coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Yes, I'll improve the plot, the graphics, and the character development as I go on with the comic. But as you see, I'm not quite a good artist...
why don't i make the next issue- and I call it Borrego6165's one-off special edition, then you can use that as a template and make your own comics after that.
Yes...
That would work out...
Then you could give it to me somehow, secretly...
no what I mean is I'll upload my own comic as part of your series, and it will be a "special edition" one so that readers know it's only a one-off by me and that you're making the ones after.
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coolhogs wrote:
I've decided on a name for the Circle, and the Stick in that one... The first one...
Their names? The circle is Eve, and the Stick is Max. The name is original, and so is the first one, in which Eve, and Max are featured.
Like it?
Eve and Max aren't original but I like them! I'll include them in the special edition.
Don't forget to read the message above.
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coolhogs wrote:
Oh...
OK..
Look at the bottom of the first page, if you didn't notice.
look above your comment...
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
I've decided on a name for the Circle, and the Stick in that one... The first one...
Their names? The circle is Eve, and the Stick is Max. The name is original, and so is the first one, in which Eve, and Max are featured.
Like it?Eve and Max aren't original but I like them! I'll include them in the special edition.
Don't forget to read the message above.
OK.
The reason why I didn't give their names in the first one was so that Scratchers could guess who they are...
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Oh...
OK..
Look at the bottom of the first page, if you didn't notice.look above your comment...
Yes...
Look above your comment.
I deleted it.
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This project is awesome.
Well, obviously, I would think that, because it's made by me.
It's still awesome. You know you want to review it.
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by ZaRiTo
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Addictiveness 8/10 A very addicting game!
Programming 8/10 It was probably quite easy to program. Nevertheless, it is glitch-less and the AI is good.
Graphics 5/10 Nothing good but nothing bad.
Originality 4/5 It's a classic game made in a good way! However, do remember that it's impossible to get 5 if it's not completely original.
Ease of Use 3/5 It was easy to use! However, it would have been nice if I could actually load it. The instuctions say press SPACE but really you have to press A to start.
Difficulty 4/5 It's not too hard or easy, but an option to make the enemy harder or slower would have been nice, maybe even levels where you lose points for touching things. If you'd have created even just 5 levels and one or two difficulty levels, you'd have also gained that extra originality point.
Sound 0/5 There is no sound.
Overall Experience 30/50 Very fun indeed! Just a shame that there are no extras, such as levels, good graphics or even sound!
TOTAL 62/100
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coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
I've decided on a name for the Circle, and the Stick in that one... The first one...
Their names? The circle is Eve, and the Stick is Max. The name is original, and so is the first one, in which Eve, and Max are featured.
Like it?Eve and Max aren't original but I like them! I'll include them in the special edition.
Don't forget to read the message above.OK.
The reason why I didn't give their names in the first one was so that Scratchers could guess who they are...
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E1 S1- Trapped In Jail
by StickFlix
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Plot Quality 9/10 An interesting story, with a good balance of genres. For once I want to watch the next part to a scratch animation! However, to get it a little higher, you may want to introduce the character.
Character Development 7/10 Some good characters, but it would be nice to know more about the main one!
Graphics 8/10 Above average drawings, but good animation skills. Perhaps some shots need to be a little smoother and the drawings need to be a bit more detailed.
Sound 4/5 Whilst the over-use of slapstick sound effects bring this down, the acting and the use of sound effects which did work keep this high.
Bonus for Other 12/15 Woo! However, unless the intro appears at the beginning of each episode don't have a skip button, because really you want something tense and dramatic (or hilarious) to draw scratchers in, which they shouldn't skip.
TOTAL 40/50
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coolhogs wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
Eve and Max aren't original but I like them! I'll include them in the special edition.
Don't forget to read the message above.OK.
The reason why I didn't give their names in the first one was so that Scratchers could guess who they are...
sorry, read this ages ago what was you waiting for?
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
OK.
The reason why I didn't give their names in the first one was so that Scratchers could guess who they are...sorry, read this ages ago what was you waiting for?
What??
I was waiting for you to say something.
If you're talking about the comic, I was waiting until the next one, by you, to introduce their names...
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coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
sorry, read this ages ago what was you waiting for?
What??
I was waiting for you to say something.
If you're talking about the comic, I was waiting until the next one, by you, to introduce their names...
right, so i have one week! i'll get on with it and their names.
