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#1 2011-01-16 11:17:32
- Sunrise-Moon
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Reverse Zombie Story
Not long, nothing bad in it. Please tell me of any improvements that'd make the story better or spelling/grammatical errors. And yes, the story is currently unfinished.
It all started when a stranger entered town. He walked into town howling with pain and screaming "Don't let me infect them! Take me to a hospital! Don't let me infect them!" He would have been taken for a lunatic if not for his appearance- he was completely disfigured from what looked like severe burns on his face and arms. Someone called an ambulance for the man, but everyone kept their distance from him. The stranger died the day after, but the image of him standing there screaming with pain was seared in witnesses' mind. Soon, a newspaper got hold of the story, and people began to wonder whether the stranger's yellings might have held an ounce of truth.
Within a day, the paramedics and doctors who had been in contact with him became outcasts. The fear that they might have "infected" others spread quickly. The government soon heard the story, and realized they had a foothold in the people. They set up booths around the city. Everyone was required to visit the booths to check if they were infected. Of course, the first ones to become "infected" were political rivals of those currently in office. The mafia got involved and put up more booths to take out rival mobs peacefully. Finally, the town erupted into uproar as the booths stopped taking orders from their overseers, and began taking "requests" for money.
The "Infected Ones", as they were now called, were quarantined in great numbers inside mental facilities. Their living conditions were dire, and many died quickly. The uninfected took this to be just another sign that the Infected Ones were truly sick. Some Infected Ones escaped the-now-overflowing mental hospitals, so the government quickly quarantined the entire city, having armed guards at nearly all exits. Inevitably, the Infected Ones managed to slip out of the city, hoping to find another city that might see that they were simply normal people. The cities they fled to simply rejected them and began the same horrible procedures as the first city.
By now, the earth seemed to forget it's wars and troubles for a time so as to fight against the Infected Ones. This is where our story truly begins.
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#3 2011-01-16 11:26:30
- Kileymeister
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Oh, I thought this was going to be a story about a world of zombies fighting the infectious "human" menace, but this sounds much better.
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#4 2011-01-16 11:31:02
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
PW132 wrote:
I want a Reverse zombie story IN SPAAAAAAAAAAACE plz.
No. Reverse Zombie Story on the suuuuuuuuuuuun instead.
HOORAY FOR BURNING FLESH!
Kileymeister wrote:
Oh, I thought this was going to be a story about a world of zombies fighting the infectious "human" menace, but this sounds much better.
Thank you 
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#5 2011-01-16 19:31:07
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I don't get the "Reverse" part.
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#6 2011-01-16 19:32:21
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
helltank wrote:
I don't get the "Reverse" part.
The Infected Ones aren't actually infected by anything. Yes, I know, I didn't make that completely clear in the story, but I'll elaborate on that part later on.
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#7 2011-01-16 19:41:11
- MoreGamesNow
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Great idea! Sounds like "The Crucible" and a classic zombie story mixed together with some "Bubonic Plague" mayhem and crowds panicking. I can't wait to see the next chapter (assuming you continue it).
From my (almost non-existent) experience of writing a story it'll be a struggle to maintain the suspense you've created. But then, I've only written the openings to two stories, neither of which have continued, so I have almost no experience in this sort of thing.
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#8 2011-01-16 20:19:59
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
MoreGamesNow wrote:
Great idea! Sounds like "The Crucible" and a classic zombie story mixed together with some "Bubonic Plague" mayhem and crowds panicking. I can't wait to see the next chapter (assuming you continue it).
From my (almost non-existent) experience of writing a story it'll be a struggle to maintain the suspense you've created. But then, I've only written the openings to two stories, neither of which have continued, so I have almost no experience in this sort of thing.
Did I create suspense? xD I didn't really realize I had. Anyways, you don't need suspense all throughout a story. Just certain parts and at the end of some chapters to hold the reader.
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#9 2011-01-17 16:51:34
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Bumpulous
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#10 2011-01-17 17:01:18
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
helltank wrote:
I don't get the "Reverse" part.
The Infected Ones aren't actually infected by anything. Yes, I know, I didn't make that completely clear in the story, but I'll elaborate on that part later on.
Elaborate NAO
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#11 2011-01-17 17:08:01
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
agscratcher wrote:
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
helltank wrote:
I don't get the "Reverse" part.
The Infected Ones aren't actually infected by anything. Yes, I know, I didn't make that completely clear in the story, but I'll elaborate on that part later on.
Elaborate NAO
Actually, just reread my story and realized it sounds as though the only people who were "infected" were the original paramedics and doctors. All the other Infected Ones were just accused of being infected so they'd die or become outcasts or whatever.
The infection was supposed to be completely false, not partly true. I guess I'll just have to elaborate on that part instead.
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#12 2011-01-17 17:39:55
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
agscratcher wrote:
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
The Infected Ones aren't actually infected by anything. Yes, I know, I didn't make that completely clear in the story, but I'll elaborate on that part later on.
Elaborate NAO
Actually, just reread my story and realized it sounds as though the only people who were "infected" were the original paramedics and doctors. All the other Infected Ones were just accused of being infected so they'd die or become outcasts or whatever.
The infection was supposed to be completely false, not partly true. I guess I'll just have to elaborate on that part instead.
However, I think it's odd how violently people are reacting to this threat. We don't even react that badly to real threats.
If you can come up with a solid reason for them to really panic for no reason you're golden.
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#13 2011-01-17 17:51:29
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Kileymeister wrote:
Sunrise-Moon wrote:
agscratcher wrote:
Elaborate NAOActually, just reread my story and realized it sounds as though the only people who were "infected" were the original paramedics and doctors. All the other Infected Ones were just accused of being infected so they'd die or become outcasts or whatever.
The infection was supposed to be completely false, not partly true. I guess I'll just have to elaborate on that part instead.However, I think it's odd how violently people are reacting to this threat. We don't even react that badly to real threats.
If you can come up with a solid reason for them to really panic for no reason you're golden.
If I came up with a reason for them to panic for no reason then they'd be panicking for a reason, in which case, the world would be sucked into an alternate dimension in which it explodes.
Anyways, I'll try to think of something that'd work.
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#14 2011-01-17 20:17:44
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
Ooh, how about a creepy backstory about this town once being an apocalyptic wasteland after a zombie attack, and after decades of safety, that guy thinks he sees another and thats why people accept it and go crazy. It's happened before.
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#15 2011-01-17 20:36:32
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Re: Reverse Zombie Story
soupoftomato wrote:
Ooh, how about a creepy backstory about this town once being an apocalyptic wasteland after a zombie attack, and after decades of safety, that guy thinks he sees another and thats why people accept it and go crazy. It's happened before.
I wanted it to be more of a complete false alarm in that zombies never existed in this world.
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