Peter and Jeff were in Wales, on the beach, running on top of the rocks. Their parents were slowly walking along the bottom of the hill next to them. Even though Peter and Jeff were wearing shoes, they could still feel that the rocks were sharp and spiky. Their dad had told them that those were the oldest rocks on Earth.
“Hey, wait for me!” Peter shouted at Jeff.
He was running a lot faster than Peter. Jeff slowed down very slightly for half a second and then continued running at full speed. Peter jumped down from the rocks and walked along the sand. He noticed a strange pattern in the sand, which was at least 20 meters long and almost 10 meters wide. The pattern looked like the gills of a giant fish type creature. He prodded it with his foot. It was definitely just sand. Peter continued walking towards Jeff.
“Peter!” shouted Jeff. He was waving his arms in the air and jumping up and down.
Peter broke into a sprint, jumping on the rocks and over the gaps.
“What’s the matter?” he asked, as he finally got to Jeff.
He pointed at the rock next to the rock they were standing on.
“Look at that,” he said, still pointing. Peter was puzzled. It was a flat rock, with strange symbols on it, like some sort of alien language.
Peter was startled as his iPhone rang. He reached into his pocket and took it out.
“Hello,” he said into the phone after answering it.
“Hello Peter,” replied his mum. He looked over into the distance and saw his parents standing on the hill.
“We’re going to go and see if we can find a shop. Do you want to come with us, or stay here for a while?”
“We’ll stay here,” Peter answered, keeping his focus on the strange rock.
“Okay then. We’ll see you soon, bye.”
Peter put his phone back in his pocket. He bent down and pressed his hand against one of the symbols. All the symbols glowed bright blue. Suddenly, they all started whizzing around the rock so rapidly that they became just a blur. Peter and Jeff watched in mixed amazement and fear. In the most sudden deceleration either of them had ever seen, all of the symbols stopped moving and went back to their original places. A beam of blue light erupted from the centre of the rock and curved towards the ground. The sand turned dark brown. The ground began shaking, like there was something moving under the ground. Jeff jumped off the rocks and onto the ‘sand’, which oddly felt like rough skin.
“Come on!” he shouted at Peter, who was still standing on the rocks.
Peter jumped off and immediately fell over when he landed on the shaking ground. It was like an earthquake! They both ran towards the hill as fast as they could. They dodged the tumbling rocks and boulders. Peter guessed that there was some kind of enormous creature in the ground. The creature slowly began rising up out of the ground. It wriggled as hard as it could to get out. The dark brown ground came to an end and they were both now running on normal sand. There was a small cliff in between the beach and the hill, with a rope attached to the top. It hung down right to the bottom of the cliff.
“We have to climb up this,” Jeff said.
Fortunately, the cliff wasn’t completely vertical, so that made it easier to climb. Jeff started climbing it. Peter looked around and realized that the dark brown creature made up quite a lot of the beach. It must have been little less than a kilometer long. It was almost half way out of the ground now. Peter turned around to face the rope. He grabbed it and climbed up. There was a fence at the top, which Jeff was already over. Peter vaulted the fence and continued running up the hill.
Suddenly, there was a terrifyingly loud noise as the creature threw itself out of the ground, sending the rock flying. They both turned around and saw the strange rock flying through the air and into the sea. Now they could see the whole creature. It looked like a giant enormous lizard. It swung its head round and looked at them. It was so big, that even though the centre of its body was at least a few hundred meters away, its head was only a few meters away from them.
Peter and Jeff both turned and ran. Suddenly, Jeff seemed to evaporate into thin air. The creature lurched forward at Peter with its mouth wide open ready to eat. Peter dived on the ground, narrowly missing being eaten. He rolled to one side, got up and ran forward. The creature also ran forward. It jumped up high over the small cliff and landed in front of Peter. It turned around to face him, but his massive head knocked him away.
Peter landed on his back, next to a gap in the fence and tumbled towards the edge of the cliff. He rolled off the edge of the cliff, but just managed to grab the edge. The giant creature walked towards Peter and looked down at him, with his huge head looming over the edge…
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Bump?
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I thought that this would be more popular than the first chapter.
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Thank you.
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Anyone?
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I mean seriously! There were lots of posts in the chapter 1 thread!
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calebxy wrote:
I mean seriously! There were lots of posts in the chapter 1 thread!
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Maybe the fact that you have to buy the rest of the book is turning people off?
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steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
I mean seriously! There were lots of posts in the chapter 1 thread!
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Maybe the fact that you have to buy the rest of the book is turning people off?
I'm just asking for opinions about my book.
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calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
I mean seriously! There were lots of posts in the chapter 1 thread!
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Maybe the fact that you have to buy the rest of the book is turning people off?
I'm just asking for opinions about my book.
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Well you got positive ratings on the first chapter. They probably aren't posting because they already rated the first part?
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steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
Maybe the fact that you have to buy the rest of the book is turning people off?I'm just asking for opinions about my book.
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Well you got positive ratings on the first chapter. They probably aren't posting because they already rated the first part?
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Maybe. But what do you think about it? Do you like it?
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calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
I'm just asking for opinions about my book.![]()
Well you got positive ratings on the first chapter. They probably aren't posting because they already rated the first part?
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Maybe. But what do you think about it? Do you like it?
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I think it's pretty good
Most people your age don't have the imagination to make a book like this.
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steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
Well you got positive ratings on the first chapter. They probably aren't posting because they already rated the first part?![]()
Maybe. But what do you think about it? Do you like it?
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I think it's pretty good
Most people your age don't have the imagination to make a book like this.
I've been told that I have a brilliant imagination!
And thank you.
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calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
Maybe. But what do you think about it? Do you like it?
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I think it's pretty good
Most people your age don't have the imagination to make a book like this.
I've been told that I have a brilliant imagination!
And thank you.
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You do. And you're welcome
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steppenwulf wrote:
calebxy wrote:
steppenwulf wrote:
I think it's pretty good
Most people your age don't have the imagination to make a book like this.
I've been told that I have a brilliant imagination!
And thank you.
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You do. And you're welcome
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Thanks again!
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Ace-Of-Diamonds wrote:
Is the book similar to the game?
Yes. But the game is based on the first book.
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calebxy wrote:
Ace-Of-Diamonds wrote:
Is the book similar to the game?
Yes. But the game is based on the first book.
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So you're calling the first chapter the first book and the second chapter the second when they're about a page long?
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Ace-Of-Diamonds wrote:
calebxy wrote:
Ace-Of-Diamonds wrote:
Is the book similar to the game?
Yes. But the game is based on the first book.
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So you're calling the first chapter the first book and the second chapter the second when they're about a page long?
There was a first book.
He forgot to put Magic Bath 2 in the title.
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soupoftomato wrote:
Ace-Of-Diamonds wrote:
calebxy wrote:
Yes. But the game is based on the first book.![]()
So you're calling the first chapter the first book and the second chapter the second when they're about a page long?
There was a first book.
He forgot to put Magic Bath 2 in the title.
Ah yes!
Do you like it?
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Anyone else?
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Bump.
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Well the thread's been cleared by Caleb. A moderator can close this now.
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Uh... what? Re-opened?
Caleb's still lurking around, I guess
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