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Nomolos wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

Aww...But I was going to do Book Reviews. Oh well, we can both do them, each do a couple of books or something.
If we do it, I would like to do:
Updates
Book Reviews

If we do it, I would be fine with doing:
Advertisements
Advice Column
Sneak Peeks

If we do it, I would be willing to do:
Members

So pretty much, I would be willing to do any of them!

And no, we don't need an advice column. It was just some ideas. We can remove and add topics as needed.

Or we could all do book reviews. Like:

Waffle reviewed: Harry Potter description and rating here
Nomolos reviewed The Runaway King description and rating here
destructo-serpent reviewed Warriors description and rating here

or: [book review]
this review by [name]

So are we doing the newspaper? If so, whos all going to do it with what positions?

Waffle27 wrote:

So are we doing the newspaper? If so, whos all going to do it with what positions?

i think we should do it. [vampire voice] iz vantz to do book reviewz [/vampire voice]
i could probably do members too.

maybe you should list all concrete positions?

Last edited by destructo-serpent (2013-03-28 13:08:32)

Margaret Denisa Loretta Cruville was walking in Ryansberg swamp. She held her head boldly, knowing she was doing the impossible. Margaret was walking in Ryansberg swamp. And she was surviving.
    Water sloshed over her boots, and squelched at her every step. Spindly marsh plants reached for her knees, plotting to pull her down under the slime, to cut her off from life. Mud squished and splattered, dotting normally pristine boots with specks of brown. Margaret was lucky that those specks weren’t red.
    Suddenly, a rustling rattled the bushes. Margaret whipped around, heart beating a little faster. Behind her, there was a disturbance in the lake. Tiny creases rippled along the surface.
    “Who goes there?” Ms. Cruville asked, pivoting again as wind whistled over the water. Her heart pounded against her chest, begging to be let out so that it, at least, could survive another day. “I know you’re there! You can’t scare me!” she lied.
    No response. All sounds slowly halted. The plants leaned back, almost smug, and stood stock still, like soldiers awaiting orders. The bushes quit rustling. The only thing that continued was the creases in the lake.
    Sighing in relief, Margaret turned back around. Why did everyone make such a big deal out of Ryansberg swamp? It was just the same as any other swamp!
    That’s when it grabbed her. The giant tongue, transparent and ghostly. Margaret choked, sputtered. “Help…me…” she whispered. But it was too late. The tongue pulled her back into the swamp.


I finished the Arabian Nightmare begining. You can add/remove at will, just leave some stuff in. Also, I wasn' sure about the ending, what do you think?

Waffle27 wrote:

Margaret Denisa Loretta Cruville was walking in Ryansberg swamp. She held her head boldly, knowing she was doing the impossible. Margaret was walking in Ryansberg swamp. And she was surviving.
    Water sloshed over her boots, and squelched at her every step. Spindly marsh plants reached for her knees, plotting to pull her down under the slime, to cut her off from life. Mud squished and splattered, dotting normally pristine boots with specks of brown. Margaret was lucky that those specks weren’t red.
    Suddenly, a rustling rattled the bushes. Margaret whipped around, heart beating a little faster. Behind her, there was a disturbance in the lake. Tiny creases rippled along the surface.
    “Who goes there?” Ms. Cruville asked, pivoting again as wind whistled over the water. Her heart pounded against her chest, begging to be let out so that it, at least, could survive another day. “I know you’re there! You can’t scare me!” she lied.
    No response. All sounds slowly halted. The plants leaned back, almost smug, and stood stock still, like soldiers awaiting orders. The bushes quit rustling. The only thing that continued was the creases in the lake.
    Sighing in relief, Margaret turned back around. Why did everyone make such a big deal out of Ryansberg swamp? It was just the same as any other swamp!
    That’s when it grabbed her. The giant tongue, transparent and ghostly. Margaret choked, sputtered. “Help…me…” she whispered. But it was too late. The tongue pulled her back into the swamp.


I finished the Arabian Nightmare begining. You can add/remove at will, just leave some stuff in. Also, I wasn' sure about the ending, what do you think?

did u mean to do tht?

Last edited by destructo-serpent (2013-03-28 13:13:17)

Waffle27 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

oh, something i left out of the review when u came back. an idea for chap. #5 or something. how about Coil says that they should learn combat, incase the'res like a sea monster and three angry mermen coming.

hm... but then they'd need someone to teach them.    maybe a merman?
Rarse should learn a sword and shield, and Epher should learn twin daggers( ).
Amaya can't rlly carry and weapons with hooves.    hm....