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wolfdude999 wrote:
Could you review my games the arrow 1.1 and mirror remade?
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
sorry, read this ages ago what was you waiting for?What??
I was waiting for you to say something.
If you're talking about the comic, I was waiting until the next one, by you, to introduce their names...right, so i have one week! i'll get on with it and their names.
Or about 5 days?
If you could, could you give me the plot you're using for it?
You know, the joke?
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The joke? If it's a picture book with illustrated jokes than I don't think you'll need me to be honest. However, I am making a secret franchise which I will explain to you on one of your projects.
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Borrego6165 wrote:
The Level Game
by Benjamin2
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Addictiveness 9/10 It seriously makes you want to continue playing, but the lack of levels working online put you off playing, as many cannot be bothered to download it.
Programming 7/10 The programming is simple and effective, but it loses points on not working online properly.
Graphics 6/10 1 point above average.
Originality 4/5 It's like the idiot test, but the many features make this original.
Ease of Use 3/5 Whilst playing is simple, the complicated menu is too overwhelming, perhaps a menu which leads to sub-menus would be better? Plus, the pop-ups that appear block some of the buttons occasionally.
Difficulty 5/5 It's spot on. It starts easy, then gets harder.
Sound 2/5 There are no sound effects, and the music became very repetitive. Still, the music was good enough to last the first few loops.
Overall Experience 40/50 It doesn't work online, but it works brilliantly offline. However, there are glitches where if you click PLAY GAME to early, some of the menu buttons will not hide. However, this is a game that needs tweaking rather than mass-changing, so don't worry.
TOTAL 76/100
Yes there are. Here are all the levels I can remember that have sound effects:
Level 32
Level 36
Level 37
Level 50
Level 60
Level 61
Level 76
Level 77
Level 79
Level 80
Level 81 (my favourite level of all)
Level 94
Level 97
Level 99
Level 100 (A LOT)
That's just some I can remember. There are likely a lot more.
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benjamin2 wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
The Level Game
by Benjamin2
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Addictiveness 9/10 It seriously makes you want to continue playing, but the lack of levels working online put you off playing, as many cannot be bothered to download it.
Programming 7/10 The programming is simple and effective, but it loses points on not working online properly.
Graphics 6/10 1 point above average.
Originality 4/5 It's like the idiot test, but the many features make this original.
Ease of Use 3/5 Whilst playing is simple, the complicated menu is too overwhelming, perhaps a menu which leads to sub-menus would be better? Plus, the pop-ups that appear block some of the buttons occasionally.
Difficulty 5/5 It's spot on. It starts easy, then gets harder.
Sound 2/5 There are no sound effects, and the music became very repetitive. Still, the music was good enough to last the first few loops.
Overall Experience 40/50 It doesn't work online, but it works brilliantly offline. However, there are glitches where if you click PLAY GAME to early, some of the menu buttons will not hide. However, this is a game that needs tweaking rather than mass-changing, so don't worry.
TOTAL 76/100Yes there are. Here are all the levels I can remember that have sound effects:
Level 32
Level 36
Level 37
Level 50
Level 60
Level 61
Level 76
Level 77
Level 79
Level 80
Level 81 (my favourite level of all)
Level 94
Level 97
Level 99
Level 100 (A LOT)
That's just some I can remember. There are likely a lot more.
sorry, I only got up to about level 28. Still, you would only get 1 point as you would need sound effects all the way through, plus a song change. Still, don't be disheartened as sound is quite easy to sort out, and the total score is defiantly higher than other games I've reviewed.
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Borrego6165 wrote:
benjamin2 wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
The Level Game
by Benjamin2
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Addictiveness 9/10 It seriously makes you want to continue playing, but the lack of levels working online put you off playing, as many cannot be bothered to download it.
Programming 7/10 The programming is simple and effective, but it loses points on not working online properly.
Graphics 6/10 1 point above average.
Originality 4/5 It's like the idiot test, but the many features make this original.
Ease of Use 3/5 Whilst playing is simple, the complicated menu is too overwhelming, perhaps a menu which leads to sub-menus would be better? Plus, the pop-ups that appear block some of the buttons occasionally.
Difficulty 5/5 It's spot on. It starts easy, then gets harder.
Sound 2/5 There are no sound effects, and the music became very repetitive. Still, the music was good enough to last the first few loops.
