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#26 2012-04-15 10:33:52

TheCatAndTheBanana
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Re: my sonic fanfiction(first attempt please tell me how i can improve)

Tipz:

-Use a dictionary or thesaurus if you must.
-Stretch the ways the characters act. For example, in one of mine, the evil guy says  "I love how you two are pinned to a wall, essentially doomed and here you are arguing like two year old humans. Please carry on! This is going on my YouTube!" and he later says it is "Mainly vlogging and stolen cat videos."
-Make it funny.
-Use proper grammar and spelling 'und dawnt taipe liek dis!!!!11!'


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#27 2012-05-01 22:50:25

FunDude
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Re: my sonic fanfiction(first attempt please tell me how i can improve)

bump


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#28 2012-07-23 17:53:46

coolboy2009
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Re: my sonic fanfiction(first attempt please tell me how i can improve)

Well, it's better than what I wrote the other day as a joke.

THE CHRONCLS OF NOBL 7

NOBL 7 WAS IN DRIVING IN A DRIVING WARTHOG. He got off to go lok around for bad alins the covenat. He grabbed cool metal weapon from ground of dead guy.

He then found covnat in base where the elits playd chess and were bord.

then grunt sad "NOBL 7 IS HERE" so the fird.

Nobl 7 thre grenad that was blue and sticky at them and the blowd up and drownd and died.

Nobl 7 then found nobl 8 on ground.

he sad "they have shot me and i am dedding"

Nobl 7 sad "oh no" and nobl 8 ded.

And then nobl 7 was hit an back with palsma swords.

He was on ground and slowly dedding next to nobl 8 who was a girl.

nobl 7 tooked off his mask helmet and smild and had grenaid in hand and the base blew up.

in the sky nobl 7 and 8 were happy and lived happily ever after.


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#29 2012-07-23 20:07:50

spongebob123
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Registered: 2009-05-10
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Re: my sonic fanfiction(first attempt please tell me how i can improve)

coolboy2009 wrote:

Well, it's better than what I wrote the other day as a joke.

THE CHRONCLS OF NOBL 7

NOBL 7 WAS IN DRIVING IN A DRIVING WARTHOG. He got off to go lok around for bad alins the covenat. He grabbed cool metal weapon from ground of dead guy.

He then found covnat in base where the elits playd chess and were bord.

then grunt sad "NOBL 7 IS HERE" so the fird.

Nobl 7 thre grenad that was blue and sticky at them and the blowd up and drownd and died.

Nobl 7 then found nobl 8 on ground.

he sad "they have shot me and i am dedding"

Nobl 7 sad "oh no" and nobl 8 ded.

And then nobl 7 was hit an back with palsma swords.

He was on ground and slowly dedding next to nobl 8 who was a girl.

nobl 7 tooked off his mask helmet and smild and had grenaid in hand and the base blew up.

in the sky nobl 7 and 8 were happy and lived happily ever after.

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