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CakePopAnimation wrote:

Pluroblox wrote:

New CP by me.
Haunted Busby 3D Game.
My brother and i went to garage sales to find games. I didnt find alot of games until i found a old man who had an ps1 game.... it said, bubsy 3D. He sold it 2$...  God.. can't think of a good story :C

Try putting a twist on an overused concept like NeilWest! 
Also, be sure to use good grammar when writing your stories.

I was used as an example! 

Animeboy975 wrote:

The Dream Master
Easter is making it's new CD, the Dream Master. The CD was the highest produced CD of al time, Nobody ever headed out to see why it was made.

After that year, people recorded/found out that year was the year with the most child deaths in Japan,most coming from the city Easter is in.

The song was banned quickly because the song had children aboslutley losing thier minds. They would escape their house/apartment/condo the dangerous way they could.

Even though most of them actually never died from that, it was still a big problem. They would go to the most dangeorous place there.

The X Eggs would come out quickly. A year later, The Gaurdians of Seiyo Academy decided to see what was up with the CD.

They went,and found the song was made with 4 X eggs instead of Black Diomand having 1.


That was my first scary story. It's beyond awful.

Ahahaha, this was so awful that I was crying of laughter. 

At first I thought you had just written this now, and I was about to start this entire ragereply about cliched and horrible it is. Then I saw the last line. 

samid11 wrote:

YES I AM.

noyournot
teeheehee

But yeah, I tried to finish mine but it became all suspenseful and explosion-y and not supernatural or anything... I can still post it if it's  okay or anyone cares.

Animeboy975 wrote:

The Dream Master
Easter is making it's new CD, the Dream Master. The CD was the highest produced CD of al time, Nobody ever headed out to see why it was made.

After that year, people recorded/found out that year was the year with the most child deaths in Japan,most coming from the city Easter is in.

The song was banned quickly because the song had children aboslutley losing thier minds. They would escape their house/apartment/condo the dangerous way they could.

Even though most of them actually never died from that, it was still a big problem. They would go to the most dangeorous place there.

The X Eggs would come out quickly. A year later, The Gaurdians of Seiyo Academy decided to see what was up with the CD.

They went,and found the song was made with 4 X eggs instead of Black Diomand having 1.


That was my first scary story. It's beyond awful.

what tense was that in...?

NeilWest wrote:

CakePopAnimation wrote:

Pluroblox wrote:

New CP by me.
Haunted Busby 3D Game.
My brother and i went to garage sales to find games. I didnt find alot of games until i found a old man who had an ps1 game.... it said, bubsy 3D. He sold it 2$...  God.. can't think of a good story :C

Try putting a twist on an overused concept like NeilWest! 
Also, be sure to use good grammar when writing your stories.

I was used as an example! 

For using overused ideas.

samid11 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

NeilWest wrote:

I was used as an example! 

For using overused ideas.

...Is it wrong that I just cracked up when I read that?

It was intended inoffensively as a joke so no I would say.

NeilWest wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

samid11 wrote:

...Is it wrong that I just cracked up when I read that?

It was intended inoffensively as a joke so no I would say.

._.

I didn't even though about the Core Theory and such when I wrote it - I THOUGHT MY IDEA WAS ORIGINAL.

I'm not even sure what you're talking about because I have better things to do than like
actually READ these

but you should always look around to see if your idea has been used.

here is a scary story(drum roll please!)

story wrote:

once upon a time there was a kingdom that did not exist.It's king was not happy that he ruled over a kingdom that was not real,so he set out on a journey to find the magical hfdj that legend said could make things real.On the first day,he asked someone where the magical hfdj could be found.the person replied :"the magical hfdj is guarded by a very strong guardian,so you might just as well give up".But the king was determined to find the hfdj,so he continued his journey.On the second and third day,he met more people and all of them them said the same thing.The king began to doubt wether he could find the magical hfdj, because it sounded like their really was a very strong guardian.So he stopped at the side of the road to think about it,and suddenly he realized that the sun was setting and said to him self :"I really should have continued to the nearest town".He made his tent and settled down to sleep.hours later he was woken by a scream,and nearly jumped out of his skin ! When he calmed down he decided to find out where the scream came from.When he came out of his tent and looked around the entire surrounding had changed ! He immediately realized something was wrong.He hadn't felt his tent move so the guessed that he had been teleported.Gathering his courage he walked forwards into a clearing in witch there was an old oak tree,and suddenly stopped.Right before him was the magical hfdj ! Struck with awe he went toward it.Then he realize that there was a giant ogre blocking his path.It was too late to run,so he charged toward it,not realizing that the tree was very slowly moving.Too late he realized that the ogre wasn't real and it was the tree that was the real guardian.That was his only mistake,and it was his last one too.The tree hit him so hard that he flew all the way back to his kingdom,and since he was so hurt he found not go looking for the magical hfdj. And he spent the last of his days advising adventurers not to try to find the hfdj,but they all just said:"I am determined to find the magical hfdj !"  THE END

dvd4 wrote:

here is a scary story(drum roll please!)