Overall Experience 40/50 It doesn't work online, but it works brilliantly offline. However, there are glitches where if you click PLAY GAME to early, some of the menu buttons will not hide. However, this is a game that needs tweaking rather than mass-changing, so don't worry.
TOTAL 76/100Yes there are. Here are all the levels I can remember that have sound effects:
Level 32
Level 36
Level 37
Level 50
Level 60
Level 61
Level 76
Level 77
Level 79
Level 80
Level 81 (my favourite level of all)
Level 94
Level 97
Level 99
Level 100 (A LOT)
That's just some I can remember. There are likely a lot more.sorry, I only got up to about level 28. Still, you would only get 1 point as you would need sound effects all the way through, plus a song change. Still, don't be disheartened as sound is quite easy to sort out, and the total score is defiantly higher than other games I've reviewed.
If you only got to 28 I'll take this review with a pinch of salt as most of the good.levels are 40 and over.
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Borrego6165 wrote:
The joke? If it's a picture book with illustrated jokes than I don't think you'll need me to be honest. However, I am making a secret franchise which I will explain to you on one of your projects.
I mean...
You're still doing Issue 2, right?
If you are, then you need a joke to go along with it.
Take this as an example:
1 circle, and 1 stick have a rock paper scissors fight. The stick calls out "Asteroid", and an asteroid falls on the circle.
The bold text is the joke...
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coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
The joke? If it's a picture book with illustrated jokes than I don't think you'll need me to be honest. However, I am making a secret franchise which I will explain to you on one of your projects.
I mean...
You're still doing Issue 2, right?
If you are, then you need a joke to go along with it.
Take this as an example:
1 circle, and 1 stick have a rock paper scissors fight. The stick calls out "Asteroid", and an asteroid falls on the circle.
The bold text is the joke...
yeah i did see issue 1 with that joke, what i'm saying is that a comic should be more than a one-line joke, as really it's just an illustrated joke book. perhaps you'd be better calling it that then you'd get a much higher score for your graphics because most illustrated joke books are like that (ever read the suicidal rabbits books?)
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wolfdude999 wrote:
wolfdude999 wrote:
Could you review my games the arrow 1.1 and mirror remade?
i'm still goanna do these, haven't forgot!
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Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
The joke? If it's a picture book with illustrated jokes than I don't think you'll need me to be honest. However, I am making a secret franchise which I will explain to you on one of your projects.
I mean...
You're still doing Issue 2, right?
If you are, then you need a joke to go along with it.
Take this as an example:
1 circle, and 1 stick have a rock paper scissors fight. The stick calls out "Asteroid", and an asteroid falls on the circle.
The bold text is the joke...yeah i did see issue 1 with that joke, what i'm saying is that a comic should be more than a one-line joke, as really it's just an illustrated joke book. perhaps you'd be better calling it that then you'd get a much higher score for your graphics because most illustrated joke books are like that (ever read the suicidal rabbits books?)
What does a comic have? Illustrations, jokes, bubbles.
So does this.
So it's a comic, right?
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coolhogs wrote:
Borrego6165 wrote:
coolhogs wrote:
I mean...
You're still doing Issue 2, right?
If you are, then you need a joke to go along with it.
Take this as an example:
1 circle, and 1 stick have a rock paper scissors fight. The stick calls out "Asteroid", and an asteroid falls on the circle.
The bold text is the joke...yeah i did see issue 1 with that joke, what i'm saying is that a comic should be more than a one-line joke, as really it's just an illustrated joke book. perhaps you'd be better calling it that then you'd get a much higher score for your graphics because most illustrated joke books are like that (ever read the suicidal rabbits books?)
What does a comic have? Illustrations, jokes, bubbles.
So does this.
So it's a comic, right?
no! an illustrated joke book is like this! it has stick-men with simple line drawings in it. Yes these joke books have bubbles, illustration and jokes. For it to be a comic, it needs way more special graphics and an actual plot, not a joke. What I'm saying is, if you decide to call this an illustrated joke book, you can leave issue 1 as it is, but if you still want to call it a comic, then you need to completely redo the graphics and add an actual plot. Forget about the illustrations for now, what you're making is a series of one-line jokes in one book (project). The illustrations, like in real illustrated joke books just help to add humour where slapstick is used. Having a couple of pictures with a speech bubble does not make it a comic.
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your reviews are awesome can you review my project blue moon? it's in my stuff on the most recent page.
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