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undefeatedgames · 2012-02-03 23:39:48

What do you guys think?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kr3 … eK9XA/edit
The topic is "What I Love Best About Astronomy?"
Some winners have also incorporated how astronomy has changed their life and scientific processes.
Give me tips!

undefeatedgames · 2012-02-03 23:44:37

bump

Freakish · 2012-02-03 23:46:33

Nice!

undefeatedgames · 2012-02-03 23:47:24

Freakish wrote:
Nice!

Thanks! Any suggestions I should make?

imnotbob · 2012-02-04 10:06:17

I like it and think it's fine smile

undefeatedgames · 2012-02-04 10:41:45

imnotbob wrote:
I like it and think it's fine

I'm probably going to redo the conclusion though.

imnotbob · 2012-02-04 10:43:26

undefeatedgames wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
I like it and think it's fine
I'm probably going to redo the conclusion though.

I think the conclusion's fine, but I'm not good at conclusions so who am I to speak? tongue

P.S. Geeeeeeesh Freakish.

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puppymk · 2012-02-04 14:44:06

I love your easy! I,m also interested in astronomy. I really Like stuff about dark matter and things like that. When you said think of a good clincher do you mean a good ending? Cause I think something like " It's a big Universe out there!" or something.

undefeatedgames · 2012-02-04 16:03:25

puppymk wrote:
I love your easy! I,m also interested in astronomy. I really Like stuff about dark matter and things like that. When you said think of a good clincher do you mean a good ending? Cause I think something like " It's a big Universe out there!" or something.

Thanks!
By ending, I did meant clincher.
While I think "It's a bid universe out there!" is a great clincher, it's not necessarily pertaining to exoplanets. Your clincher is too broad for my essay sad

jackrulez · 2012-02-04 18:53:17

There are some grammatical errors and such, but otherwise it's good.

undefeatedgames · 2012-02-04 19:54:07

jackrulez wrote:
There are some grammatical errors and such, but otherwise it's good.

Any examples of grammatical errors?

BTW I did some edits.

soupoftomato · 2012-02-04 21:19:27

puppymk wrote:
I love your easy! I,m also interested in astronomy. I really Like stuff about dark matter and things like that. When you said think of a good clincher do you mean a good ending? Cause I think something like " It's a big Universe out there!" or something.

I love your . . . I don't even know how to love easies but I hope I do!

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