Hello once again friends! Erm... I'm typing this FanFic up in my LARGELY PLANED schedule, so It'll most likely be bad. But, I haven't been writing much and you know, practice makes perfect. If you wanna critisize, so be be it, but don't be mean.
I sat in my lab at 3 in the morning, creating a new core, with the personality of my friend, Jacob, who had died last month. I had the model, and I was programming the AI. When I got to the eye color code, I heard I small metalic click, and my door opening. About two seconds later, I looked back. Above the door, a small transpearent tube extended from the wall. Okay... that was weird. I turned back to my computer and began ferociously typing... Personality:aa:DNA-samp... that's all I typed, when, out of the corner of my eye, I saw neurotoxin coming from the tube. I didn't panic. I just ran to my door, punched it a code, and ran outside. I sprinted over to Rattmann's lab, opened the door his was next to mine. He was gone. He probably escaped. I checked Brody's lab also. He was asleep. Brody was an old friend of mine. I just wanted to escape now. I began running, I found a two portal device on the ground also. When I stopped running, I was at the face of a immensely deep chasm. There was a bottom, luckily. I shot an orange portal at the end of the hallway I was running down earlier. I jumped into the chasm. When I was six feet from the bottom, I shot a blue portal below me. I flew out the orange portal, at an amazing speed. I flew straight over the chasm, and found an old abandoned lab. I would have to do.
Months Later
I sat in a chair, hugging my companion cube.
Not done. :p
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Add in the story of him obtaining said companion cube.
And I find it overly-convienient that they have a multi-billion dollar device just lying on the ground.
And shouldn't he get the jumping boots Chell has if he wants his legs to not break after a jump like he did with the chasm?
And the neurotoxin happened at bring your daughter to work day, are you going to explain why they brought their daughters at 3 in the morning?
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TorbyFork234 wrote:
Add in the story of him obtaining said companion cube.
And I find it overly-convienient that they have a multi-billion dollar device just lying on the ground.
And shouldn't he get the jumping boots Chell has if he wants his legs to not break after a jump like he did with the chasm?
And the neurotoxin happened at bring your daughter to work day, are you going to explain why they brought their daughters at 3 in the morning?
*facepalm* Maybe I should change it to "I grabbed MY portal gun." Also, he fell it a portal at the bottom, so he didn't land. Well, It's just my first fanfic pretty much. Practice makes perfect, still.
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weegeeissparta wrote:
TorbyFork234 wrote:
Add in the story of him obtaining said companion cube.
And I find it overly-convienient that they have a multi-billion dollar device just lying on the ground.
And shouldn't he get the jumping boots Chell has if he wants his legs to not break after a jump like he did with the chasm?
And the neurotoxin happened at bring your daughter to work day, are you going to explain why they brought their daughters at 3 in the morning?*facepalm* Maybe I should change it to "I grabbed MY portal gun." Also, he fell it a portal at the bottom, so he didn't land. Well, It's just my first fanfic pretty much. Practice makes perfect, still.
You said he jumped right?
He must have landed somewhere.
It doesn't have to be down.
No matter what direction (except for up), your legs can't take hurtling at 50 mph (which is what I'm assuming he was at going over the chasm.
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