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Kileymeister wrote:
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
Kileymeister wrote:
He was too tired and didn't bother to check the sides of the house. It was only once he was inside that he decided to look around.But with a cabin so small, while he was walking towards it he should have seen them.
xD just realized the reason I didn't get it- when the story said paintings, I imagined golden framed, single-backgrounded paintings.It doesn't say the cabin was small, and maybe the people only showed up after he went inside. It's a story, don't question it. (Or the people will visit you)
Or quite possibly, considering its a "ghost" story, it might've been the people who used to live there before being brutally murdered
aren't I a ray of sunshine?
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08jackt wrote:
(!) i found a good one after like 20 minutes of searching.
"The last man on Earth sat alone in a room. There was a knock on the door..."
Thats it, it was just some stupid kid playing tok tokki.
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This might suck, but it's my first attempt to write a scary story:
There once was a lady named Julie. She lived in a small house in the bad part of town. One night, she heard a thunking noise coming from the wall. She was single and had no kids nor pets, so she put down her Kindle to go check it out. She was very caustious becuase many gangsters and people who had escaped from jail usually hid in that part of town from the police. Anyway, she crept through the kitchen and looked around the living room. The thunking was loudest there. She flickedon the light and looked around. No one was there. She looked behind all the couches and chairs. The thunking continued. Something brushed against her and she whipped around to see nothing. By then she was really frightened. She picked up the phone and dialed 911. "Hello?" She said, "Hello?" Silence. The line was dead. Suddenly a voice picked up. "Move out, now," It growled, sending Julie's heart pounding, "This house is mine now." Evil laugher echoed in the hall. Julie quickly hung up the phone. She got ready to dash to the door. Before running, she turned back and glanced at the telephone.
The line had been cut.
OK, it might be hard to understand but the demon that was in her house was on the phone-but the line had already been cut.
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Hunter and the portriat one scared the * outta me

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Joan was a pretty old woman. Her husband was passed away and she had no kids. One night the phone rang. She picked it up. "I'm coming for you," it said. She hung up, thinking it was a prank call. She got the call three more times. When she hung up the last time, she caught sight of the line. It was cut.
Might have to read it a couple times to get it.
I may be horrible, it's my first try

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DisasterMaster wrote:
Joan was a pretty old woman. Her husband was passed away and she had no kids. One night the phone rang. She picked it up. "I'm coming for you," it said. She hung up, thinking it was a prank call. She got the call three more times. When she hung up the last time, she caught sight of the line. It was cut.
Might have to read it a couple times to get it.
I may be horrible, it's my first try
You need a climax. All there was was a resolution. Also, go into more detail. Maybe the voice sounds like her husband's? Just do that and you can make a great scary story.
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didn't expect the ending

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phht, there's nothing weird about being all white and having red eyes. They must be albino. (Nothing wrong with being albino either, so don't reply to this about what I just said.) The real weird thing is that the ghost was peeking through the door too, now I'm getting overscared about ghosts now. xD O^O; Window one was surprising but not as shocking as the first one. third one is overall scary, it's just too monstery. o3o
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There's really no shocking ending. This wasn't creepy. At all.
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