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fillergames · 2013-01-01 21:42:50

Episode 1 part 5

Nam: Your going to be fired. Right?

Derpy: My boss is too stupid to fir....

Radio: Derpy! Your 3 hours late for the package delivery!

Derpy: Boss. Well i kind of lost the package....

Radio: WHAT! You lost the package! YOU Idoit!

Derpy: Boss im so so so so sorry. Are you going you fire me?

Radio: If things keep going this way, then yes. This is your last chance Derpy. Your off for the day.

Derpy: I though i was dead meat there.

Nam: So do you have any friends?

To be continued.

Last edited by fillergames (2013-01-01 22:40:04)

fillergames · 2013-01-01 21:52:01

Hello? anyone. Im going to post more later.

fillergames · 2013-01-01 22:53:10

Episode 1 part 6

Derpy: Yeah i have tons of frie...

Derpy gets a newspaper thrown at her.

Nam: Mind if i read it?

Derpy: Sure.

Nam: What language is this written in? You ponies speak english. Yey you write in this unreadable garbage. Derpy! Read this to me.

Derpy: I never learned to read.

Nam: Your stupid Derpy.

Stubby Cat: I can read it!

Nam & Derpy give Stubby Cat a strange face.

Stubby Cat: What? I was friends with Charlie The Unicom.

Nam: Oh OK. NOW READ IT!!

Stubby Cat: Ok the headline says.. Fluttershy goes insane trying to murder Rainbow Dash. Gets sent to asylum.

Derpy: Fluttershy was one of my friends! What happened?

Stubby Cat: She broke into your house and cut Rainbow Dash with a knife.

Derpy: My house. I wonder what she was doing there?

Meanwhile in hospital.

Rainbow Dash: Come on. Can't you just stich my legs back together?

Hospital worker: Sorry it doesn't work that way! Your getting artificial legs.

Rainbow Dash: NOOOOOOOO!!!!
To be continued.

fillergames · 2013-01-01 23:36:43

Episode 1 part 7

Hospital worker: The artificial legs your getting are super robot legs or something. There stronger then your natural legs.

Rainbow Dash: Yay! Wait a minute. If there robotic legs thats means no contact with water right?

Hospital worker: Yep. Unless you want a shocking death.

Rainbow Dash: That means no more bath/showers.NOOO! Im going to smell stinky.

Hospital worker. Well you waiting, why don't you play a game?

Rainbow Dash: What game?

Hospital worker: Some game called "Call of duty" You shoot these myhical creatures called "Humans" With there alien devices called "Guns"

Rainbow Dash: Sounds mindless and boring. Got any Televison to watch?

Hospital worker:Yes we do. But it only catches a show made by humans that makes fun of us

Rainbow Dash: Whats it called?

Hospital worker: My little pony: friendship is magic.

Rainbow Dash: How about NO!

bananaman114 · 2013-01-01 23:37:16

use quotation marks not white lines and colons to indicate dialogue

fillergames · 2013-01-01 23:55:51

bananaman114 wrote:
use quotation marks not white lines and colons to indicate dialogue

Im bad at grammar. Thanks for telling me.

Also this was my influence to make this story.

http://www.gamefaqs.com/boards/577997-pac-man/62787212

Last edited by fillergames (2013-01-02 00:08:03)

bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 00:07:16

fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
use quotation marks not white lines and colons to indicate dialogue
Im bad at grammar. What shape is a quotation mark again?

Also this was my influence to make this story.

http://www.gamefaqs.com/boards/577997-pac-man/62787212

"

fillergames · 2013-01-02 00:08:21

bananaman114 wrote:
fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
use quotation marks not white lines and colons to indicate dialogue
Im bad at grammar. What shape is a quotation mark again?

Also this was my influence to make this story.

http://www.gamefaqs.com/boards/577997-pac-man/62787212
"

Oh Ok.

bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 00:14:24

wow this is uh...
some story

fillergames · 2013-01-02 00:35:50

Episode 1 part 8

Meanwhile at Twilight's house.

Twilight on phone "You expect me to build artificial legs for Rainbow dash? Are you crazy? Just because in a nerd at robotics doesn't mean it takes ages.

hospital worker in response to Twilight "I will give you a couple thousand dollars.

