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I  love how like no creepypastas have characterization.

"I LOVE GAMES"
"something creepy happened in one"
"it haunts me to this day!!!!11!!!1 oooOOOOoo00OOOo0!"

banana500 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

I  love how like no creepypastas have characterization.

"I LOVE GAMES"
"something creepy happened in one"
"it haunts me to this day!!!!11!!!1 oooOOOOoo00OOOo0!"

Creepypastas are mostly written by amateurs who don't understand the main elements of a short story:

1. Characterization - every story needs characters it's common knowledge, but you also need to give them emotional depth. Give them background, give them personality!

2. Dialogue - another part of characterization. Creepypastas usually have little to no dialogue and that really kills the characters, dialogue is supposed to express their personality.

3. Well Organized Plot - a story needs to have good sequence, events and significant details need time to flesh out and flow correctly, most creepypastas I've seen really rush this, they are in too much of a hurry to "get to the point".

4. Suspense - a story really needs to grab the reader and keep him interested, it needs to be ACTUALLY CREEPY. Few creepypastas succeed in this area. Give the reader a reason to keep reading. Create obstacles for the character, physical or psychological.

At least this is what I think are the main elements, I might have left a couple out..
I'm not the best writer in general but at least I have some knowledge on what fictional narratives should contain (I'm a very prolific reader).

honestly jeff the killer was quite amatuerish imo

Animeboy975 wrote:

banana500 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

I  love how like no creepypastas have characterization.

"I LOVE GAMES"
"something creepy happened in one"
"it haunts me to this day!!!!11!!!1 oooOOOOoo00OOOo0!"

Creepypastas are mostly written by amateurs who don't understand the main elements of a short story:

1. Characterization - every story needs characters it's common knowledge, but you also need to give them emotional depth. Give them background, give them personality!

2. Dialogue - another part of characterization. Creepypastas usually have little to no dialogue and that really kills the characters, dialogue is supposed to express their personality.

3. Well Organized Plot - a story needs to have good sequence, events and significant details need time to flesh out and flow correctly, most creepypastas I've seen really rush this, they are in too much of a hurry to "get to the point".

4. Suspense - a story really needs to grab the reader and keep him interested, it needs to be ACTUALLY CREEPY. Few creepypastas succeed in this area. Give the reader a reason to keep reading. Create obstacles for the character, physical or psychological.

At least this is what I think are the main elements, I might have left a couple out..
I'm not the best writer in general but at least I have some knowledge on what fictional narratives should contain (I'm a very prolific reader).

My furby story had all of those

Repost and I could check!

EDIT: found

If I am truthful, it only truly succeeded in having a decently organized plot.

The one thing I take issue with is on banana500's list is dialogue - it is not necessary. But you only had two lines - and they weren't between two characters (not dia)

Where I believe you really didn't succeed is characterization. Sure, there is a character, but really he could be anyone. Aside from "an awkward loser who finds it necessary to ask McDonald's for their 2 cent toys", there's nothing much about him. You never show if this guys is, say, stuck-up, maybe depressed, naive, or some trait. Preferably many traits but it isn't the longest story ever, so eh.

And while you did just as well as most creepypastas with suspense, I kind of figured the furby was going to be evil, cause, y'know, focus of the story. There's never a question about what the furby is, or what it will do. You know what really makes that scary movie scary, or a horror novel horrific? It's the constant sense that something will happen, but you don't know what. I was pretty scared playing Portal because the super-white walls and lack of noise aside from GlaDOS made everything super eerie. "Evil furby yells" is not suspenseful. Perhaps a story where the main character has to watch his move every step - and the furby only attacks when he leasts expects it - would be suspenseful at the least.

So yeah, it wasn't the worst thing I have ever read, you have decent grammar control, the plots pretty much there, but it wasn't the most captivating either.

Last edited by soupoftomato (2013-03-02 21:39:00)

soupoftomato wrote:

Animeboy975 wrote:

banana500 wrote:

Creepypastas are mostly written by amateurs who don't understand the main elements of a short story:

1. Characterization - every story needs characters it's common knowledge, but you also need to give them emotional depth. Give them background, give them personality!

2. Dialogue - another part of characterization. Creepypastas usually have little to no dialogue and that really kills the characters, dialogue is supposed to express their personality.

3. Well Organized Plot - a story needs to have good sequence, events and significant details need time to flesh out and flow correctly, most creepypastas I've seen really rush this, they are in too much of a hurry to "get to the point".

4. Suspense - a story really needs to grab the reader and keep him interested, it needs to be ACTUALLY CREEPY. Few creepypastas succeed in this area. Give the reader a reason to keep reading. Create obstacles for the character, physical or psychological.

At least this is what I think are the main elements, I might have left a couple out..
I'm not the best writer in general but at least I have some knowledge on what fictional narratives should contain (I'm a very prolific reader).

My furby story had all of those

Repost and I could check!

EDIT: found

If I am truthful, it only truly succeeded in having a decently organized plot.

The one thing I take issue with is on banana500's list is dialogue - it is not necessary. But you only had two lines - and they weren't between two characters (not dia)

Where I believe you really didn't succeed is characterization. Sure, there is a character, but really he could be anyone. Aside from "an awkward loser who finds it necessary to ask McDonald's for their 2 cent toys", there's nothing much about him. You never show if this guys is, say, stuck-up, maybe depressed, naive, or some trait. Preferably many traits but it isn't the longest story ever, so eh.

