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fanofcena · 2010-02-11 07:26:01

Here I am going to share some of my poems :
I am open for requests.
Currently Working on :Love 2Day (rap)
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INDEX
Life at 21st Century
why?
why part 2 : (http://scratch.mit.edu/forums/viewtopic.php?pid=331459#p33145)
Val day : (http://scratch.mit.edu/forums/viewtopic.php?pid=326530#p326530)
Val day apology:(http://scratch.mit.edu/forums/viewtopic.php?pid=324528#p324528)
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NEW||Life at 21 Century|| NEW
Note : This is the experience o mine! , India is much like a machine hmm sad sadly but tru

Ever since the day i was born
The moment of my spawn
Since things started to show on
Feeling came to this m***n (censored)

I have been feeling like I am a gear
In the worlds machine
Why nobody ever wants to change the scene
Why everyones following the same scene
Why things just remain as they have been

I dunno whys everyone each and everyday
Just making me fade away
Never letting me what I wanna say
Blind and Indulged in the pray

It seem to me
from what i see
We are fish trapped in a small fishery
Not knowing How is it to dive in the sea
Following the same routine
But still calling us free
Free to do nothing
Cuz every1 is too busy!
Why they call me family!
When they havent got any time for me
Relations becoming un needy D:
Cuz the Routine is toooo busy!!??!

and Of those who revolt
Are considered the machines wrecked bolt
Happens the same with every free bird
The world thinks hes absurd
The Machine just ignore
the things/ideas new
Though they are a very few
Its like Deja Vu
The place is as they want to
Everything for them
But nothings true
see inside your heart
Find who are you ?
Ask yourself a question
Wheres gone the Idea??
Have u got any idea??
No i think the answer will be
Cuz the machine is Too busy
To process a freebee

The world today is gone to rude
Dressed but still nude
Yet fighting for food
when you have got too much dude

Every they seem to be filled with greed
Every heart has got the Dollar seed
Earning is more important
then to eat , breath and feed
They want to earn even when someone has to bleed
I never get the idea of
WHATS THE NEED ?...
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Why??????????☻
Note : I dont think most viewers on the scratch site can understand this
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Why is it so
When there is nowhere to go
No direction to row
When you are full of sorrow
There is no one to say that
Calm Down Bad times come & go

Why is it so
When you are full of tension
You are out off attention
And you lose all your perfection
There is no one
To give you motivation

Why is it so
When you are all alone
Lost in a void zone
Feeling exhausted and hopes gone
There is no one to say
Everything will be fine comon

If you find someone in the conditions above u are lucky
The pal with you that time is your best buddy
In all your friends he is the one u could say goody
Alas you realise him when you are left to nobody.

Written on : 31 January 2010
Reason : Deep Depression

Last edited by fanofcena (2010-12-18 09:35:51)

fanofcena · 2010-02-11 08:00:39

If you read these Rate them in 1/10

monkeysuit · 2010-02-11 09:29:06

8/10

Sometimes the rhyming seemed a littled cheated. The rhyme sceme also changed throughout the poem.

Ace-of-Spades · 2010-02-11 15:38:02

Your poems seem more like songs to me.

banana500 · 2010-02-11 15:54:35

10/10

I make poems all the time too. Except I try my best to make epics out of them. XD

fanofcena · 2010-02-11 23:36:53

Ace-of-Spades wrote:
Your poems seem more like songs to me.

So sing them i was too depressed when i wrote it smile

monkeysuit wrote:
8/10

Sometimes the rhyming seemed a littled cheated. The rhyme sceme also changed throughout the poem.

I nvr care about the rhyming scheme unless it becomes too ackward.

Just the poem should give a cool meaning and should be touching tongue

Last edited by fanofcena (2010-02-11 23:47:35)

fanofcena · 2010-02-11 23:45:31

Well this one is for those who wanna apologize to the loved one

I know many a times
I have hurt you
But inside my heart
I always wanna be with you
Cause I cant live without you
Everything else is a lie for me
You are the only true
Cause simply I love you

You are a part of me
Without you i am a corpse see,
You are the governer of My Emotions and Feelings
I still remember those long phone calls
and the Void wait for the tring trings

I find this time the best to say
I wanna apologize for I have done to you
On the Valentines day..
u cud remove the val. day and insert today so cud be used on any day big_smile

Last edited by fanofcena (2010-02-21 01:15:14)

cocoanut · 2010-02-12 01:51:36

Poems are only allowed to be depressing.

Unless it's a limerick. Limericks are evil.

fanofcena · 2010-02-12 02:37:56

cocoanut wrote:
Poems are only allowed to be depressing.

Unless it's a limerick. Limericks are evil.

big_smile lol not all the peoms some are funny too as i wrote one to make my class ROFL on the farewell it was indeed an insulting one tongue

rakhi · 2010-02-12 06:53:40

HI,poet big_smile

webgal15 · 2010-02-12 08:16:03

I rate both your poems 10/10.

what-the · 2010-02-12 08:31:42

Wow there has been alot of people writing poems. I know I made one a while back I cramed in as many poetic techniques in it as I could. I'll dig around and find it...

...Here it is. [blows of dust and gives it a polish] It is very different to normal poetry as I was trying my hand at modernist poetry.