Twilight in response" How about YEEESS! YESSS YESS!"

Twilight"Time to start working"

Suddenly Sweetie Bot enters Twilights house.

Sweetie Bot "HEY TWILIGHT CAN YOU HELP ME'

Twilight "What happend to you? Your skin has been ripped off. I also see the creepy robot eye too"

Sweetie Bot "I GOT RAN OVER BY A CAR'"

Twilight "Proves how unintelligent robot AI is. Anyways im working on a request. So maybe later"

Sweetie Bot "FIX ME BEFORE I GO ALL MURDER MODE ON YOU"

Twilight "OK. When i wanted an artificial friend. I didn't make one just to kill me"

Sweetie Bot "YEAH HUGS FOR YOU"

Twilight "Lets see. Outside badly damage, inside parts unrepairable. Just new skin and your Ok'

Sweetie Bot "YAY"

To be continued.

fillergames · 2013-01-02 00:36:59

bananaman114 wrote:
wow this is uh...
some story

Yeah im pretty crazy (If not insane) With stories.

bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 00:42:43

you still have no grammar and poor syntax

fillergames · 2013-01-02 00:46:15

bananaman114 wrote:
you still have no grammar and poor syntax

Thanks for the helpful info! Now get me the official book for grammar freaks.

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bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 00:49:59

fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
you still have no grammar and poor syntax
Thanks for the helpful info! Now get me the official book for grammar freaks.

or you know
school
this is grade two level stuff
just saying

fillergames · 2013-01-02 00:58:40

bananaman114 wrote:
fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
you still have no grammar and poor syntax
Thanks for the helpful info! Now get me the official book for grammar freaks.
or you know
school
this is grade two level stuff
just saying

This is just for fun. I don't really care about grammar, as long as its read-able. Just saying.

bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 01:16:30

it barely is tho

luiysia · 2013-01-02 01:41:15

fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
you still have no grammar and poor syntax
Thanks for the helpful info! Now get me the official book for grammar freaks.

Buy this book (only 0.80 USD!!) and maybe your English will be as good as this man's!

Nikolai Krestinsky - Amazon review wrote:
When i first come to America, my english did cause me problems. In Soviet Russia i was strong teacher, my english i know is the best in all of Petropavlovsk. My brother, Mikhail, he say to me, "Nikolai you go to America, they make you rich like czar, <<who knows maybe this is bad by scratch standards>>, kill many bear". My brother, he is very wise, is greatest toymaker in all of Russia. So next day i wake up, sell my house, say goodbye to wife and children, and go to America to become millionaire. Then in America, I go to job interview and they say to me "Nikolai, you are not for the job here, you are not the skills we need, your english is poor like child". I take that man and smash his table, i say "someday i will be greatest man in all of country, your children will wish me their father!". That day my anger is best of me. It is then i know i must learn better english, so i buy book "English Grammer it is for Dummies" by Mr.Woods. Now i am perfect english grammer! I write letter to Mikhail, he write back "Nikolai, your english is like a god, you will be millionaire soon! all of Petropavlovsk is proud for you! good luck brother! please send letter when you are president or maybe even czar! Hahaha! also, your wife is killed by bear". So i say thanks to Mr.Woods for his book! When i am czar your family will be spared! Hahahaha! (is joke).

jukyter · 2013-01-02 04:37:37

bananaman114 wrote:
use quotation marks not white lines and colons to indicate dialogue

no this seems to be a script not prose
here's his first part as checked as much as i can bother:

Episode 1:The stories start PT.1

INT. - . EARLY MORNING

One day Derpy was delivering a package. Derpy then thought "I wonder whats in here". Derpy opened the package containing a teleporter.

DERPY
Wow a weird thingy. How does it work?
The teleporter turned on. Derpy entered the portal.

EXT. - . -

On the other side Nam [who is not a pony] and Stubby Cat were in a car.

STUBBY CAT
When will we be home?
NAM
Anytime now.

A wild Derpy entered Nam's car.

STUBBY CAT
I don't know if the catnip has made me crazy. But is someone in the back seat?
NAM
Yes there is.... WAIT WHAT!
DERPY
Hi everyone!

Nam screams.

NAM
A DEMON DONKEY! RUN!

