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We have so many writing clubs now on Scratch. Yay! But I'm in so many, I'm not going to join.

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Name of the book: (Maybe) Predator

Chapter 1 Deadly Winter

It was the beginning of winter. Every animal and living thing and taken shelter in some place or another. In the Wolf Clan however, things were not looking bright... 'We need reinforcements!' shouted Erk the leader of the Wolves. They had lost over 200 wolves in the war against the Fox Clan and they had lost the huge battle and surrendered 2 kilometres of land to the Fox Clan. They now only had a population of 40 instead of the original 450. 'We must make allies to either the Monkey Clan or the Tiger Clan. The rest are our enemies!' said  Dinlet the wisest member of the Clan. There were 6 clans. The Tiger Clan, the Fox Clan, the Monkey Clan, the Lion Clan, the Hyena Clan and of course the Wolf Clan. 'We can't afford any mistakes or we'll lose the rest of the clan and our own lives and the Wolf Clan will be history.' said Erk. 'But I think we have 1 hope.' continued Erk, 'We must make allies with the Tiger Clan immediately.' However when the Tiger Clan leader called Hether and he was planning a deadly betrayal.
He was surprised at such an opportunity so early and so deadly. He told the messenger to say he agreed and that they would war against the Foxes soon, but he allied with the Foxes secretly and told them his plan.  At the battlefield it was 200 wolves vs 190 Foxes. There were also 10 Tigers. It was very fierce and when the Wolves realised the Tigers had betrayed, they were even more fierce and they eventually won the war and took back the stolen lands. Meanwhile, in the Monkey Clan, they wanted to ally the Wolves because Hyena Clan were planning to war against them. The Wolves heartily agreed.

(End of chapter)

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topazdragonlord wrote:

This seems cool    - and I love your current story! I'll be checking this post regularly and I'm looking forward to the rest of the story 

Do you want to join? Then a you can also write/edit books!

Wow, i just read those 2 chapters you wrote and they're pretty darn good. You could lengthen it a little with more descriptions like what the characters look like and few sentences explaining how the tigers turned on the wolves, like suddenly they start attacking them from within. Maybe describe the battles a bit more in depth, you can probably tell that I like describing.
Otherwise it's great, and the Hyena Knights on horses? I'd never think of something like that! (Partly cause it's kinda creepy but still cool.) 

sparky2008123 wrote:

Otherwise it's great, and the Hyena Knights on horses? I'd never think of something like that! (Partly cause it's kinda creepy but still cool.) 

Lolololololol 

jji10 wrote:

sparky2008123 wrote:

Is an editor spot still open? I'd like to help.
I would choose writer but I'd rather keep my own writing and maybe work it into a book.
I've already got a 47 page long book in progress, I mean, my goal is 150-200 pages but I've finished 47.
Anyway, I've got good grammar (I sort of taught myself; I'm homeschooled and my mom isn't that good at grammar but I have a personal collection of over 200 books, mostly fiction, and all that reading, though i haven't read them all, sort of helped me understand grammar) But I HATE grammar lessons, like Grammar Usage and Mechanics? It's terrible!!! (I'm in an online charter school)
So, editor spot open or not?

It's open 

Can you edit my work like adding details etc?

Thanks

Yea sure, I'll get it done by Sunday if I'm lucky enough to have that much time on my hands, lol

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