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#1 2011-10-29 18:03:41

Appaloosa
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I Need A Writing Critic!

I'm writing a story on Scratch called White Moon, Black Night. Please read the prologue before anything else. Can you please give me some tips?  big_smile


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#2 2011-10-29 18:06:00

Borrego6165
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

I will! I'm actually writing a murder mystery at the moment.


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#3 2011-10-29 18:16:40

alldaykade28471
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

I will!  big_smile

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#4 2011-10-29 18:37:27

Appaloosa
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

alldaykade28471 wrote:

I will!  big_smile

Thanks!


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#5 2011-10-29 19:21:26

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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

Appaloosa wrote:

alldaykade28471 wrote:

I will!  big_smile

Thanks!

Borrego6165 posted before me though... Give the job to him/her.  smile

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#6 2011-10-30 20:59:40

Appaloosa
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

alldaykade28471 wrote:

Appaloosa wrote:

alldaykade28471 wrote:

I will!  big_smile

Thanks!

Borrego6165 posted before me though... Give the job to him/her.  smile

No need--the more critics the better the story!  big_smile


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#7 2011-11-19 10:18:23

Natural-Horses
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

its great  big_smile


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#8 2011-11-20 18:55:46

Appaloosa
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

Natural-Horses wrote:

its great  big_smile

Aww, thanks, my friend!  big_smile   big_smile   big_smile


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#9 2011-11-20 19:31:49

Laternenpfahl
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

I'll do


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#10 2011-11-20 20:40:31

Appaloosa
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Re: I Need A Writing Critic!

Laternenpfahl wrote:

I'll do

Great, thanks so much!!  big_smile


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