The teleporter then sends Nam & friends into Ponyville.

INT. - . MIDDAY

Sweetie Bot [robot pony if you haven't seen friendship is witchcraft] Was looking at the teleporter, confused about it

SWEETIE BOT
WHAT IS THIS THING.

Nam's car teleports right in front of Sweetie Bot.

i'm probably going to be berated for this part:
""I wonder whats in here"."

Grammar Girl wrote:
There's another difference in how Americans and Britons treat quotation marks. In the U.S. we put periods and commas inside quotation marks, and in Britain they usually put periods and commas outside quotation marks.

if you want to learn how to have good grammar use her lessons
likewise if you want to learn how to format a script use this or here
i couldn't completely format it as a script because i don't know enough

Last edited by jukyter (2013-01-02 04:38:39)

fillergames · 2013-01-02 12:00:22

How about i just use the same script format im using right now due to grammar confusion.

Last edited by fillergames (2013-01-02 12:02:24)

fillergames · 2013-01-02 12:53:48

Using the so called correct script format now!

Episode 1 part final.

PONYVILLE EQESTRIA

NAM
DERPY! Then were are your other friends. They should be here right?

DERPY
There probably busy doing something.

Suddenly RARITY appears.

RARITY
Hi DERPY! What are you doing? Who's that new friend you have there?

DERPY
His name is NAM. He came from a place far far away.

RARITY
You going to show him your other friends?

NAM
Too many friends! Is there one living thing here thats not a pony?

STUBBY CAT
I am.

EVERYBODY ELSE.
Well thats pretty obvious.

End of episode 1!

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fillergames · 2013-01-02 14:25:48

It feels like im the only person posting here.....

That means im FOREVER ALONE

fillergames · 2013-01-02 17:02:38

Episode 2: The life of a pony. Part 1.

NAM
Should we see if your friend in the hospital is OK?

DERPY
Why not? We could sing a song on the way. Its going to take a while. Who wants to start?

NAM
I will start! Ummmm... "Strolling in the street with strange colourful horses today.

DERPY
Whean i got bored and had nothing to say!

NAM
And then my friend said!

STUBBY CAT
I like trains!

NAM & DERPY
You ruined the whole song! you idiot!

RARITY
What about me? i never got to say any lines. This is boring, im going back to my store!

NAM
Mind if i come?

RARITY
Yeah sure, its the cheapest prices in town!
TBC

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bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 17:14:01

luiysia wrote:
fillergames wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
you still have no grammar and poor syntax
Thanks for the helpful info! Now get me the official book for grammar freaks.
Buy this book (only 0.80 USD!!) and maybe your English will be as good as this man's!

Nikolai Krestinsky - Amazon review wrote:
When i first come to America, my english did cause me problems. In Soviet Russia i was strong teacher, my english i know is the best in all of Petropavlovsk. My brother, Mikhail, he say to me, "Nikolai you go to America, they make you rich like czar, <<who knows maybe this is bad by scratch standards>>, kill many bear". My brother, he is very wise, is greatest toymaker in all of Russia. So next day i wake up, sell my house, say goodbye to wife and children, and go to America to become millionaire. Then in America, I go to job interview and they say to me "Nikolai, you are not for the job here, you are not the skills we need, your english is poor like child". I take that man and smash his table, i say "someday i will be greatest man in all of country, your children will wish me their father!". That day my anger is best of me. It is then i know i must learn better english, so i buy book "English Grammer it is for Dummies" by Mr.Woods. Now i am perfect english grammer! I write letter to Mikhail, he write back "Nikolai, your english is like a god, you will be millionaire soon! all of Petropavlovsk is proud for you! good luck brother! please send letter when you are president or maybe even czar! Hahaha! also, your wife is killed by bear". So i say thanks to Mr.Woods for his book! When i am czar your family will be spared! Hahahaha! (is joke).

that was beautiful

fillergames · 2013-01-02 17:23:36

The Russian story had me crying. Nikolai Krestinsky has better grammar then me. sad

bananaman114 · 2013-01-02 17:29:49

fillergames wrote:
The Russian story had me crying. Nikolai Krestinsky has better grammar then me.

it's ok youll learn one day
im sorry i was so mean

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