story wrote:

once upon a time there was a kingdom that did not exist.It's king was not happy that he ruled over a kingdom that was not real,so he set out on a journey to find the magical hfdj that legend said could make things real.On the first day,he asked someone where the magical hfdj could be found.the person replied :"the magical hfdj is guarded by a very strong guardian,so you might just as well give up".But the king was determined to find the hfdj,so he continued his journey.On the second and third day,he met more people and all of them them said the same thing.The king began to doubt wether he could find the magical hfdj, because it sounded like their really was a very strong guardian.So he stopped at the side of the road to think about it,and suddenly he realized that the sun was setting and said to him self :"I really should have continued to the nearest town".He made his tent and settled down to sleep.hours later he was woken by a scream,and nearly jumped out of his skin ! When he calmed down he decided to find out where the scream came from.When he came out of his tent and looked around the entire surrounding had changed ! He immediately realized something was wrong.He hadn't felt his tent move so the guessed that he had been teleported.Gathering his courage he walked forwards into a clearing in witch there was an old oak tree,and suddenly stopped.Right before him was the magical hfdj ! Struck with awe he went toward it.Then he realize that there was a giant ogre blocking his path.It was too late to run,so he charged toward it,not realizing that the tree was very slowly moving.Too late he realized that the ogre wasn't real and it was the tree that was the real guardian.That was his only mistake,and it was his last one too.The tree hit him so hard that he flew all the way back to his kingdom,and since he was so hurt he found not go looking for the magical hfdj. And he spent the last of his days advising adventurers not to try to find the hfdj,but they all just said:"I am determined to find the magical hfdj !"  THE END

TROLLACOPTER.

NeilWest wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

here is a scary story(drum roll please!)

story wrote:

once upon a time there was a kingdom that did not exist.It's king was not happy that he ruled over a kingdom that was not real,so he set out on a journey to find the magical hfdj that legend said could make things real.On the first day,he asked someone where the magical hfdj could be found.the person replied :"the magical hfdj is guarded by a very strong guardian,so you might just as well give up".But the king was determined to find the hfdj,so he continued his journey.On the second and third day,he met more people and all of them them said the same thing.The king began to doubt wether he could find the magical hfdj, because it sounded like their really was a very strong guardian.So he stopped at the side of the road to think about it,and suddenly he realized that the sun was setting and said to him self :"I really should have continued to the nearest town".He made his tent and settled down to sleep.hours later he was woken by a scream,and nearly jumped out of his skin ! When he calmed down he decided to find out where the scream came from.When he came out of his tent and looked around the entire surrounding had changed ! He immediately realized something was wrong.He hadn't felt his tent move so the guessed that he had been teleported.Gathering his courage he walked forwards into a clearing in witch there was an old oak tree,and suddenly stopped.Right before him was the magical hfdj ! Struck with awe he went toward it.Then he realize that there was a giant ogre blocking his path.It was too late to run,so he charged toward it,not realizing that the tree was very slowly moving.Too late he realized that the ogre wasn't real and it was the tree that was the real guardian.That was his only mistake,and it was his last one too.The tree hit him so hard that he flew all the way back to his kingdom,and since he was so hurt he found not go looking for the magical hfdj. And he spent the last of his days advising adventurers not to try to find the hfdj,but they all just said:"I am determined to find the magical hfdj !"  THE END

TROLLACOPTER.

are you saying that I am a troll ?

dvd4 wrote:

