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Why I want to join: I read and write a lot.
Writing: it makes no sense as just a sentence
I don't edit
I draw: on paper on GIMP
My favorite book: I have a fav series, just not book. Warriors
I will be as active as possible, and I am aware of that.

Last edited by mintfang (2012-09-27 06:51:53)

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laser314 wrote:

Why would you like to join Bookworm Studios?: I like writing and I've been wanting to join a collab since my old one went inactve 
Which role(s) would you like to do (Write, Review, Edit, Illustrate)?:Write, Edit
   *If you write, give an example of a good writing sentence:He ran down the path, legs beating against the ground like pistons.
   *If you edit, give me a sentence and say how to make it better: "I looked up at the pretty tree." can be changed to "I looked up at the beautiful green foliage" 
   *If you illustrate, give an example of your art:
What is your favorite book?: Probably the Redwall series
Will you contribute to this collaboration, and stay active, and are you aware that you will be kicked out if you don't?: I will do my best.

In!    Welcome to Bookworm. 

Also: Mintfang, you're in, too.

Sorry for not checking in... I had school. 

Last edited by humhumgames (2012-09-28 22:35:40)

Ravenkit bounded up and down, excitement filling her paws. "Who's here? Who's here?", She questioned Questioned? In my opinion, asked would be better  rapidly, her breath frosty in the Leafbare
weather. A new, strong scent filled the young cat's nose as she peeked
through the entrance of the soft MeadowClan nursery.
   "Shhhhh!", Dawnrise, Ravenkit's mother, dragged the kit towards the back of the
nursery. Ravenkit peeked Maybe use "looked" instead to avoid overusing verbs through a hole in the nursery wall. "Maybe it's a good thing they never bother to fix this nursery! It's as old as my mom!", Ravenkit thought as she stuck her nose through the hole.
   She smelled the strong scent again, although it mingled now more with the smell the tight moor to the east of MeadowClan territory.
   Ravenkit gazed out and managed to hear the hushed whispering voices of wandering cats and the more serious tone of their leader, Foxstar, and a mysterious, gruff mew. That was one of the kit's many talents: excellent hearing.
   Ravenkit leaned in to hear more of the conversation. SPLASH!
"Yuck!!", Ravenkit meowed, a little to loudly. She had landed in the dirt pile, to the side of the nursery. A mysterious clump smelled faintly of Lightfoot, a
delicate she-cat. "Not so delicate anymore", Ravenkit thought bitterly, wading in the foul-smelling dirt.
   "No, it's just a kit!" The mysterious visitor stood glaring over the dirt pile, a distasteful look on his dark face.
   "Ummm, hello?" Ravenkit tried.
   "I am Darkmoon, have we met before?" Darkmoon's expression turned
into a confused jumble of trying to remember something. But Ravenkit
knew and remembered who he was. She felt like cowering, but as long as
he didn't remember her, she was safe.
  "I don't believe we have met, I'm Ravenkit.", The shadowy kit mewed cautiously.
   Darkmoon just grunted in return, right before he padded away and into the entrance to the leader's den which was the Stone Tree. I'd use "Darkmoon just grunted in return, right before he padded away and into the entrance to the leader's den: the Stone Tree."
   That night Ravenkit worried. "Darkmoon..." She whispered, "I hope our leader knows what trouble you'll cause in the future."

Last edited by laser314 (2012-09-28 23:16:16)

Plus it should be
"She smelled the strong scent again, although it mingled now more with the smell of the tight moor to the east of MeadowClan territory"
or it makes no sense 

@Humhum did you see what i wrote about the timekeepers?

@Pinnipediator Hi!

Last edited by Whisperfur (2012-09-29 03:15:02)

mintfang wrote:

So wait, what do I do? Can someone help me?

Basically we just talk about books and write stuff. You can write a poem or story or riddle and post it on here and the rest of us will evalulate it    Or review someone elses thing, like my star poem ect. 
I'll give you some inspiration for a story    Your main charrie finds a strange padlocked box, write about how it looks, do you open it, whats inside ect. If you want that is :3

Feel free to ask more questions if i didn't answer fully 

mintfang wrote:

Mintfang was walking in a dream forest. She was looking around, and she saw a strange padlocked box. It was as big as her, and at least a fox length wide. She stuck her paw in a hole that was in it.
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Should I continue?

Sure sounds great so far    I might put something like" There was a hole in the strange box, curiously she put a paw inside it" rather then "She stuck her paw in a hole that was in it." But that's just me, other then that it sounds great    I can't wait to see what happens next

Use questions- think of a 'what if' question, you can base your story on that e.g. What if all mirrors are portals- the only thing that stops us going through is the person on the other side.....? And an extract:
Jake stood in front of the sheet of glass. The person on the other side looked at him. His shirt read ereh era uoy. Jake looked at the other jake. What if that wasn't him? What did he look like? He knew now that he couldn't trust mirrors.
The other Jake walked away. Jake blinked in suprise. Np

Soar, soar over the white snow
On golden feathered wings
See the whole world
From a birds eye
Wings waving, tails swooshing,
As one
Hearts beating, lungs breathing,
As one
Love,
Hierarchy,
Wings,
Tails,
Love,
Family,
Mother,
Father,
Brother,
Sister,
Grandma,
Grandpaw,
Aunt,
Uncle,
Wolves.

A little poem I wrote on Wattpad

Whisperfur wrote:

Minfang: I like that poem    Not sure whether it's about eagles or wolves though 

It's about wolves. I get some weird ideas. Sometimes I write poems about things, and it sounds like a kit wrote it!

Journey to the center of the earth!
Err, inheritance cycle (inheritance comes out in paperback around now, or very soon anyway)
The how to train your dragon series- there's a new one out.
If you want more, just ask!

Awesome! That is brilliant for such a short piece! Something by me:
To think, is not to philosophise if philosophy is what philosophy isn't.
To think is a privalidge.
All philosophy is thought but not all thought is philosophy. I will continue giving you all headaches later.