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soupoftomato · 2012-01-15 10:39:57

You can call it "Taxi to Teribithia"

imnotbob · 2012-01-15 10:40:39

soupoftomato wrote:
You can call it "Taxi to Teribithia"

:p

jukyter · 2012-01-15 12:27:17

imnotbob wrote:
Girl X then mysteriously disappears [Gee, Elaine's life sucks]. Elaine is then left to battle the creatures in their land. She doesn't realize that the "creatures" are the bad thoughts in her mind trying to take over her good thoughts and her body.

Sounding better. I'd shell out some cash for that story! Well, if it was executed well. And the final monster is her thoughts of suicide?

imnotbob · 2012-01-15 12:31:16

jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
Girl X then mysteriously disappears [Gee, Elaine's life sucks]. Elaine is then left to battle the creatures in their land. She doesn't realize that the "creatures" are the bad thoughts in her mind trying to take over her good thoughts and her body.
Sounding better. I'd shell out some cash for that story! Well, if it was executed well. And the final monster is her thoughts of suicide?

Well, it's an addition to it.
Thanks!
I'm going to execute it as well as I can.

The final monster is losing her friend.
She doesn't care about herself anymore by the end of the "battle".

jukyter · 2012-01-15 12:39:50

imnotbob wrote:
jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:

Sounding better. I'd shell out some cash for that story! Well, if it was executed well. And the final monster is her thoughts of suicide?
Well, it's an addition to it.
Thanks!
I'm going to execute it as well as I can.

The final monster is losing her friend.
She doesn't care about herself anymore by the end of the "battle".

Ahhhhhh, spoilers!

imnotbob · 2012-01-15 12:47:02

jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
jukyter wrote:

Sounding better. I'd shell out some cash for that story! Well, if it was executed well. And the final monster is her thoughts of suicide?
Well, it's an addition to it.
Thanks!
I'm going to execute it as well as I can.

The final monster is losing her friend.
She doesn't care about herself anymore by the end of the "battle".
Ahhhhhh, spoilers!

Sorry
xP
Well
It's not the FULL end
But
Would you rather a sequel
Or what happened to Girl X in the first story?

RedRocker227 · 2012-01-15 12:50:54

brettman98 wrote:
RedRocker227 wrote:
veggieman001 wrote:
The MAIN character should die
Then they wouldn't be the main character anymore though
Harry Potter dies :I

Uh, no he doesn't...

Alternatives · 2012-01-15 12:55:22

RedRocker227 wrote:
brettman98 wrote:
RedRocker227 wrote:

Then they wouldn't be the main character anymore though
Harry Potter dies :I
Uh, no he doesn't...

Uh he does.

Remember the whole talk with Dumbledore and going back? He does die.

jukyter · 2012-01-15 12:56:06

imnotbob wrote:
jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:

Well, it's an addition to it.
Thanks!
I'm going to execute it as well as I can.

The final monster is losing her friend.
She doesn't care about herself anymore by the end of the "battle".
Ahhhhhh, spoilers!
Sorry
xP
Well
It's not the FULL end
But
Would you rather a sequel
Or what happened to Girl X in the first story?

God, we're having a bit of a banter aren't we? It all depends whether it's a nice comfortable end. I'd like a bit of mystery and I think if it just draws to a natural end, then there doesn't need to be a sequel.
Due to the Harry Potter series, the book world is obsessed with sequels and the like. It seriously depends on what you want to do.
Thank you for reading my rant.

imnotbob · 2012-01-15 16:41:18

jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:
jukyter wrote:

Ahhhhhh, spoilers!
Sorry
xP
Well
It's not the FULL end
But
Would you rather a sequel
Or what happened to Girl X in the first story?
God, we're having a bit of a banter aren't we? It all depends whether it's a nice comfortable end. I'd like a bit of mystery and I think if it just draws to a natural end, then there doesn't need to be a sequel.
Due to the Harry Potter series, the book world is obsessed with sequels and the like. It seriously depends on what you want to do.
Thank you for reading my rant.

lol
Thanks for your input!

jukyter · 2012-01-15 17:30:06

imnotbob wrote:
jukyter wrote:
imnotbob wrote:

Sorry
xP
Well
It's not the FULL end
But
Would you rather a sequel
Or what happened to Girl X in the first story?
God, we're having a bit of a banter aren't we? It all depends whether it's a nice comfortable end. I'd like a bit of mystery and I think if it just draws to a natural end, then there doesn't need to be a sequel.
Due to the Harry Potter series, the book world is obsessed with sequels and the like. It seriously depends on what you want to do.
Thank you for reading my rant.
lol
Thanks for your input!

You're welcome, notbob.

imnotbob · 2012-01-20 21:17:51

bump

Lellowsfuzz · 2012-01-20 21:35:44

Sounds similar to Bridge to Terrabithia

DisasterMaster · 2012-01-20 21:37:21

Hmm, I'd probably read that.

PlutoIsHades · 2012-01-20 21:38:06

That sounds EPIC. I would SO read that. big_smile

Agentpieface · 2012-01-20 21:41:31

It's good, just one thing. The first paragraph sounds EXACTLY like a simpsons episode I saw. Lisa and this girl went to a world of Equality, called equalia xD

Garr8 · 2012-01-20 22:04:41

good idea, have her think about suicide and the suicidal thought is the main villain of the story who gains power by making people feel bad

imnotbob · 2012-01-20 22:06:39

Thanks guys!

imnotbob · 2012-01-20 22:08:25

Agentpieface wrote:
It's good, just one thing. The first paragraph sounds EXACTLY like a simpsons episode I saw. Lisa and this girl went to a world of Equality, called equalia xD

lol, like I said, I missed that one.

Garr8 · 2012-01-20 22:08:32

youre welcome

bananaman114 · 2012-01-20 22:09:52

Garr8 wrote:
good idea, have her think about suicide and the suicidal thought is the main villain of the story who gains power by making people feel bad

haha, too much fantasy bud smile
this is more realistic
thoughts aren't evil

well they are
but uh
they don't intend to be evil to they can rule the world

Garr8 · 2012-01-20 22:13:01

bananaman114 wrote:
Garr8 wrote:
good idea, have her think about suicide and the suicidal thought is the main villain of the story who gains power by making people feel bad
haha, too much fantasy bud
this is more realistic
thoughts aren't evil

well they are
but uh
they don't intend to be evil to they can rule the world

Hey, its F-A-N-T-A-S-Y, she can do what she wants, besides Elaine could think positive thoughts and remember that it could always be worth, therefore weakening (the not so necessarily evil) antagonist.

soupoftomato · 2012-01-20 22:24:55

bananaman114 wrote:
Garr8 wrote:
good idea, have her think about suicide and the suicidal thought is the main villain of the story who gains power by making people feel bad
haha, too much fantasy bud
this is more realistic
thoughts aren't evil

well they are
but uh
they don't intend to be evil to they can rule the world

It's Bridge To Teribithia turned modern.
Like Westside Story was for R&J.

So basically, it's got fantasy in here imagination

imnotbob · 2012-01-20 22:25:47

soupoftomato wrote:
bananaman114 wrote:
Garr8 wrote:
good idea, have her think about suicide and the suicidal thought is the main villain of the story who gains power by making people feel bad
haha, too much fantasy bud
this is more realistic
thoughts aren't evil

well they are
but uh
they don't intend to be evil to they can rule the world
It's Bridge To Teribithia turned modern.
Like Westside Story was for R&J.

So basically, it's got fantasy in here imagination

*her?

DisasterMaster · 2012-01-20 22:47:45

Can I haz preview?

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