coolhogs wrote:
Good! But there are some things we don't need, like the interview with Holonai, and Timmy...
don't you dare say that or i'll ban you!
...jokes
seriously we need more than just the core joke, i know you like making one-line projects (like sticks vs circles) but really a good comedy needs loads of jokes and a good variety of characters. Plus, this could lead onto future comedies
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coolhogs wrote:
Hm...
I don't get the joke here...
because it's not the joke, it's a lot of jokes. you can add to the script but i don't think you have anything to take away from it that is unnecessary.
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Coolhogs...what do you want on the home page for the website? Accept the invitiation for weebly though. What type of pages do you want? Survey? Meet the members? Sponsors? About Us? Private Policy? Products?
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Meapinator101 wrote:
Coolhogs...what do you want on the home page for the website? Accept the invitiation for weebly though. What type of pages do you want? Survey? Meet the members? Sponsors? About Us? Private Policy? Products?
hey, do I get access? invite me not with xenok09, but the other one. I also need you on the ei thread.
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XenoK wrote:
Meapinator101 wrote:
Coolhogs...what do you want on the home page for the website? Accept the invitiation for weebly though. What type of pages do you want? Survey? Meet the members? Sponsors? About Us? Private Policy? Products?
hey, do I get access? invite me not with xenok09, but the other one. I also need you on the ei thread.
Sorry, I forgot about the other email. What is it? leave it in one(any) of my projects.
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Yoshiboy wrote:
I'll join! Um, could we make the story in this collab? You know, the story? But don't say anything about reality if yes...
What are you good at?: Um, you decide!
Do you consider yourself experienced in that?: 10/10! Lol!
By signing this, you will be in Animate Studios, and you promise that you will never give up this job. <- 1UP!!! YOU NAILED IT MAN!!!
NOT THE STORY. Please, him/her would get mad at me. (Borrego story, right)
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Meapinator101 wrote:
Coolhogs...what do you want on the home page for the website? Accept the invitiation for weebly though. What type of pages do you want? Survey? Meet the members? Sponsors? About Us? Private Policy? Products?
These:
About Us
Sponsors
Join Us
Products
Privacy Policy
Joletole, he's not going to get mad. After all, he gave us the script we will use.
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For the website, XenoK can you make a coming soon logo that is the same font and color as the Animate logo. It is for the website. As I said it should say coming soon.
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joletole wrote:
Yoshiboy wrote:
I'll join! Um, could we make the story in this collab? You know, the story? But don't say anything about reality if yes...
What are you good at?: Um, you decide!
Do you consider yourself experienced in that?: 10/10! Lol!
By signing this, you will be in Animate Studios, and you promise that you will never give up this job. <- 1UP!!! YOU NAILED IT MAN!!!NOT THE STORY. Please, him/her would get mad at me. (Borrego story, right)
It is the Borrego story... He would not be mad... He is writing the script. He likes the idea.
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hello? i wrote the script and i need feedback!
SCRIPT
also
Coolhogs: I am not continuing with CollaborationX until after the summer holidays. This is because i'm spending the next couple of weeks planning Spyro: The Flame Game, then I'll spend all of the 6 weeks in August making it! Sorry!
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Borrego6165 wrote:
Scene opens with a small but messy bedroom, with a young teenager sat in a chair on his computer. There is a poster with a picture of "Ugha" to give a hint to the future. (Ask me or Coolhogs for a copy of his image to put on there, but we won't tell you what it means)
KID
La la la la la la
The kid continues to sing whilst on the computer.
KID
Huh? What's this? Someone wants to ban big collaborations?
The camera pans to his face, then zooms slowly into his reddening face whilst he clenches his fists.
KID
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
The camera pans out, showing the kid bouncing with rage in his chair.
KID
They can't do this!!! Why would they do this??? I'm goanna seriously do something about this!!!
