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#1 2010-07-01 18:06:22

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War II: Alive?

Chapter I: Alive? (Narrator: Retelin)

This is how my mischievous brother survived a giant bus explosion:

I was in a bus, and someone from whom seemed like Hunter came to me. He said he was Hunter. He then tried to shoot me. He was actually my other forgotten twin, Pablo, who also hated me for the reason... The reason Hunter hates me. Hunter was driving the bus. Then, Pablo took out a gun. Everyone in the bus and I ran out. Hunter got out, but in camouflage. Then the bus exploded, having Pablo face the fate Hunter should've. I went back home with my sister, Star, and on the way I was promoted to Sergeant. When I got back home, my home was gone. I then realized I was surrounded by Spotters, and I was in the Spotter's area. I then thought of this theory. I also saw Hunter. He told me everything I thought of. Yes, I have a great mind. And so does Hunter, for thinking up such a mischievous, ingenious plan. They acted as if I was promoted to Sergeant so I would feel safer, and I left my gun in the bus. I thought it was the end, but thoughts are only thoughts, are they not? Life is only life, death is only death. I did not know which I would face in a couple of minutes.
"Hello, brother." I said to hunter.
"Hello, traitor." He replied.
"I'm no traitor!" I screamed.
"I'm sure father would call you a traitor!" That thought made me shiver.
"It was an accident! I'm sorry!"
"Sure. Soldiers, get ready!"
"Wait-"
"Get Set." I got my extra pistol, and aimed it at Hunter.
"If anyone kills me, Hunter comes with me." I said.
"...Put your guns down..." Hunter said. Everyone put them down. Hunter had it in his hand, but he wasn't aiming at me. I lowered my gun to talk.
"Fire!" Hunter screamed. Everyone got an extra pistol and shot. I ducked, so every soldier pretty much killed another soldier, leaving Hunter and I alone. Hunter also ducked.
"Everyone... Gone!" Hunter screamed. "Every... My soldiers..." He said. "You... You!" He screamed at me.
"You put this fate upon you, brother." I said, as I pointed my gun at him.
"What will you do?" He said, shivering.
"I will have my revenge. For what happened at T-Force." I said. I shot. It shot his leg. He started screaming. I just started walking away.

Chapter II: Artemis, My love. (Narrator: Hunter)

My idiot brother shot me. I was screaming in pain, while he was just walking away. Some people soon took me to the hospital, where I recovered. Dr. Hyde and a lovely woman named Artemis took care of me until I was fully recovered.
"Hey... Hunter, I want to ask you something." Artemis said.
"Yes, Artemis?" I replied.
"Would you maybe-Would you like to go eat out sometime?" She asked. I was startled by the question.
"I would love to. Where to?" I asked. I tried being as classy as possible.
"Stop acting so... Elegant. It's not like you. Act like yourself, Hunter." She said. "Lets go to... Lets go to that lovely place around the corner, Terci's." She replied.
"That sounds great. I'll pick you up tomorrow, at 7 sharp." I replied.

So I'm riding my car to the hospital. 'Oh man, I'll be a little late.' I thought. I was paranoid about time. I was going to be one minute late. I got there, and picked Artemis up. We then went to the corner. After months, I finally fell in love with her.
I haven't seen my traitor brother for one year. I felt so happy.
"Artemis... I need to ask you something."
"What is it, dear?"
"Would you-Would you marry me?" I proposed.
"Well... This is so sudden." She said.
"Just... just..." Artemis ran out of the room. I started crying. I then went out to find her. The next thing I found was... was...

Chapter III: Family Reunion. (Narrator: Retelin)

"Retelin!" Hunter screamed.
"Yes?" I asked. He pulled out a gun.
"What-What are you doing?" Ayala, our mother, asked Hunter.
"Mother!" Hunter screamed.
"Son... Kids!" She screamed in joy. "Lets go over to your house, Hunter, and we can have a family reunion! We haven't seen for years!" She told us.
"Um..." Hunter was shaking.
"That sounds great, mother!" I said, elbowing Hunter. "Just do as I say and we can pass today without problems." I whispered to him.
"Um... Yes, sure..." Hunter responded, shivering.
We got home, only to find Hunter's girlfriend, Artemis, there.
"Hey Hunter. Wait-Hunter? What are you doing? With a Marint? And another woman?" She screamed.
"Wait-Artemis!" Hunter screamed.
"I was going to marry you, but... Goodbye!" She screamed.
"No!" Hunter cried. "No..." He was hopeless. I felt bad for him.
"Artemis." I said.
"What do you want, Marint?"
"Hunter... I'm his brother. And this is our mother."
"Lies! All lies!" She screamed, and she ran out.
"I'm... I'm sorry." I told Hunter.
"Shut up... Leave... Please, leave..." Hunter said, crying.
"Honey..." Mother said.
"Leave!" With that we went out.
"So much for a family reunion." I said.

