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veggieman001 wrote:

Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ahhhh...

Your date was all wrong
Your prophets are frauds
Computers didn't fail in 2000

But what about that
does make you believe
that there is no other time?

Y2K is a myth
but just if
2012 wasn't the end of the world

You would just see
how right I would be
in the year 2048

The power of two
which computers use
would be the doom of them all

Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ahhhh... Ah.

That's my song "Y2K". It'll be on my album that will be released in the next couple months.

I imagine that as a Weird Al-esque acoustic song. 

Myself I wrote some lyrics for "Trip to the Ol' Country", a great song I made long time ago which you can listen to here. I wanted to remake it but never got around to it. D: Maybe I could make a whole EP as a remake of the whole song pack it was in, that'd be awesome. 

It's kind of awkward without music...

Musicstar888 wrote:

I wrote many songs. Here's one:

To Have Your Heart Broken by Musicstar888 wrote:

Is there a way
To get myself out
Of this roller coaster
That can't slow down
Now a piece of me is gone
And there's nothing I can do
I wonder what the problem was
Between me and you

I can't get you outta my head
Though you were so heartless

CHORUS
To have your heart broken
Is nothing you would know
To have your heart broken
Left out in the cold
To have your heart broken
I never thought
That having your heart broken
Would be so hard

Slamming the door
In the shadows I creep
I can't do this anymore
Its deserted me
I'm thinking to myself
Why you were with me anyway
Seems like we were made for each other
But that's not the case

I can't get you outta my head
Though you were so heartless

CHORUS x3
REPEAT 1st verse quietly

Please DO NOT COPY THIS. I worked hard on it and I really don't want people to sing it except me (I know, I sound selfish, but my band's music is NOT copyrighted yet, so anyone could just sing it and take credit for it.) We've also written many more songs...
Anyway, any feedback?

*jawdrop*
That was... AWESOME!!! 
I'll add it to the 'gallery' at the top later today! 

My voice is too gruff and manly to sing
Whenever I talk, puppies cry

Blade-Edge wrote:

My voice is too gruff and manly to sing
Whenever I talk, puppies cry

*sob* what do you *sob* mean Blade *sob* Edge?
Did I mentioned *sob*?

Sorry but, it reminds me of the usual Pop trash.

If you want a music carrer then you should write punk rock, classic rock and the like.

1! By 1! We loaded our guns! On th- *ahem* I mean...I don't know any songs. >_>

i'm more of a rapper
in fact, i just improv'd myself a rap after reading this thread

sometimes i picture me with a nice guitar
singing up there on a stage like some big old star
but every time i write these words they sound so cheesy
even though they all come and go real breezy
so i'll just wait and practice some chords
drum up a beat that i can afford
make myself a rhythm; a rap or two
and then i'll decide on what to do

[sucky 8-second guitar solo that consists of three notes played in random order repeatedly]

them beats are all over-used (boo)
this idiocity is unexcused (boo)
[high mocking-like voice] i think my song is really swell![/voice] (boo)
[ok i removed this line for er censoring issues] (i agree)

[high voice again]okay okay i see your point here
but i'm just a kid so you shouldn't make me fear!
i mean i think i sound pretty great, the world's gonna love me
i really am talented, i just don't think you see
i've got a dream here and so do you
plus my mom said i'm really good too
[/voice]

i mean a writing a song about something you've never even been through
it's so amazing right, ain't something that i could do!
and it's all so original too!
man don't i wish that i could be just like you!

[high voice] you know what? my feelings are kind of hurt![/voice]
you know what? your song reminds me of dirt
composed together with some trash and waste
with a base that goes all over the place

[high voice]i don't think i like that comparison[/voice]
i can compare what i want, i'm american
[high voice]i don't think thats relevant[/voice]
i think your mom's related to an elephant
[high voice]okay now you're just being mean[/voice]
hey all i'm doing is setting the scene

picture it

your song goes viral
and it's spread all over the web in some kind of spiral
they don't like it; you're in denial
you try to ignore it, move on and just smile
but with the dislikes, the comments, the hate
all these people out there just trying to degrade
you snap like the little baby you are
you're famous, but you're far from being a star

wouldn't that be a wake up call?
you're not special
now stop this songwriting nonsense
go play hopscotch or jump a fence
because your beats are really lame
and just reading them is shame

but hey if you really are good then great
but watch out for the kids like me who just hate B]

so inspiring right

fullmoon wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

(Six-minute song)

In the time it took you to write that, you could have ignored this topic completely and made yourself a delicious triple-decker sandwich or whatever it is kids do these days. Please don't insult people who are trying to do something creative and constructive, even if you don't like what they've produced. There's an old Chinese proverb that goes, "The people who say that it is impossible should not interrupt the person doing it."

i have a feeling you didn't actually read the whole thing
because the moral of the song is to not let people bring you down, as stated in the last two lines

-iNetMaster- wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

[my rap, removed for quoting purposes because it is kind of long]

so inspiring right

That was amazing.

why yes
yes it was
thank you

sanddude wrote:

Musicstar888 wrote:

I wrote many songs. Here's one:

To Have Your Heart Broken by Musicstar888 wrote:

Is there a way
To get myself out
Of this roller coaster
That can't slow down
Now a piece of me is gone
And there's nothing I can do
I wonder what the problem was
Between me and you

I can't get you outta my head
Though you were so heartless

CHORUS
To have your heart broken
Is nothing you would know
To have your heart broken
Left out in the cold
To have your heart broken
I never thought
That having your heart broken
Would be so hard

Slamming the door
In the shadows I creep
I can't do this anymore
Its deserted me
I'm thinking to myself
Why you were with me anyway
Seems like we were made for each other
But that's not the case

I can't get you outta my head
Though you were so heartless

CHORUS x3
REPEAT 1st verse quietly

Please DO NOT COPY THIS. I worked hard on it and I really don't want people to sing it except me (I know, I sound selfish, but my band's music is NOT copyrighted yet, so anyone could just sing it and take credit for it.) We've also written many more songs...
Anyway, any feedback?

One of the best song I've heard on here! =D

Thanks! I would really like to put a recording on our website, but we have to wait because our music isn't copyrighted so someone could just steal it! But they cannot if they don't have the music. Heh heh. >:D

Last edited by Musicstar888 (2011-03-24 18:58:13)

Musicstar888 wrote:

ProgrammingFreak wrote:

Musicstar888 wrote:

I wrote many songs. Here's one:

Please DO NOT COPY THIS. I worked hard on it and I really don't want people to sing it except me (I know, I sound selfish, but my band's music is NOT copyrighted yet, so anyone could just sing it and take credit for it.) We've also written many more songs...
Anyway, any feedback?

*jawdrop*
That was... AWESOME!!! 
I'll add it to the 'gallery' at the top later today! 

Seriously?????Wow. I didn't really know.....I'm not being modest, I really didn't know that people would drop their jaws at my song.....

I thought that was good. 

BUmp.

slow, early modest mouse-ish song:

cold shoulder wrote:

Before I leave, I'm going to give you one of my limbs
Can't give you a leg, because I couldn't walk again
My right arm'd be a bad idea
Then I'd have no way to write


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right


I know that the west is the best
But I can't go west on this side of the country
I'd really like to go off to the east
But there's no way to go where I want to be


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right


My friends decide to shun
Right in front of the setting sun
How are you having fun?
Seriously....


Well, I'd be giving you the cold shoulder
if I decided to give you my shoulder
because I left my arm in the freezer last night

Well, I don't know which way to go
Is one way better than the other?
I guess you can't go wrong with left or right