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Magic Night

It was a chilly, frosty night. All was quiet, except for the melodious songs of the singing crickets and the almost pin-drop silence of the world's most famous investor and multi-millionaire. His name was Tom Harold.

Along a stretch, quick, stealthy footsteps were heard behind him. [I don't understand what that sentence means. Maybe reword it?] He turned his head to look around. He saw neither human nor beast. Soon, he turned left into an alley for a shortcut to his house.

In the blink of an eye, his mouth was clasped upon from his back by the strong and burly hand of an unknown stranger.
"Help!" he tried to shout out. His voice only came out muffled. He was heard by no one except for his assailant.

The unknown assailant pistol-pointed Thomas. Expecting a bullet in his head at any moment, he wisely said, "Trust me, death will come to those, who try to kill--" Boom! His words were interrupted by the sound of an explosion.

The hand on his mouth was loosened, and he manage to get free easily. He turned around. He saw his assailant, still wearing a mask, laying motionless on the ground. Metres away, stood a wizard, whose name was unknown to him. The wizard, in his thirties, was the famous Harry James Potter. [I would have liked to know this was fan-fiction beforehand. It is kind of random and abrupt to have Harry Potter randomly appear.]

Harry Potter was holding what seemed like a twig in his hand. They stepped towards each other, and shook hands. Harry Potter suddenly pointed the twig in to the air and said, "Accio Firebolt-Ace 2000!" much to the surprise of the multi-millionaire. To his greater surprise, when he looked up into the sky, he saw a broomstick flying at top-speed towards them!

The broomstick landed safely beside them and Harry jumped on, leaving Thomas standing there, hesitantly looking at the broomstick floating in the air seated with Harry. With a polite voice, Harry told him to jump on behind him.
"Are you sure this can carry the both of us?" Thomas asked in reply.
"Of course! The Firebolt-Ace 2000 can carry up to one million kilograms!"
Slowly, Thomas climbed onto the broomstick and sat there in awkward silence with Harry Potter in front.

With a jerk, both of them were suddenly lifted off the ground by the broomstick, and they soared up, high in the sky. The journey was extremely cold and frosty. I now wish i followed my wife's advice when she told me to bring a jacket to work, but I never thought that i would ever fly on a broomstick... Thomas thought.

He stared at Harry's back for a long time during the trip.
"Hey! Aren't you the world famous wizard, Harry Potter? I just realized that! I thought you only existed in books and movies! I feel grand to meet you! I am Thomas Welton Harold, also known as the world's best investor."
With that, they shook hands once again.

Minutes later, they landed safely in Harry Potter's backyard. Both of them went inside for some tea. Chanting magical incantations, warm, fresh tea poured out from Harry's wand into the tea cups that had suddenly appeared in front of them. Thomas just sat there, bewildered with surprise. ['Bewildered with surprise is very redundant.]

As they began to sip their tea comfortably, Harry Potter asked, "Why was that guy after you? I saw him pointing a gun at you. Why was he after you?".
"I am quite a rich businessman and many people try to attack and steal from me. That kind of things have been encountered by me before.' Thomas replied. "I usually have two armed bodyguards with me. However, I recently fired them for trying to steal my credit card. That reminds me... isn't killing against the law? I saw you knock him out. Thanks for saving me, but i think you might be in deep trouble if the authorities catch up with you."

"Don't you worry, I only stunned him. Although he cannot move now, he should be able to regain consciousness in a few hours. And how about this? You come to live with me, since there are many people who will try to attack you if you go away. I will teach you how to fly a broomstick and master a wand. I can see lots of magical blood in you. You should be able to learn magic quite easily." Harry remarked.

"Of course! Thanks for the offer!" Thomas said with an excited tone. [This seems very sudden. He believed all of this rather fast and agreed to that ridiculous offer in seconds. It seems unrealistic to me.]

After Harry Potter magically made a bed for Thomas Harold, both of them soon went to bed and fell asleep, awaiting for the next day to arrive.....

Spelling: Red
Grammar: Green
Wording/My Notes: Blue

I like it! And thanks for that, Wiimaster!

Oops- the topic dropped inactive for a whole day! Let's get it up with a limeric or two!

There once was a young sir called Hugh
Who had a little sister called Lou.
They went to a camp
Set up their amp
And had a disco in the portable loo!
(Yes that is my creation)
Say hello to my good old friend Mike!
He really loves to hike.
He once hiked so far
All the way to a star
He burned and came back in some light
(Also mine, made up on the spot, time taken-2 minutes)

My limericks? Wow? Do they get into the library thingy? [-o<

Added to the library. And, Whisperfur, happy early birthday!

Oops, no replies for a whole day? Let's keep this collab going! My new english teacher's really nice and wants to keep us pushed to beyond GCSE level (i'm year 9). So my writing might randomly shoot up in quality. No time to type today. Meh.
I don't think getting up really early, getting a headache, getting homework and missing out on writing time was worth going back to school. 

School... Man, too much homework. I spent 5 hours last night doing the stuff. Anyways... Haiku!

Bookworm Studios-
So inactive, it is sad.
Let's resurrect it!

Good idea- i've been  saying that for a week!

Oh good. Now we can
Get started on what we used
To do then (lol) yay!

Did i get the syllable arrangement right?

Why would you like to join Bookworm Studios?: Yes
Which role(s) would you like to do (Write, Review, Edit, Illustrate)?: Write/Edit
   *If you write, give an example of a good writing sentence: I disagree with this field in the form. Depending on when a sentence shows up in a story, any amount of description or mood could provide what is needed. Sometimes one word sentences work best. Seriously.
   *If you edit, give me a sentence and say how to make it better: See "good writing sentence" answer
   *If you illustrate, give an example of your art:
What is your favorite book?: Hard to say. I suppose my favorites would be the Harry Potter Series and The Hitchhiker's Guide Trilogy in Five Books
Will you contribute to this collaboration, and stay active, and are you aware that you will be kicked out if you don't?: Yeah (am I allowed a hiatus for a bit if something happens?)

humhumgames forgets -
you must talk in verse only!
To keep the rhythm.

I believe it's two,
and Zangooser's right, only
talk in verse- or else.

  We are very weird here, aren't we?

I can not remember
how to do haiku's so
this will be wrong

Hi!!!!!!!