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ShotgunSam wrote:

calebxy wrote:

batman

but bruce wane is an orphan and gows almost down the path of revenge but decides to use his money to make sure no one will suffer like he did

batman is sucessfull cuz of his morality not relatablility but plenty of peope can still relate to the batman anyway becuz theyr parents passed on or left and they had to fend for themselvs
but your story i dont think any one can relate to when they have no flaws and stuff
u say that they will have them but i dont see any in the story right now

That's because I've written three pages so far. I'm not rushing to show their faults in the middle of a case at the very start of the story. Be patient. I'll show and expand on their personalties and flaws later on.

I've added a bit more. 

calebxy wrote:

Andres-Vander wrote:

That's 3 pages?

On Word it is. Almost. Well, now with the bit I just added, it's just over 3 pages.

What font size?

The thing with it is that you say that they have flaws, but they're only obvious to you.

PlutoIsHades wrote:

Liru wrote:

The thing with it is that you say that they have flaws, but they're only obvious to you.

But he's only three pages in.  He hasn't gotten a chance to show all their weaknesses yet.

Exactly. Thank you. 

Andres-Vander wrote:

I don't think 15-16 year olds would talk like that
Or anyone would talk like that

Most people don't, but my friends and I do. William's favourite subject at school is English, and he loves saying "verily". And indeed. And all sorts of not so often used words.

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Liru wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

Liru wrote:

The thing with it is that you say that they have flaws, but they're only obvious to you.

But he's only three pages in.  He hasn't gotten a chance to show all their weaknesses yet.

I'm not a great writer or anything, but aren't things like that meant to be somewhat consistant?

Yes, but I haven't got a chance to show their weaknesses yet.

PlutoIsHades wrote:

Liru wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

But he's only three pages in.  He hasn't gotten a chance to show all their weaknesses yet.

I'm not a great writer or anything, but aren't things like that meant to be somewhat consistant?

Well, you have to give Caleb a chance.  He's barely started.  They'll be revealed later, I'm sure.

They will, yes.

Andres-Vander wrote:

Updated yet?

No, not yet. You mean you're actually interested in reading more?

Andres-Vander wrote:

calebxy wrote:

Andres-Vander wrote:

Updated yet?

No, not yet. You mean you're actually interested in reading more?

Kind of

Well that's good.

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