Chapter IV: The Great Depression. (Narrator: Hunter)

I was crying all day. 'My Artemis... Gone. I called her, I did all I could, but it was no use. I will never see her again. Now I want revenge on my brother... And my mother. As soon as I find them...' I grabbed a gun. 'I will kill them.' I was mumbling. The phone rang.
"Honey." Mother was on the phone. I threw the phone outside. Somehow, it came right back to my hands. I looked out the window. My mother stood there.
"Honey..." I grabbed my gun.
"Don't make me." I screamed.
"What... What happened to you?" She was shivering.
"Any last words, traitor?"
"What... No!" She screamed. I shot. I went back and lied on my bed. I threw all of my possessions out the window.
"What... What have I done?" I screamed to myself. I ran outside, looking for Retelin. To be the last one in my family. Now I didn't want revenge on him; I wanted revenge on the world.

Chapter V: Mission Impossible. (Narrator: Hunter)

I ran into the Marint's spot. Marints found me and shot me various times, but I just kept on running. I ran until I found Retelin's house.
"Die!" I screamed, as I kicked the door to the floor. Nobody home.
"Im... Impossible. He's always here." I screamed.
"I always am." Retelin said, coming from behind. I turned around.
"How did you know I was coming?" I asked.
"Are you kidding? You awoke almost everyone in the village. 56 marints came to me complaining about a Spotter here. I knew it was you."
"You've always been the smartest one, Retelin. But, that's after you killed dad. You were an idiot then. Of course a gun would kill him!" I screamed at him.
"I was five!"
"I was four, turning five the next day! And father died the day before my birthday. How do you think that made me feel on my birthday?"
"How do you think I felt on my birthday?"
"Happy!"
"What? Happy? That's absurd." Retelin said.
"You're the evil one. You did it on purpose."
"No."
"Retelin didn't kill father." Star came out of nowhere.
"What?" We both screamed.
"Retelin, you lent me your gun. I was one. I shot dad... By accident."
"Everything's coming back to me... Yes, you shot him." Retelin said.
"What?" I was scared, shivering. "I almost killed you for nothing?" I screamed at Retelin.
"I guess so. Now if you lay a finger on Star..."

I put my gun up against Star's head.

                               *Shot*


Note from DaGamez: War III: Master of Disguise is coming out soon, so stay tuned!


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#2 2010-07-01 19:15:55

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Re: War II: Alive?

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#3 2010-07-01 19:20:33

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Re: War II: Alive?

GREAT STORY! I love it! Artemis should come back to Hunter. I don't think Star would like having her person shot though.


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#4 2010-07-01 19:27:06

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Re: War II: Alive?

In the end Star's alive and healthy.
Artemis will come back to Hunter.
If you want to help me make III, you can.


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#5 2010-07-01 19:39:21

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Re: War II: Alive?

Yo dude, you just ruined it by telling what happens at the end


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#6 2010-07-01 20:02:43

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Re: War II: Alive?

I would expect someone to read it, then reply  tongue


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#7 2010-07-02 02:20:06

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Re: War II: Alive?

DaGamez wrote:

I would expect someone to read it, then reply  tongue

I don't roll that way  sad

Lol, kidding.


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#8 2010-07-10 08:26:25

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Re: War II: Alive?

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#9 2010-07-10 08:40:49

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Re: War II: Alive?

Oh my god, you killed Star!
jk. O.o Meanie, you no shot me! *grabs 7 chaos emeralds and a cup of non-decaf coffee* daGamez: EVERYBODY RUN! SAVE YOURSELVES FROM THIS ACOPYLAPSE!


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#10 2010-07-10 08:42:19

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Re: War II: Alive?

Meh, you don't even get a bruise, someone else gets shot, because you're the Master of Disguise (War III: Master of Disguise). In the III you will also be a narrator. Pretty cool, right? xD


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#11 2010-07-10 08:46:52

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Re: War II: Alive?

YUS. Now, write it so i can reqad it bbefore i leavve.
OMG, if i type in "Sonic mode" (When I tupe really faxt) I HAVE SO MANY TYPPOS! I'M NOT GOING TO FIX THEEM, THOUGH. I'M TOO DANG LAZY.


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#12 2010-07-10 08:47:52

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Re: War II: Alive?

Star, do you have a chatting place? Because I can give you everything I wrote so far, but I don't want to give it here, I don't want to spoil it for the ones who will read it when it comes out.


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#13 2010-07-10 09:03:55

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Re: War II: Alive?

No.


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#14 2010-07-10 09:16:21

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Re: War II: Alive?

Well, where can I give you a preview?


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#15 2010-07-10 09:21:45

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Re: War II: Alive?

Very interesting and suspenseful story  smile  I can't wait to find out what happens next!

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#16 2010-07-10 10:23:32

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Re: War II: Alive?

Did you read War I: Traitor! yet? I can give you all a preview of War III: Master of Disguise.


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