nama wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

once upon a time there was a kingdom that did not exist.It's king was not happy that he ruled over a kingdom that was not real,so he set out on a journey to find the magical hfdj that legend said could make things real.On the first day,he asked someone where the magical hfdj could be found.the person replied :"the magical hfdj is guarded by a very strong guardian,so you might just as well give up".But the king was determined to find the hfdj,so he continued his journey.On the second and third day,he met more people and all of them them said the same thing.The king began to doubt wether he could find the magical hfdj, because it sounded like their really was a very strong guardian.So he stopped at the side of the road to think about it,and suddenly he realized that the sun was setting and said to him self :"I really should have continued to the nearest town".He made his tent and settled down to sleep.hours later he was woken by a scream,and nearly jumped out of his skin ! When he calmed down he decided to find out where the scream came from.When he came out of his tent and looked around the entire surrounding had changed ! He immediately realized something was wrong.He hadn't felt his tent move so the guessed that he had been teleported.Gathering his courage he walked forwards into a clearing in witch there was an old oak tree,and suddenly stopped.Right before him was the magical hfdj ! Struck with awe he went toward it.Then he realize that there was a giant ogre blocking his path.It was too late to run,so he charged toward it,not realizing that the tree was very slowly moving.Too late he realized that the ogre wasn't real and it was the tree that was the real guardian.That was his only mistake,and it was his last one too.The tree hit him so hard that he flew all the way back to his kingdom,and since he was so hurt he found not go looking for the magical hfdj. And he spent the last of his days advising adventurers not to try to find the hfdj,but they all just said:"I am determined to find the magical hfdj !"  THE END

What?

I'm sorry, but... just WHAT?

very random scary story

It also had very random grammar control and spelling.

IATEWAYTOMUCHPASTAONEDAY Lol

sonicpikmin wrote:

The doll on the hill: In my childhood, I had a red human-shaped ragdoll that i used to LOVE Too much. It got in the way of my family, Diet, And even my usual way of life. But that was when i  about five, My mom took it away, And threw the poor thing into a landfill. I cried for days, Untill finally i snapped out of it and went on with my life.
Today i just bought my car and i was ready to use it. I had just got my driver's lisence and all that. Later on After my job, I Went driving up a hill for no apparent reason. Something urged me to contine driving up the steep hill. Strangely, There were no police around to stop anyone. In fact, NOBODY was around, Which made me feel a little lonely.
I wished my ragdoll was around, For my comfort...
Suddenly, The car stopped at the top of the hill, And then i heard a loud THUMP.  What i saw on the ground was a Suprise, A deadly surpise later on. I got out of my car to look. It was a torn up red humanoid ragdoll. Which looked like my old one! Ecstaticly, I put it in the car. I didn't know what little monster i was going to fix up then.. I then Got in the car and shut the car doors. Then drove down the hill very Carefully so i wouldn't ram into something. I finally got off of the hill in a matter of minutes. I drove to my new house that i bought yesterday, And went inside with the torn creature.
I walked around the kitchen, Sympathetically Wondering what would happen once i fix the Old rag doll.  I quickly went to work on the doll after a few small thoughts. "NoW wHeRe WaS- wAiT wHeRe Am I?" A Demonic voice spoke. Me, Being the coward i am, Fell on the floor, In shock.
I woke up from fainting, In a bed made of pure steel. It hurt to turn around or do anything. I saw a red rag doll, That looked like mine actually SITTING on the steel bed with me. "YoU ReAlIzE WhAt yOu HaVe DoNe To Me?" He said in a raspy voice. "Um.. No.." I hesitated. "Im GoNnA GeT VoIoLeNt If yOu DaRe" He warned. My skin was really pale at the moment, I shivered faintly, Knowing that SOMETHING'S wrong. "The dolls aren't gonna live." Then my rag doll disappeared Without me noticing. My New floor started to creek, And i heard screams coming from the guest room.
I wasn't going to take this FEAR much Longer!
I went in the guest room. The lights were off, Then a dim light turned on without me turning the Knob on that light switch. What i saw was HORRIFYING For a toy. Heads of my old doll were thrown in random places. Stuffing seemed to ooze out of my old Winnie the pooh Stuff animal collection. My old action figures were burnt too. My build-a-bear's Little heart things were put in scratched cabinets, And other stuff i didn't want to talk about. It was all to disturbing.
Then i saw my rag doll, STANDING in a corner, and said somewhat pridefully: "I want to know if you like my 'Trophies'." I was disgusted, The guest room was a mess, And my build-a-bears were just torn up messes of fur. This would take, like a YEAR to fix!
"Sorry, But No." I said. What have i done.
The doll's facial expression looked as if it was having A very realistic temper. He lit a match, With the match box and said something that still haunts me to this day, "You want to burn? Because it LOOKS Like it. Another day to live or to burn?" "Not today." I snatched the match from the doll, And burnt him. He screamed in Agony, Then said his final words: "I will NEVER FORGIVE YOU!" And he turned into some dust, and then i felt something come over me..
Guess who wrote this? ME! The doll who shall get you all! HAHAHAHHAHHAHAA!

What do you think? If it was too violent, Please let me know.

look at the comments above [/JustRemindingYouAboutThat]