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Basically I am writing a story about the Bermuda triangle and it's mysterious ness but instead of the kraken or something being there eating ships it's actually the us government there and it's sort of like a tress passers will be shot type of thing
And the government is conducting macabre experiments and creating artificial beings as war weapons
but most of them don't want to be war weapons
so they escape secretly on an airplane and form a gang called capricious
um yeah
I can give you guys the very beginning of my story and could you guys give me feedback or constructive criticism?



There are many theories about the Bermuda triangle. Some believe there is some kind of oceanic monster which dwells there, devouring any living being unlucky enough to trespass there. Others believe that there may as well be, some kind of huge whirlpool sucking ships in, which is slightly more believable. But if you knew the truth, you wouldn't believe it. You would just think it is a simple lie. But this is true, and it is still going on at this very minute.

A girl was opening her eyes for the very first time. She wasnt able to move, but she looked around curiously. She could hear voices surrounding her, saying odd things like "war", a word she had never heard before. Her eyes flickered around the room. It was a dark, dreary place that reeked of metal, blood and plaster. All this frightened, young girl could do was sit there and wait to get out of this odd tube like structure. Wait and look around.







What did you think? :,D I'm not much of a writer, haha.