Coil could probably teach them, since he was a fighting prince dude.

i thought so, but Coil is a sea serpent. their fighting style is different from swordfighting and stuff. he could probably teach them basic moves with the sword, nothing else 

destructo-serpent wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

Margaret Denisa Loretta Cruville was walking in Ryansberg swamp. She held her head boldly, knowing she was doing the impossible. Margaret was walking in Ryansberg swamp. And she was surviving.
    Water sloshed over her boots, and squelched at her every step. Spindly marsh plants reached for her knees, plotting to pull her down under the slime, to cut her off from life. Mud squished and splattered, dotting normally pristine boots with specks of brown. Margaret was lucky that those specks weren’t red.
    Suddenly, a rustling rattled the bushes. Margaret whipped around, heart beating a little faster. Behind her, there was a disturbance in the lake. Tiny creases rippled along the surface.
    “Who goes there?” Ms. Cruville asked, pivoting again as wind whistled over the water. Her heart pounded against her chest, begging to be let out so that it, at least, could survive another day. “I know you’re there! You can’t scare me!” she lied.
    No response. All sounds slowly halted. The plants leaned back, almost smug, and stood stock still, like soldiers awaiting orders. The bushes quit rustling. The only thing that continued was the creases in the lake.
    Sighing in relief, Margaret turned back around. Why did everyone make such a big deal out of Ryansberg swamp? It was just the same as any other swamp!
    That’s when it grabbed her. The giant tongue, transparent and ghostly. Margaret choked, sputtered. “Help…me…” she whispered. But it was too late. The tongue pulled her back into the swamp.


I finished the Arabian Nightmare begining. You can add/remove at will, just leave some stuff in. Also, I wasn' sure about the ending, what do you think?

did u mean to do tht?

Yeah, because its not like shes ever going be seen again. It was just a random name so I didn't keep have to keep saying "the gir" over and over again, but you can change that if you want.
Ryansberg swamp is just a random name I came up with. Again, you can change it if you want to.

Epher doesn't have any experience with weapons, so he couldn't teach them. Amaya probably can't. Crystal seems to have some experience, though I can see her thinking they would use her skills against her.

Nomolos wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

oh, something i left out of the review when u came back. an idea for chap. #5 or something. how about Coil says that they should learn combat, incase the'res like a sea monster and three angry mermen coming.

hm... but then they'd need someone to teach them.    maybe a merman?
Rarse should learn a sword and shield, and Epher should learn twin daggers( ).
Amaya can't rlly carry and weapons with hooves.    hm....

Rarse already has some experience with swords, but not much.

oooooohhhhh. good.    should he learn
A.  one-handed sword/shield
B. two handed sword
C. 2 katanas
?
i like C, but ur choice.


btw, a katana is like a ninja sword.

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

hm... but then they'd need someone to teach them.    maybe a merman?
Rarse should learn a sword and shield, and Epher should learn twin daggers( ).
Amaya can't rlly carry and weapons with hooves.    hm....

Rarse already has some experience with swords, but not much.

oooooohhhhh. good.    should he learn
A.  one-handed sword/shield
B. two handed sword
C. 2 katanas
?
i like C, but ur choice.


btw, a katana is like a ninja sword.

I love katanas, but they really wouldn't work for a merman. xD

I'd say A.

Nomolos wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

Rarse already has some experience with swords, but not much.

oooooohhhhh. good.    should he learn
A.  one-handed sword/shield
B. two handed sword
C. 2 katanas
?
i like C, but ur choice.


btw, a katana is like a ninja sword.

I love katanas, but they really wouldn't work for a merman. xD

I'd say A.

should he have a scabbard like link in twilight princess or a belt scabbard?

(link scabbard is on his back with a strap over his chest, and his sheild on top of the scabbard to protect him from anything coming from behind.

Nomolos wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

I love katanas, but they really wouldn't work for a merman. xD

I'd say A.

should he have a scabbard like link in twilight princess or a belt scabbard?

(link scabbard is on his back with a strap over his chest, and his sheild on top of the scabbard to protect him from anything coming from behind.

I'd say link style, cause swimming with a sword hanging from your belt isn't the best idea. 

Besides, I love the Legend of Zelda series.

me 2 
and link style looks awesome XD
one last question. sword design. single or double bladed?
bloodgrove or not?

Waffle, can i do the training chap?

Last edited by destructo-serpent (2013-03-28 13:25:29)