I once wrote:
It was only just a dream

A crackle of light
A beam of sound
That’s what was felt
When the guy began to melt

Screaming in agony
Crying a little girly
Dying, dying, dying, dead

It was only just a dream
It was only just a dream
So the guy woke up
And started to scream
Just like a child
It was only just a dream

He got out of bed
And looked out the window
Turning back to the pillow
Which was pinked and fluffed
He failed to see it at all
It had been stolen
Just like his handball

What was happening?
This couldn’t be a dream
It was only just a dream

So the guy woke up
And he woke up, and up
And up, and up, and up
And up, and up, and up
It was only just a dream

I counted lots of poetic techniques in that poem.

Oh nice poems by the way fanofcena. 9/10

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fanofcena · 2010-02-12 23:32:47

what-the wrote:
Wow there has been alot of people writing poems. I know I made one a while back I cramed in as many poetic techniques in it as I could. I'll dig around and find it...

...Here it is. [blows of dust and gives it a polish] It is very different to normal poetry as I was trying my hand at modernist poetry.

I once wrote:
It was only just a dream

A crackle of light
A beam of sound
That’s what was felt
When the guy began to melt

Screaming in agony
Crying a little girly
Dying, dying, dying, dead

It was only just a dream
It was only just a dream
So the guy woke up
And started to scream
Just like a child
It was only just a dream

He got out of bed
And looked out the window
Turning back to the pillow
Which was pinked and fluffed
He failed to see it at all
It had been stolen
Just like his handball

What was happening?
This couldn’t be a dream
It was only just a dream

So the guy woke up
And he woke up, and up
And up, and up, and up
And up, and up, and up
It was only just a dream

awesome what the really i gave it 12/10

Last edited by fanofcena (2010-02-12 23:40:53)

Ace-of-Spades · 2010-02-12 23:35:54

He's what-the, not The-Whiz. Their names are only 2 letters apart though... (sort of)

fanofcena · 2010-02-12 23:48:38

Ace-of-Spades wrote:
He's what-the, not The-Whiz. Their names are only 2 letters apart though... (sort of)

Thank you (thats what happens when u are posting on two things together sad )

fanofcena · 2010-02-13 22:31:32

Note: As a poem needs Emotions and i was out of LOVING emotions when writing this so might be some kinda bad with timing etc so plz reshuffle the lines in such a way that suits to you the best smile

Title: <whatever u want to say>

it goes like this :
O girl
Your face and those mystic eyes
shining smile like bright skies
You dont know
But to be with you feels so nice.

\\ Add these only if u can afford to take her to a beach (ie if u live in a coastal area)
{
O girl
the time i spent with you is the most precious to me
Aloha lets go to the beach and sit together besides the sea
Lonely just u and me.
}

I dream every night to be with you
i try every day to be with you
I seek to share my evening with you
and As i wake up i wann see you

if(you are proposing)Then use these
{
Under this bright sun\Star shine
I wanna ask will you be my valentine
}

else use these

{
In My heart there is only you
today , tomorrow forever its true
that I love you.......
}

Last edited by fanofcena (2010-02-21 01:07:58)

fanofcena · 2010-02-14 04:37:27

I think i uploaded something

fanofcena · 2010-02-15 04:42:01

Ouch it feels so bady NOBODYS LISTENING

fanofcena · 2010-02-21 00:22:17

Latest Update :

Why part 2?. (I wrote this for school's farewell)

Once I asked mother nature
Why are you so unfair
To my surprise she replied
Son make it a bit clear
Holding my fear
When her voice I came to hear
I asked

Why are you so cruel
Why you always leave us in dismal

Why is it so?
When we start to enjoy something
It comes to an end
Why is its so?
For every good thing
We are in front of a friend
Mother broke in and said
Its a trend

I continued
Why is it so ?
When we rhythm in a party
Its the end of the show
When we set symphony with someone
He has to go
Happiness always followed by sorrow

Mother replied
Its my behaviour
I may be calm and severe
But its my duty to
Care about my kids
Sorry son if sometimes
It hurts directly in ribs

I cried breaking in
Why you always part good people
When you know
As it comes to say goodbye
We are always full off emotions
As we hate to lose someone
With misty eyes
With tears in every farewell
We had to say
All is well

Mother clicked her eye
and gave a short reply
"Life is a truth not a lie ". smile
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Last edited by fanofcena (2010-12-17 10:43:03)

what-the · 2010-02-21 01:56:00

I think that's your best one. 9.9/10

Paradox · 2010-02-21 02:03:57

10/10
I like all poetry
It makes me feel 45 again
I hate being old I like to lie about my age also

fanofcena · 2010-02-22 04:18:19

what-the wrote:
I think that's your best one. 9.9/10

Thanks smile

fanofcena · 2010-02-22 04:19:32

Paradox wrote:
10/10
I like all poetry
It makes me feel 45 again
I hate being old I like to lie about my age also

Shall i write something like when i was young or the good old days cause i feel like that too *(although i am just 16)

Stickman704 · 2010-02-22 12:04:27

Though your poem is not true
Like waffle and pie stew
I would rate your line of speech
8/10 like a sandy beach.

All made up on the spot. yikes

rakhi · 2010-02-26 05:00:26

itne poems kase likhte ho?

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