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destructo-serpent wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

k 
this group/team thing is coming together fast.

I know, right? Its been, like, 4 days and we've already gotten 700 comments, tons of ideas for the idea box, and the Prouloge and half of chapter 1 done!!!

not to mention six members.   

Indeed. And a banner requested to be made. And a wiki link and Scratchreader.

Okk.

Also, for a horror story, I'm going to write about a giant frog named Fella (and in the Authors Note Im going to explain about Fella, a real live frog I almost stepped on, but was only big enough to be put in a bottle cap)

destructo-serpent wrote:

quick question.
Epher or Espher?

Epher.

destructo-serpent wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

I personally think after would be better, and maybe Epher was so busy thinking he runs into the rock. Then it woud switch to Rarse point of veiw. But whatever you guys want.

or

remember how Coil has heat sensing organs in his snout? maybe when he was fighting the shark he wasn't really focusing on anything else, but now he can sense Rarse behind the rock?


i think they're both good, so i don't know.


i based those organs on a rattlesnake, and he's a sea serpent. so i'm not sure if it's OP or not.

Not OP 

Alsom she DID tell them her ename:

Amaya said, louder than earlier, "My name is Amaya, and I never thought-" She whipped her head around, staring suspescoisuly at a large rock. "I thought I heard something... It must have been my imagination." She turned back to the cryptids, "Is there, I mean, if it eoudlnt cause trouble, a chance that I could..."

Why did she feel so nervous? "That I could join you?" She finished.

destructo-serpent wrote:

ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

or

remember how Coil has heat sensing organs in his snout? maybe when he was fighting the shark he wasn't really focusing on anything else, but now he can sense Rarse behind the rock?


i think they're both good, so i don't know.


i based those organs on a rattlesnake, and he's a sea serpent. so i'm not sure if it's OP or not.

Not OP 

Alsom she DID tell them her ename:

Amaya said, louder than earlier, "My name is Amaya, and I never thought-" She whipped her head around, staring suspescoisuly at a large rock. "I thought I heard something... It must have been my imagination." She turned back to the cryptids, "Is there, I mean, if it eoudlnt cause trouble, a chance that I could..."

Why did she feel so nervous? "That I could join you?" She finished.

...  that doesn't look like Waffles and your story fit.
Waffle, is ours after Shadow's or what? because Amaya asking if she can join them before she said thanks is kind of weird 

Yeah... *Scolds Amaya* "Amaya! Say thank you when someone saves your life from a giant angry great white shark!" Just kidding. 

She could say thank you after asking, like she remembered it was good to say thanks 

ShadowOfArt wrote:

She could say thank you after asking, like she remembered it was good to say thanks 

xD Yeah.

Heres what my beginning for Chapter 3 sounds like so far. Its not much. I may delete it later. Just felt like giving you guys a little Epher Update 

It had been 6 months since the attack on Bual. With each full moon, Epher had traveled to the shore, shed his skin as a seal, and transformed into a human. What was the method behind his madness? Epher went to spy on the evil race of man, learn from them secrets, hoping one would someday lead to the death of the race.

Do you think its too much info crammed in at once?

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you know what would be cool? if every character had something that related to his/her history. like Crystal has the crystal shell or something, and Coil has something, but it's not in his history/prologue, but it's in his wiki description.

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Waffle27 wrote:

Yeah! But where would Epher keep his...

I know! If this is okay, he could find something on the surface during Chapter 2 and brings it back to the ocean because it reminds him somehow of his history, and the others dont know about it.

he could have a necklace or something. Coil has a good way of keeping his. you'd never think of it if it wasn't in the wiki 

Nomolos wrote:

Yay, my turn. Feel free to change anything about Coil, because I probably can't do him right. 

“You can come out, I know you’re there.”
Rarse froze as he heard the voice call him. At first he didn't move, but remembering the sharpness of the sea monsters teeth and thinking what would happen if he stayed, he nervously swam out from behind it. Three pairs of eyes stared, their gaze boring into him.
"Alright!" Rarse yelled, his hands shaking. "Just make it fast."
The sea monster looked confused.
"We're not going to kill you. At least, not if you don't give us reason to." he said, and Rarse relaxed, but only slightly.
"Then what are you doing here?" Rarse asked, ready to swim for it if things got bad, but the monster didn't make any sudden attacks.
"We were here to help Amaya," Coil gestured toward the hippocampus. "She was under attack by the shark." He turned back to Rarse. "What are you doing here?"
Rarse cleared his throat a little too loudly. "I heard yells and came to find the source. I came just in time to see the Selkie free the hippocampus. I hid because...Well..." He paused. "I was worried you'd eat me."

Back to Coil.

fixed a couple of things Coil said. the hard part about this is that no one can write what anybody elses character does right. :l

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I made some minor edits to my post above. So check that before you start writing please.

Waffle27 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

Yeah! But where would Epher keep his...

I know! If this is okay, he could find something on the surface during Chapter 2 and brings it back to the ocean because it reminds him somehow of his history, and the others dont know about it.

he could have a necklace or something. Coil has a good way of keeping his. you'd never think of it if it wasn't in the wiki 

*checks the wiki*

Wha---? I can't find it  . Have you added it yet?

yes. it's in coil's character sheet. i added it last night. *looks confused*