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ProgrammingFreak wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

slow, early modest mouse-ish song:

cold shoulder wrote:

Before I leave, I'm going to give you one of my limbs
Can't give you a leg, because I couldn't walk again
My right arm'd be a bad idea
Then I'd have no way to write


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right


I know that the west is the best
But I can't go west on this side of the country
I'd really like to go off to the east
But there's no way to go where I want to be


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right


My friends decide to shun
Right in front of the setting sun
How are you having fun?
Seriously....


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right

Not to be rude, is this a joke? 

In what way?

ProgrammingFreak wrote:

Sorry, just seemed like one. 

i'm not offended at all
the whole arm in the freezer part?

A post-Apply song:

It's Finally Over wrote:

that was a good run
and i'm sad that it's over
but i guess it was about time
seemed four hundred million years long
get the h*ll out was what i wanted to do
but now i really feel bad

i finally made it
but i'm not happy
i got what i wanted
but i'm never happy

i wish those last hours were longer than they were
they were probably the best ones of my life
those last fifteen minutes of a stupid game
i never got to apologise
for everything i did

i finally made it
but i'm not happy
i got what i wanted
but i'm never happy

does that mean i've lost?
is there a way to win?

Nothing To You Now...


The screams, the cries, the pain, the lies

You think he's just another boy
you'll play with him like he's some sort of toy
His torture is never anything new
His being and life means nothing to you

The screams, the cries, the pain, the lies
Why doesn't he stand up for himself?
The screams the cries, the pain, the lies
Just stamp a label on him, and throw him onto the shelf


I'll probably finish this one later too...

Here's another one I wrote recently:

Get A Life by Musicstar888 wrote:

Thought you were my friend
But I have no respect for you
I'm giving you the evil eye
Time for you to say goodbye to me now
You're a traitor
I never should have trusted you
A betrayer
I really should have busted you

CHORUS
Get a life
Get out of my sight
I despise you
With all of my might
Why couldn't
You leave me be
You tried so hard just to embarass me
Get a life.


I honestly didn't know
What to say
When you took my secret
And gave it away
You're so darn stupid
Didn't you know how I felt
Trying to be perfect
You failed to make me melt

CHORUS

There's more, but I sorta forgot the lyrics, XD

What do you people think?

When I look into your eyes
My heart flutters and flies
I'm soaring now I'm close to you

But then I fall back down to Earth
I know that things just can't be worse
'Cause I SEE, (yeah) that you can never be mine...

Like the fruit on the trees of Eden
You are unreasonably forbidden
'Cause of that girl who's on your arm...

[Chorus]

I must take her down
'Cos she ripped out my heart
And I can't help but frown
I knew it from the start
She is your number one
You guys just go have fun
Lying together in the sun
Because I have a life
I'll simply live with the strife

I see you hand-in-hand
And I can't understand
How you can fail to realise
When you look in my eyes
How much I care
I think I'd die if you weren't there
Yet you just carry on (I can't carry on)
Carry on...

[Chorus x2]

Wrote in a few minutes of boredom xD It's a slow ballad about a girl who likes a boy who is dating.

Bulletproof Rose

So here I stand
A loaded pistol in one hand
Wondering how the hell I've lasted for this long...
I hold the barrel to my head
A sense of fear and regret
These tears running from my eyes
The grief is so hard to disguise

[Chorus, strong drum beat]
I am crying
Because I'm just so sick of trying
I am crying
Because I know inside I'm dying
I am crying
Because I know that you were lying
I am crying
Crying
'Cos it's the end of a chapter
Not a happy ever after
I'm gonna pull the trigger, trigger, eh eh eh
Trigger, trigger, eh eh eh


[Spoken]
Baby, I love you.
I've never felt this way before.
I'm so deeply in love,
I know that, babe, for sure.
Darling, I'll never let you leave my sight,
So come home with me and spend the night...

So now I take the gun,
Send my prayers up to the sun,
Count three two one...
Three two one, three two one...
But the deed is not yet done

I feel an ocean of regret
Wash over and make me upset
Those sour memories I can't forget
The scars aren't even healed yet...

[Chorus]

Oooohh, you made my heart sing out
Oooohh, yet now I start to doubt...
Nooooo, you never really cared
I don't care
I don't care
I care...

[Chorus]

BANG

The_Dancing_Donut wrote:

Bump ^^ Critique on the 2nd one?

erm...

they're too... uhh... soppy for my tastes

Here's one of the first songs I wrote, so it's not that great.
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Chorus

Cuz I got Aces
And you ain't a queen
I have fun
And you make scenes
You call me AJ
I call you honey
You got a man
But I got money
Cuz I got Aces, Aces, Aces
Man I got Aces, Aces, Aces
All I got is Aces, Aces, Aces
I’m playing Aces…Aces

Verse 1

Aces, that’s what I’m playin
When I’m out at night
And that’s what I’m sayin
I’m gonna be home at 12 or 3
It doesn’t really matter cuz you ignore me
Say my name, say it twice
Do you even know it
Or did you lose it in
The city’s bright lights
Cuz I drive a pickup, she drives Mercedes
She’s got friends, but I got ladies
She walks red carpets, I take the sidewalk
She’s full of chatter, but she doesn’t wanna talk
I’ve got lovin, and she’s got nothing
But when I come around
She acts like she’s so stuntin
I’m not tryin to diss, and I’m not tryin to whine
She’s over me
But she ain’t over mine
I wanna break free, cuz I’m doin time
In my prison of grief, it’s sour like a lime
Is this proof of love, or is this proof of hate
Either way I’m leaving
I’m finding a new mate
You can search all day, but all you’ll find is traces
Cuz all we doin is playin Aces

(Chorus)

Verse 2

Go search and find whatcha lookin for
Maybe it’s close, maybe it’s right outside the door
Maybe you’ve found it, it might be right in front of you
Waitin for you to tell him what is the real truth
This is my reality, now leave and find your own
Just like when you left me, you was already gone
You’re a devil and a witch, an expert at the trade
You act so flashy, but then you just fade
Why don’t we talk, talk real long
Talk about our feelings, and why they ain’t strong
I’m no longer in love, in love with you
Cuz you’re full of lies, I don’t what’s true
It doesn’t have to hurt when I’m seein these faces
All I’m doin is runnin and playing Aces

(Chorus)

Verse 3

Now my love is done, and I’m gone for good
Now get outta my life, I’m tryin to be rude
I’m playin Aces, I ain't your king
Look down at your hand, there ain't no ring

Aces, Aces, that’s what I’m playin
Aces, Aces, that’s what I’m sayin
Aces, Aces, this isn’t wrong
Aces, Aces, my love is gone

(Chorus)