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#1 2010-08-11 20:45:05

shugocharafan88
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My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

The rain was coming down, more than ever.
A good day to be sick, which I was.
I had an extremely ugly fever of 104.5 degrees....
Laying in bed, I looked up at Japan-niichan. He smiled.
That smile......reminded me of the old days.
The happy memories flooded back to me.
But somehow, all that light and warmth........made me cry.
I cried.
"What's wrong?" Japan asked as he wrapped me in his arms.
"Japan?" I asked in sudden silence.
"What?" he asked me.
"This may seem like a stupid question, though.....
Will I die soon?"
Japan chuckled and pulled me in closer.
"No, you're not gonna die....." he said.
"I feel.......dizzy." I said.
I fainted, right into his arms.

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#2 2010-08-11 20:46:06

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Umm.. Would you like me to revise it? There's a couple of grammatical errors.

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#3 2010-08-11 20:46:31

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

RobotKitty wrote:

;facepalm;

Do you really have to be so mean all the time?
P.S. JAPAN DOES NOT APPROVE

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#4 2010-08-11 20:46:50

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

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#5 2010-08-11 20:47:17

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

PW132 wrote:

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

On it!
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#6 2010-08-11 20:47:33

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

rufflebee wrote:

Umm.. Would you like me to revise it? There's a couple of grammatical errors.

Is there?

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#7 2010-08-11 20:49:15

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

shugocharafan88 wrote:

rufflebee wrote:

Umm.. Would you like me to revise it? There's a couple of grammatical errors.

Is there?

Well, really there's one big one that might confuse some people, but besides that it's alright.

shugocharafan88 wrote:

"What's wrong?" Japan asked as he wrapped me in his arms.
"Japan?" I asked in sudden silence.
"What?" he asked me.
"This may seem like a stupid question, though....."
"Will I die soon?"
Japan chuckled and pulled me in closer.
"No, you're not gonna die....." he said.

The blue should be in the same pair of quotation marks, since they're being said by the same person. The dialogue is written in a back and forth way, so that may have confused some people to think that Japan was asking if he was going to die, instead of you saying that.

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#8 2010-08-11 20:50:54

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Seriously, what is she going to fall in love with next? Marty McFly? A Transformer? A pair of pants? This should be a quiz show or something!

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#9 2010-08-11 20:52:01

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

PW132 wrote:

Seriously, what is she going to fall in love with next? Marty McFly? A Transformer? A pair of pants? This should be a quiz show or something!

Ugh.
Well, I say just let her go along with it. She'll eventually realize how pointless this is.
(I hope.)

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#10 2010-08-11 20:52:26

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

So? This is a story
Also, if you had a fever that high, you'd already be dead

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#11 2010-08-11 20:52:33

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

RobotKitty wrote:

We already have a hetalia thread for everything about Hetalia. Here

It's a FAN STORY.

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#12 2010-08-11 20:52:52

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

PW132 wrote:

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

Me too!
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#13 2010-08-11 20:53:50

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Staraptor wrote:

PW132 wrote:

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

Me too!
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/c … parent.png

*falls off chair in lovey-doveyness*

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#14 2010-08-11 20:54:12

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Staraptor wrote:

PW132 wrote:

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

Me too!
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/c … parent.png

*Gets in cannon*
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#15 2010-08-11 20:54:35

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

*tank begins firing*

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#16 2010-08-11 20:55:05

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

RobotKitty wrote:

shugocharafan88 wrote:

RobotKitty wrote:

We already have a hetalia thread for everything about Hetalia. Here

It's a FAN STORY.

So, it's about Hetalia.

That doesn't matter
It still can have it's own thread

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#17 2010-08-11 20:55:25

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

RobotKitty wrote:

shugocharafan88 wrote:

RobotKitty wrote:

We already have a hetalia thread for everything about Hetalia. Here

It's a FAN STORY.

So, it's about Hetalia.

It deserves it's own thread.

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#18 2010-08-11 20:57:03

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Staraptor wrote:

*tank begins firing*

me: NOOOOOOOO!
Japan: MESS WITH MY SISTER AND YOU WILL FACE THE CONCEQUENCES!

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#19 2010-08-11 20:57:34

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

shugocharafan88 wrote:

Staraptor wrote:

PW132 wrote:

NOT AGAIN...Quick stop her before she gets all lovey-dovey again!

Me too!
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/c … parent.png

*falls off chair in lovey-doveyness*

KITT, please run her over.
http://www.bjoern-eberhardt.de/images/SE_kitt.jpg

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#20 2010-08-11 20:57:37

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#21 2010-08-11 20:57:59

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Staraptor wrote:

*tank begins firing*

*fires with*

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#22 2010-08-11 20:59:08

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

shugocharafan88 wrote:

Staraptor wrote:

*tank begins firing*

me: NOOOOOOOO!
Japan: MESS WITH MY SISTER AND YOU WILL FACE THE CONCEQUENCES!

*throws nuclear bomb at japan and fan charecter*

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#23 2010-08-11 20:59:53

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Before this gets any worse:

I'm inclined to let this Hetalia fan story remain in this own thread since the nature of the Hetalia thread is for a different purpose.

i don't also necessary appreciate the hate going on around here: if you're a user not interested in the Hetalia fan stories, then, simply put, do not post comments in here, or better yet, do not read it and simply go to another thread that interests you.

That being said, if, of course, there is something that needs a moderator's/Scratch Team's attention, then you can always report it and/or contact the Scratch Team.

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#24 2010-08-11 21:00:23

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

Animeboy975 wrote:

shugocharafan88 wrote:

Staraptor wrote:

*tank begins firing*

me: NOOOOOOOO!
Japan: MESS WITH MY SISTER AND YOU WILL FACE THE CONCEQUENCES!

*throws nuclear bomb at japan and fan charecter*

Yayz!

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#25 2010-08-11 21:00:24

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Re: My new Hetalia fan story....Prologue

PW132 wrote:

shugocharafan88 wrote:

Staraptor wrote:


Me too!
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/c … parent.png

*falls off chair in lovey-doveyness*

KITT, please run her over.
http://www.bjoern-eberhardt.de/images/SE_kitt.jpg

Japan: *saves*

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