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Introduce as a friend and then backstab

rufflebee wrote:

A backstory about his childhood
Yesss

Tom Riddle (from Harry Potter) FTW. 
Even though he wasn't really introduced by his backstory... Eh. XD

Last edited by All4one (2010-11-18 10:40:49)

All4one wrote:

I think the best way to introduce a villain is to make your readers think he/she's just a typical character in the story, and then by the end of the book, you can reveal the character as it's evil self. Sound good?

Yes, that does sound good.    But that is a completely different approach to how I did it.
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Chapter 7


Peter, inside his half space ship, was pulled up into the Mother Ship. He watched as the hatch beneath him closed, stopping all hope of escape. The beam then slowly lowered him onto the floor. Peter looked around him in amazement as the half space ship he was in began to vanish right before his eyes. And then, as quickly as it had begun, it was gone.

Peter heard a noise coming from above him. He looked up, and saw five holes in the ceiling 200 feet above, forming a circle. Suddenly, five things came falling down from the holes! They were humanoid in shape, but they were covered in metal armor, which made them look very robotic. They all hit the ground at the same time, with a very loud bang! In the middle of the holes in the ceiling, a circular platform dropped to the ground. There was a young man standing on it. He had a black cloak with a hood on him. He smiled at Peter.

“Hello,” he said.

Peter looked at him, puzzled.

     “Who are you?” Peter demanded.
     “I’m Zaracothco,” he replied.
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That';s how I did it. 

Last edited by Calebxy_Test (2010-11-18 11:03:28)

Thank you. 

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All4one wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

A backstory about his childhood
Yesss

Tom Riddle (from Harry Potter) FTW. 
Even though he wasn't really introduced by his backstory... Eh. XD

I've never read Harry Potter
So I wouldn't know

Hm... introduce them as a major threat through having them throw a knife into one of the charries' back or something.

Star_the_fox wrote:

Hm... introduce them as a major threat through having them throw a knife into one of the charries' back or something.

By the way, what do you think of that part of my story?

juststickman wrote:

Calebxy_Test wrote:

Star_the_fox wrote:

Hm... introduce them as a major threat through having them throw a knife into one of the charries' back or something.

I don't have killing in my stories.

Why 

You'd kill me if I told you.

Calebxy_Test wrote:

Star_the_fox wrote:

Hm... introduce them as a major threat through having them throw a knife into one of the charries' back or something.

I don't have killing in my stories.

Doesn't have to KILL the character, just injure them.

Star_the_fox wrote:

Calebxy_Test wrote:

Star_the_fox wrote:

Hm... introduce them as a major threat through having them throw a knife into one of the charries' back or something.

I don't have killing in my stories.

Doesn't have to KILL the character, just injure them.

if there is no killing in the story he might as well write kids' books.
"I think I can, I think I can, I think I can..."

With fog and like that guy in black ops preview... then have like troopers arest the good guys