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You might want to delete this topic before handing it in though.

rufflebee wrote:

Actually, it may be a good idea to keep this up, in case he has to prove that he was the original author of his essay.

steppenwulf wrote:

Many young, middle aged and elderly people are regularly seen walking, jogging, or biking along it.

Maybe you should change it to "People of all ages are regularly seen walking, jogging, or biking along it." or something like that.

Or it may lead his teacher to here where he's posting an essay online, and asking for critiques from people.

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rufflebee wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

Or it may lead his teacher to here where he's posting an essay online, and asking for critiques from people.

Is there something wrong with that?

Well generally you wouldn't get help on essays, even if he's not really asking for help.

rufflebee wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

Is there something wrong with that?

Well generally you wouldn't get help on essays, even if he's not really asking for help.

Are there any rules against this? If not, I'd advise to leave this up. If there are, then I'd still say to leave this up. It'd be quite dishonest to delete it because it was against the rules 

Well it's not really against the rules, but it can and will be used against him at any time in the future if he ever does do something academicly dishonest or is suspected of it. And for that you can get kicked out of school and they warn other schools about you.

I'm sure they'd go easier on him because he's young and only starting and probably not mention it. But only probably, so it's probably best to delete it.

rufflebee wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

I'm sure they'd go easier on him because he's young and only starting and probably not mention it. But only probably, so it's probably best to delete it.

Isn't appearing to have stolen an essay worse than asking for critique? I still say to leave this up.

What exactly are you talking about? Why would they think he stole this essay? That's the basis of your argument. They won't. But if they find that more than 10% of the words in his essay can be found online, he's in deep.

rufflebee wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

Isn't appearing to have stolen an essay worse than asking for critique? I still say to leave this up.

What exactly are you talking about? Why would they think he stole this essay? That's the basis of your argument. They won't. But if they find that more than 10% of the words in his essay can be found online, he's in deep.

Well, if he deletes this, and for some reason he needs to prove that he wrote this (And since he did post it on the internet, he may have to) then the times on this thread would show that he wrote it.

It's a first day assignment. 350 words. He will never have to prove he wrote it. If it's on the internet however, he's screwed.

steppenwulf wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

Well, if he deletes this, and for some reason he needs to prove that he wrote this (And since he did post it on the internet, he may have to) then the times on this thread would show that he wrote it.

It's a first day assignment. 350 words. He will never have to prove he wrote it. If it's on the internet however, he's screwed.

Actually, I only used about 10 words that came from suggestions. The rest were my own. And I am going to delete it today because I have to turn it in. Also I remember that you posted a bunch of trig questions on the forums for us to solve because you were too lazy to solve them atm xD

Btw thanks for all the help everyone 

Actually I had to go so I solved them all anyways. I wasn't saying that whatever you're doing here was immoral or something like that, I'm just trying explain about it to rufflebee.

Gawd, you're so lucky! 

I only get to write essays once a month. 

steppenwulf wrote:

iCode-747 wrote:

Gawd, you're so lucky! 

I only get to write essays once a month. 

I rarely ever had to write essays before, but I have 3 more essays to write atm    All of them only have to be just a page.

You'll have to write about 150 essays for the whole course I think. I hate English almost as much as I hate the baseball team at my school (a lot)

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

steppenwulf wrote:

iCode-747 wrote:

Gawd, you're so lucky! 

I only get to write essays once a month. 

I rarely ever had to write essays before, but I have 3 more essays to write atm    All of them only have to be just a page.

You'll have to write about 150 essays for the whole course I think. I hate English almost as much as I hate the baseball team at my school (a lot)

I never wanted to be in this class anyway, I was forced into it. I thought I would hate it, and surprise surprise, I hate it -.-

And why do you hate the baseball team?

steppenwulf wrote:

Ace-of-Spades wrote:

steppenwulf wrote:

I rarely ever had to write essays before, but I have 3 more essays to write atm    All of them only have to be just a page.

You'll have to write about 150 essays for the whole course I think. I hate English almost as much as I hate the baseball team at my school (a lot)

I never wanted to be in this class anyway, I was forced into it. I thought I would hate it, and surprise surprise, I hate it -.-

And why do you hate the baseball team?

Because they're the worst team in the district (okay, almost) and they act like they're the best because there's a kid who's dad is a committee member and he puts funding into the club. They have good equipment but they barely practice. Also baseball is the most boring sport to watch.

I'll edit. Of course, use your own judgment about what you want to change.

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steppenwulf wrote:

The wulf
Eng 111F
24/8/2010
[This looks like an MLA style heading. Is it? If so, I've been taught that for MLA, the correct format for date is to type the month: 24 August 2010. You might want to make sure you have what your teacher wants.]
A day at the Bert Ferguson Park
   
    When you come to the Bert Ferguson Park, you can expect a very relaxing environment.  The park is very spacious, and has a smooth concrete walking trail dotted with young pines and colorful crepe myrtles that extends throughout the entire park. Many young, middle aged and elderly people are regularly seen walking, jogging, or biking along it. You will also find people lounging in the shade, while others will bask in the warmth of the sunlight. On weekends, the sounds of competition fill the air when people have friendly duels on the tennis courts and soccer fields. Although During the weekly baseball games, the sounds of baseball coaches yelling instructions to their players, parents cheering their children on, and the crack of baseball bats connecting with the ball are the loudest.   
   

The playground is the favorite area of children trying with all their might to swing over the top of the swing and runing around playing hide and seek. On the jungle gym, they swing from bar to bar, go through tunnels, slideing down poles, and screaming. On a hot summer day, all of the laughing and playing is replaced by screaming, as they realize how hot the jungle gym is. [I don't quite get that last sentence. Is it necessary?] In the large gazebo nearby, parents enjoy striking up conversations, eating, relaxing and enjoying the calm breeze, all while watching their children. The gazebo overlooks the rest of the park, and if you are in it at the right time, you can see the entire park, while sun the sun illuminates the horizon in the background.     
   

At night, the walking trail is even more relaxing, with the cool night air blowing against your face, and lights guiding you along. The crickets interrupt the silence of the night. The only sights to see will be the light poles, trees swaying with the wind, cars in the distance, and the shadows of distant objects hidden in the darkness.

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