Then after a deep breathe, he pulls his chair into the desk and types casually. After a few seconds of this, we see him grab his mouse to click what is presumed to be "submit", before he pulls his chair back out and
begins screaming again.
KID
AHHHHHHHHHHHH! THEY'D BEST NOT BAN THEM! NO!!!!!!!!!
Next, some footsteps on the stairs can be heard, followed by his door opening. ENTER PARENT.
PARENT
Come on, you need to calm down! Come downstairs, relax and watch the news with us!
The scene switches to the living room, a long room with cream walls, and a sofa with an oak coffee table next to it. There are some shelves in the background carrying various ornaments. ENTER KID and PARENT.
PARENT
Now you relax now and enjoy the news!
The camera switches to the TV show. It is a show called "News that Jives." Scene opens with a soundtrack of trumpets and other news-style instruments.
Dave- a presenter, is sitting behind a desk with paper, a pen and a cup of coffee in front of him in the centre of a large studio with black walls and green borders, with various guitars accompanied by some music
notes painted on the walls. Next to Dave is an amateur presenter named Timmy, who is shaking slightly and has a large cheesy smile on his face. The camera flys overhead of a few ground-camera crew before fading
out into a closer camera facing both Dave and Timmy.
Dave: Hello there, and welcome to News That Jives-
Dave is interupted by-
Timmy: With me-
Timmy is interupted by-
Dave: Not yet! Welcome to News That Jives with me Dave and...
Dave indicates with his hand to-
Timmy: Oh and me Timmy!
Dave: On today's program!
An image of the scratch cat is shown on the screen.
Dave: Everyone who has made a big company on scratch will be banned and fined 329184219438123 dollers by BalegroU4AP
Camera takes mid-long shot on KID who is screaming again.
KID
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Switching back to the TV, an image of the Olympic Torch comes on upon a screen behind Timmy's head, as he explains-
Timmy: Sources say that when the Olympic Torch was touring England, one of the carriers was drunk and urinated inside it putting the flame out. The offender was attacked by the Queen who called it a "Disgrace!" It
has left many English citizens sick, confused and worried.
Next an image of some tornadoes comes on upon a screen behind Dave's head, as he explains-
Dave: We've been told that there have been a lot of tornadoes recently, so now, we will discuss with you how to avoid being sucked up by a tornado. Our sources tell us that here are the four best ways to avoid it. One-
don't go near one! Two- tie yourself to the toilet. Three- destroy the tornado with a bazuka, or four- run and scream like a little girl and call it a weirdo if it tries to suck you off... the ground.
Timmy: I sure hope this is useful to you!
Timmy than winks at the camera and continues smiling for approximatly three seconds.
Dave: Err... Timmy, you do realise that it's your turn to introduce the guest star.
Timmy: Oh, sorry Dave. So here's our guest star for today!
The camera zooms out slightly as lots of multi-coloured lights start flashing in the studio. During this a continuous drum-roll plays in the background which slowly speeds up.
Dave: Please welcome Mr Balony!!!
The camera switches back to the living room where KID is being shouted at by PARENT upstairs.
KID
Sorry!
PARENT
Do you realise how many things we're goanna have to sell to get anywhere near that amount? Looks like you're goanna have to be sold to the lab as a drugs tester.
KID
But they'll make me sleep in the mice cage again!
The camera switches back to the TV.
Halonai: It's Halonai!
The camera looks at Halonai, a well-dressed gentleman who is freaking out from being on telly.
Timmy: Mr lonley?
Halonai: It's Halonai!
Both presenters want to interview him but because they cannot pronounce his name they hesitate, pointing to each other as they try to mouth words which appear in subtitles on the bottom of the screen.
Dave: "You introduce him!"
Timmy: "You!"
Dave: "Ladies first!"
Timmy: "Go on then!"
Dave: So, mister. You have been called by many that you get nervous when you're being on TV, yet your proffessionalism at work is astonishing! Tell me, do you agree?
