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Seems like a sort of urban, more up-to-date Bridge to Terabithia kind of thing
Have Girl X die at the end and kill the souls of all the readers
...Anyway, is it literally a world, or their imagination? In Terabithia it was the woods they 'created' it in, but I'm not sure where you'd find somewhere good for a fantasy world in the city

imnotbob wrote:

Wickimen wrote:

Seems like a sort of urban, more up-to-date Bridge to Terabithia kind of thing
Have Girl X die at the end and kill the souls of all the readers
...Anyway, is it literally a world, or their imagination? In Terabithia it was the woods they 'created' it in, but I'm not sure where you'd find somewhere good for a fantasy world in the city

It's their imagination 

Aha! Is she extra-bored in school, as far as subjects are concerned? In that case, perhaps it could be like Matilda on a grand scale. This stress causes her to want this equal world to be real, and because of her telekinesis, it does become real... hmm...

You should make Girl X
a. A guy, so I can call her X-Man (not really)
b. Somehow an outcast too. Like, she's really poor or fat, or she's of a different race/religion/something so they can relate.
c. If Elaine is a lesbian, have you considered romantic relationships with the girl or anyone else?
d. Have a sibling/siblings.

Also, I really like the story idea itself. If you're a good writer, it could be really good and explore themes like depression

Last edited by luiysia (2012-01-14 23:53:15)

Like Erik Fisher from Tangerine
*shudder*

The MAIN character should die

I like the idea, but it needs a bit more development 

NeilWest wrote:

The first paragraph sounds like the The Simpsons 'Lisa the Drama Queen' episode. The rest is original. Good idea though!

I keep missing that one 
Thanks!

luiysia wrote:

You should make Girl X
a. A guy, so I can call her X-Man (not really)
b. Somehow an outcast too. Like, she's really poor or fat, or she's of a different race/religion/something so they can relate.
c. If Elaine is a lesbian, have you considered romantic relationships with the girl or anyone else?
d. Have a sibling/siblings.

Also, I really like the story idea itself. If you're a good writer, it could be really good and explore themes like depression

q. lol
b. What I was thinking is that she's somewhat popular.
c. I've considered her being attracted to Girl X.
d. I was thinking she's a spoiled only child.

Thanks!
I was going to have it explore that.

brettman98 wrote:

RedRocker227 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

The MAIN character should die

Then they wouldn't be the main character anymore though 

Harry Potter dies :I

Shhhhh
Some people haven't read it
(I have though  )

But he comes back :I

RedRocker227 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

The MAIN character should die

Then they wouldn't be the main character anymore though 

It should be in first person and that's where the book should end

soupoftomato wrote:

imnotbob wrote:

brettman98 wrote:

Harry Potter dies :I

Shhhhh
Some people haven't read it
(I have though  )

But he comes back :I

It's like the story of Jesus
But interesting idea. I need to finish mine first though!

lol
But it didn't take three days
*insert guy with monocle*

Thanks!
lol 


@Brett: Yes.

Last edited by imnotbob (2012-01-15 10:32:39)

imnotbob wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

imnotbob wrote:

Shhhhh
Some people haven't read it
(I have though  )

But he comes back :I

It's like the story of Jesus
But interesting idea. I need to finish mine first though!

lol
But it didn't take three days
*insert guy with monocle*

Thanks!
lol 


@Brett: Yes.

But Jesus was in a tomb and Harry was in a train station.
Of course it takes less time in a train station, you can just hop a boxcar and get outta there. It takes longer to get out of a cold stone enclosed tomb.

jukyter wrote:

It sounds good. Also that sounds somewhat like an idea I had the day before yesterday. A girl's mother is succumbing to cancer and when she first goes to hospital, the girl gets the Wizard of Oz. The Oz books are her escape from reality.

Cool!
I added more:

Girl X then mysteriously disappears [Gee, Elaine's life sucks]. Elaine is then left to battle the creatures in their land. She doesn't realize that the "creatures" are the bad thoughts in her mind trying to take over her good thoughts and her body.