So, I am writing a book called The Cursed Shroob. Here is the intro. Note that I'm copying out of a notebook. Just remember......
INTRODUCTION
I was writing in my journal. I was the one Shroob rebel. Shroobs who would rebel painfully got their headspot and eye color SWITCHED. So I had to be secret about it. Shroob soldiers would go from house to house, searching for rebels. But for some reason, I feel as if they know they've gotten all the rebels. Here's a picture of a rebel.
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HOW do they SEE under all that JUNK? Well! I never introduced myself! I'm Pika. I am a rebel, here is a picture of me.
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My claws aren't white! I am FEMALE. GIRL. I hope lady rebels get Advil or aspirin or something like that. I am young, but that vigor of youth, it never wears out. Ten years to be exact. That's it for now. Come back and see if I've written more!
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If you read the post above, please comment!
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Sigh..... Probably no use to bump, but.... BUMP
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It's O.K writing, but it could be better
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Not very good.
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meh.
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You probably... Oh! I never told you what the rebels were rebeling FOR!
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It sounds good, but white claws? What white claws? What's a shroob? Where is this taking place? Why are schroobs rebeling? Why are the soldiers switching shroobs eye colors (or something like that)?
You have to give us more information on the topic.
I hope that helped!
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You gotta remember not everyone has played Mario and Luigi; Partners in Time.
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*smashes head against wall*
You guys are right... BUT THAT GAME IS MY 2nd FAVE, NEXT TO MARIO AND LUIGI BOWSER'S INSIDE STORY! (oops i hit caps lock in stead of the button i was going to press.) Thats what'll be told in Chapter 1.....
Last edited by GarSkutherGirl (2010-05-28 05:42:41)
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Chapter One
I was minding my own business, eating my ceral. I was repeating what a Shroob even was.
"A Shroob is a mushroom like, purple creature. They have 2 arms, and have 2 claws at the end. They have feet the size of a cube tissue box." I then wrote where I was.
"I am in a large village, rather a town or neighborhood. The street is a little rusty." Then I decided to write what hemispheres. "The North hemisphere, and the West hemisphere."
End of Chapter 1
See ya.
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Why would they out of nowhere repeat a shroob?
Introduction
(Intro like once upon a time) was a peaceful land. However, as all utopias go, it eventually fails sometime.
The failing of this utopia, called Shroob, was being taken over by a dictatorship known as the Black Government. The Black Government was a totalitarian state. No one could speak out. The Black Government only ruled with force.
For 10 years the Black Government ruled and its people were scared. I existed for as long as the Black Government existed, and I never got to see the light utopia of Shroob.
But there was a rebellion.
The rebels were known as (name). Shroobs who would rebel painfully got their headspot and eye color switched. So I had to be secret about it. Shroob soldiers would go from house to house, searching for rebels. But for some reason, I feel as if they know they've gotten all the rebels.
HOW do they SEE under all that JUNK?
Chapter 1
I'm Pika. I am a rebel. I am FEMALE. GIRL. I am young, but that vigor of youth, it never wears out.
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You can change it all you like. I'm not a writer, but I think it is a bit better. I also don't know anything about Shroobs or what happened, I just made up my own storyline.
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Greatdane wrote:
Why would they out of nowhere repeat a shroob?
They are forced to.
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GarSkutherGirl wrote:
Greatdane wrote:
Why would they out of nowhere repeat a shroob?
They are forced to.
No, I mean like, out of the blue you start talking out loud about a Shroob?
Makes sense? I don't think so....
What do you think about my "Intro"?
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