Halonai: I don't know!
Halonai drops his head into his cupped hands and begins to sobs.
Halonai: I know nothing I tell you! Don't do this to me!
Dave: Okay, well, what is your favorite thing to do?
Halonai: Well, I have no money so I can't afford to go out. I just sit at home playing solitaire with my Grandad's playing cards- god rest his soul.
Dave: Hmm... I see, very interesting. Is it true that you have never played football?
Halonai: Well no!
Dave: Wait a minute, I'm not interviewing you! Get out of here!
Halonai: For not playing football?
Dave: Yes!
Halonai begins to leave, but as he does he passes close to the desk of-
Timmy: Get away from me you sick person!
Halonai leaves. Dave drinks his coffee with a large gulp at the end and finally sighs.
Dave: Well, I don't know what to do now... Lets just wrap it up and say good night y'all!
Timmy: Bye! Hey I didn't get tight pants this time around!
Dave: That's because we weren't interviewing anyone like Katie Price again.
Timmy: Oh yeah!
Dave: Anyway, bye!
The camera pans out, the lights slowly fade off and the opening trumpet-soundtrack restarts. Next, PARENT is carrying KID in a cage towards the door. We hear fading out-
KID
Please don't! No!!! I'll look like Michael Jackson by the end of it!
Who's the kid???
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coolhogs wrote:
OK, XenoK, and Meapinator, I want that website done, today...
Coolhogs. That is nearly impossible. We can't get it done today. We barely know what you want it to look like. Xenok, we need a coming soon logo with the same animate font and color for the website.
Coolhogs see what we have right now.
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OK, edited the site a bit...
Yoshiboy, what do you want me to say about you in the Meet The Members page?
And Meapinator, what do you want me to say about RI?
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the KID can be anyone, and the parent can be anyone too
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Borrego6165 wrote:
the KID can be anyone, and the parent can be anyone too
OK..
So, are you joining?
I just thought of a good idea for an animation we could do now, or in the future, and it would give us a head start, while we're developing Borrego's banning-collab project, if we do it now.
Neon is the title.
It's all about this neon green square.
The neon green square wishes to become a neon orange square, which are more powerful than the neon green squares. The neon green square goes through an adventure to find that the machine that can turn him into a neon orange square is a myth...
Borrego6165, could you make a script for this, and add a few jokes to make it interesting?
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coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
the KID can be anyone, and the parent can be anyone too
OK..
So, are you joining?
I just thought of a good idea for an animation we could do now, or in the future, and it would give us a head start, while we're developing Borrego's banning-collab project, if we do it now.
Neon is the title.
It's all about this neon green square.
The neon green square wishes to become a neon orange square, which are more powerful than the neon green squares. The neon green square goes through an adventure to find that the machine that can turn him into a neon orange square is a myth...
Borrego6165, could you make a script for this, and add a few jokes to make it interesting?
woo! clearly someone is a fan of my writing I'll join as head writer then
i'm guessing this will be a parody of the typical adventure film with someone trying to fulfil their destiny (in this case becoming an orange square)
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
the KID can be anyone, and the parent can be anyone too
OK..
So, are you joining?
I just thought of a good idea for an animation we could do now, or in the future, and it would give us a head start, while we're developing Borrego's banning-collab project, if we do it now.
Neon is the title.
It's all about this neon green square.
The neon green square wishes to become a neon orange square, which are more powerful than the neon green squares. The neon green square goes through an adventure to find that the machine that can turn him into a neon orange square is a myth...
Borrego6165, could you make a script for this, and add a few jokes to make it interesting?woo! clearly someone is a fan of my writing I'll join as head writer then
OK!
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Yoshiboy wrote:
I like the script. But, I don't like the kid getting taken away. And we need to have most of the people involved in it... Other than that it is great!
what's wrong with the kid being taken away? does it sound too serious, i could get rid of some screams if you like
also, the parent and kid could be some scratchers too
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