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First 2/3 of Ephers History
Foul black water filled the salty sea of Bual, tainting the usual sweet scent of Epher’s home with an unnatural smell. Hovering above the village, a great metal whale, with thin flippers, danced above his head. It was bleeding the opaque fluid.
    “Don’t gaze at it too long,” warned Moria, Epher’s mother. “Dozens of rare Kelpie villages have been destroyed by its reeking blood.  I don’t intend Bual to be one of those villages.”
    “Its flippers,” Epher whispered, entranced. “The whale’s flippers have so many gaping holes. What happened to it to make it so mortally wounded?”
    Moria let out an ironic barking laugh. “Whale! No, no, this is another breed, called a Ship. I believe this particular animal is a ‘Fishing Vessel’. Cruel humans force them to catch us in their flippers, or choke us with their blood-specifically called ‘Oil’.”
    “How do you know so much about humans?” asked Epher curiously.
    “I have been up to the human world. It is cruel there, so very cruel.” Moria shuddered. “Collect your father, Epher, and your sister. We shall break out of this village before it breaks us.” Epher nodded, deciding not to question his mother’s orders.
    “Father!” he cried. “[Sister!]” Sleek, frightened bodies pushed past his as he tried to make his way upstream, to the last place he had seen his father and sister. Stinky “Oil” filled his nostrils, threatening to drown him in his own element. Why didn’t he just give up? Run away? “That’s not what families do,” he muttered through gritted teeth. “I can’t give up. How could I survive without my family there to support me?”
    Empty, black water greeted him when he reached the other side of the mass of bodies. Crying out, Epher searched the sea floor rapidly. Where—where was his family? He wasn’t going to leave without them.
Then, out of the corner of his vision, Epher spotted two motionless shapes. “Oh, Great Neptune, no!” he wailed, swimming over to the bodies. The sight confirmed his fears. Epher’s father and sister were dead.
“Moria!” Epher cried. “Mother, where are you?” The black blood was shrouding his vision. Catching a glimpse of a retreating tail ahead, Epher quickly followed, coughing, eyes watering.
Stumbling as he did so, Epher gasped for fresh, clean, saltwater. There was none. Every corner was filled with the putrid liquid. There was nowhere to turn, no way to escape the masses and masses of oil.
And then he was captured.

Last edited by Waffle27 (2013-03-19 18:40:45)

"ensnared" doesn't sound like the right word there. how about caught?

Nomolos wrote:

Username: Nomolos
What are you applying for?: Writer, editor, and ideas.
What would you rate yourself on Writing/Editing/Ideas(depends on what you are applying for): Writing: 9/10, editing: 7/10, ideas, 8/10.
What kind of books would you like to see this group make?(Fantasy, Mystery,Sci-Fi, etc.): Fantasy or adventure! 
Any other information you'd like to share: I've taken multiple writing classes, I'm writing a fantasy book I hope to publish, I've been writing half my life, and really enjoy it. I love to read also and can't wait to create some stories with you guys!

Added! Welcome! Do you think you can get caught up with the collab pretty quickly? See the To-Do list to see what to do 

Nomolos wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

Username: Nomolos
What are you applying for?: Writer, editor, and ideas.
What would you rate yourself on Writing/Editing/Ideas(depends on what you are applying for): Writing: 9/10, editing: 7/10, ideas, 8/10.
What kind of books would you like to see this group make?(Fantasy, Mystery,Sci-Fi, etc.): Fantasy or adventure! 
Any other information you'd like to share: I've taken multiple writing classes, I'm writing a fantasy book I hope to publish, I've been writing half my life, and really enjoy it. I love to read also and can't wait to create some stories with you guys!

Added! Welcome! Do you think you can get caught up with the collab pretty quickly? See the To-Do list to see what to do 

Yeah, I think I can catch up. I'll check the first post for stuff.

check the wiki in the OP too.

Waffle27 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

"ensnared" doesn't sound like the right word there. how about caught?

Could "captured" work?

u da boss   

it sounds like it will work

then i can put it on the wiki.

should we put in a request for the banner now?

An invisible foe was clutching him in a strong, firm grip. “Let go of me!” he cried, recognizing his capturer as the Fishing Vessel’s fin.
Already, his head was becoming less furry, more human, and unable to take the pressure of the water as the fin brought him closer to the surface. Thrashing wildly in his hopes to escape, Epher didn’t notice as oil leaked into his eyes, his mouth, his nostrils, choking him discreetly in his determination to escape.
    Air bubbles leaked from his nostrils, almost human eyes rolled back in his head. “Help…Help me,” he whispered. As he spoke, more of the Oil rushed into his mouth, running down the back of his throat, causing it to burn.
    Suddenly, a familiar chestnut brown body was knocking against the side of the net, squirming through the hole, making it just big enough for her pup to fit through. Epher tried to get into a position where he could fit easily through, but was cramped by the fallen bodies of his fellow villagers. “Mom!” he cried.
    Epher struggled in the fin, and watched as Moria dived through the hole, into the netting. Her sleek body fit through the hole perfectly. Positioning herself behind Epher, she began to shove him towards the hole. “Get out!” she said. “If the humans catch you, they will kill you!”
    Breaking free of the flipper, Epher turned to help his mother. It was too late. The fin was already out of the water. “Moria!” he screamed, tears cascading down his cheeks.
     “Be strong, young one,” Moria called.  “Break free and survive! Always remember Bual’s fate!” And with those words, Epher’s mother was gone.



~This may be the last third, unless you guyss think I should add the part where he meets up with the others. Maybe he was the first one or something? And the others just sort of met up with him eventually? What do you guys think?~

Ok, so the story we're working on is a ocean themed-humans are evil-watch out for oil type of story. Right? Also, if you guys need me to share an excerpt of my writing that's fine.

000Hawkstorm000 wrote:

five people will be harder for star wolves, as there is only four elements

We could have:
Wood
Earth (Waffle27)
Water (ShadowOfArt)
Fire (Destructo-serpent)
Air (Madbunnygal)

madbunnygal wrote:

000Hawkstorm000 wrote:

five people will be harder for star wolves, as there is only four elements

We could have:
Wood
Earth (Waffle27)
Water (ShadowOfArt)
Fire (Destructo-serpent)
Air (Madbunnygal)

I could be wood. Or we can just have tons of elements or something:

Water
Earth
Fire
Air
Metal
Ice
Time
Wood

Last edited by Nomolos (2013-03-19 19:29:44)

Waffle27 wrote:

I love those elements!!!!
If we do those, I would call anything but earth or life. Sorry, but those are again my least favorites 

Nothing much is going on. Nomolos joined, and the prolouge so far got confirmed now we just need Nomolos and Madbunnys history and we can combine them. I posted my prolouge but I dont know if its enough or if I should add the part where he meets up with some other cryptid...

I call life, then. Unless some wants that, if someone does, Dreaming.