any power in him yet.

He was taken inside a lift, and down underground. He was then taken inside a large, metal room with a florescent light on the ceiling. The guard threw Goldie into the room, and closed the door. After a few seconds, Goldie managed to regain enough energy to start up. He slowly walked over to the door, and tried to open it. As he had thought, it was locked.

Suddenly, an alarm went off, and the florescent light began lashing red! Goldie could hear a woman’s voice coming from outside the room.

“Please evacuate this building immediately. This building is set to self-destruct in approximately 2 minutes.”

Goldie tried punching the wall, but it was much too thick. He tried again and again, but he could hardly even dent it. He could hear the woman’s voice again.

“1 minute remaining.”

Will Goldie escape in time?! Find out next time!

Last edited by calebxy (2011-08-16 11:03:46)