And while you did just as well as most creepypastas with suspense, I kind of figured the furby was going to be evil, cause, y'know, focus of the story. There's never a question about what the furby is, or what it will do. You know what really makes that scary movie scary, or a horror novel horrific? It's the constant sense that something will happen, but you don't know what. I was pretty scared playing Portal because the super-white walls and lack of noise aside from GlaDOS made everything super eerie. "Evil furby yells" is not suspenseful. Perhaps a story where the main character has to watch his move every step - and the furby only attacks when he leasts expects it - would be suspenseful at the least.

So yeah, it wasn't the worst thing I have ever read, you have decent grammar control, the plots pretty much there, but it wasn't the most captivating either.

When I meant dialogue I also sort of meant point of view, forgot to mention that.

I found Animeboy's plot sequence to be all right, I liked how it would fast forward between different periods of time.

I agree that the suspense was a bit lacking, like soup said, we don't know what the furby is going to do. Murder the main character? That's just left for us to assume, really.

777w wrote:

weegeeissparta wrote:

BOBBYBOB3 wrote:

Nice trolling! Remember, it isn't creepypasta though.

Yah.
I just had to get it out SOMEWHERE.

not here

YES HERE

NeilWest wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

NeilWest, Crackedpearl was great, all your scary stories are!

Thanks. I'm glad someone didn't fuel the trollpasta.

Fun fact: This is the trollpasta thread.

hey everybody lets troll the creepypasta thread and creepy the trollpasta thread

Last edited by opiegs (2013-03-03 11:11:14)

opiegs wrote:

NeilWest wrote:

Waffle27 wrote:

NeilWest, Crackedpearl was great, all your scary stories are!

Thanks. I'm glad someone didn't fuel the trollpasta.

Fun fact: This is the trollpasta thread.

hey everybody lets troll the creepypasta thread and creepy the trollpasta thread

id be glad to help, except ive been banned 3 times and 4 times just sound annoying

banana500 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

Animeboy975 wrote:

My furby story had all of those

Repost and I could check!

EDIT: found

If I am truthful, it only truly succeeded in having a decently organized plot.

The one thing I take issue with is on banana500's list is dialogue - it is not necessary. But you only had two lines - and they weren't between two characters (not dia)

Where I believe you really didn't succeed is characterization. Sure, there is a character, but really he could be anyone. Aside from "an awkward loser who finds it necessary to ask McDonald's for their 2 cent toys", there's nothing much about him. You never show if this guys is, say, stuck-up, maybe depressed, naive, or some trait. Preferably many traits but it isn't the longest story ever, so eh.

And while you did just as well as most creepypastas with suspense, I kind of figured the furby was going to be evil, cause, y'know, focus of the story. There's never a question about what the furby is, or what it will do. You know what really makes that scary movie scary, or a horror novel horrific? It's the constant sense that something will happen, but you don't know what. I was pretty scared playing Portal because the super-white walls and lack of noise aside from GlaDOS made everything super eerie. "Evil furby yells" is not suspenseful. Perhaps a story where the main character has to watch his move every step - and the furby only attacks when he leasts expects it - would be suspenseful at the least.

So yeah, it wasn't the worst thing I have ever read, you have decent grammar control, the plots pretty much there, but it wasn't the most captivating either.

When I meant dialogue I also sort of meant point of view, forgot to mention that.

I found Animeboy's plot sequence to be all right, I liked how it would fast forward between different periods of time.

I agree that the suspense was a bit lacking, like soup said, we don't know what the furby is going to do. Murder the main character? That's just left for us to assume, really.

Some assumption is alright, but there needs to be some element explained in the story. Some visible consequence before the end.
Not to praise myself, but if you remember Parasitic, we have the consequence being the town falling apart and people dyeing. This builds up drama, and with the ending, it leaves it open with the implication that the whole world will suffer this and the main character needs to stop it, but doesn't know how. Throughout that story, the random pieces of time where he "forgets" everything due to his self-diagnosed amnesia keep suspense open regarding what happened in the empty spots.

opiegs wrote:

777w wrote:

opiegs wrote:

hey everybody lets troll the creepypasta thread and creepy the trollpasta thread

id be glad to help, except ive been banned 3 times and 4 times just sound annoying

when you have an alter ego/seperate account,anything is possible

Is your IP showing the same or did you realize this flaw ahead of time and work around it?

Firedrake969 wrote:

You're not supposed to get around a ban with another account.

I know this!

But I mean, they can't catch you with a "workaround" if your careful can they?

soupoftomato wrote:

banana500 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

Repost and I could check!

EDIT: found

If I am truthful, it only truly succeeded in having a decently organized plot.

The one thing I take issue with is on banana500's list is dialogue - it is not necessary. But you only had two lines - and they weren't between two characters (not dia)

Where I believe you really didn't succeed is characterization. Sure, there is a character, but really he could be anyone. Aside from "an awkward loser who finds it necessary to ask McDonald's for their 2 cent toys", there's nothing much about him. You never show if this guys is, say, stuck-up, maybe depressed, naive, or some trait. Preferably many traits but it isn't the longest story ever, so eh.

And while you did just as well as most creepypastas with suspense, I kind of figured the furby was going to be evil, cause, y'know, focus of the story. There's never a question about what the furby is, or what it will do. You know what really makes that scary movie scary, or a horror novel horrific? It's the constant sense that something will happen, but you don't know what. I was pretty scared playing Portal because the super-white walls and lack of noise aside from GlaDOS made everything super eerie. "Evil furby yells" is not suspenseful. Perhaps a story where the main character has to watch his move every step - and the furby only attacks when he leasts expects it - would be suspenseful at the least.

So yeah, it wasn't the worst thing I have ever read, you have decent grammar control, the plots pretty much there, but it wasn't the most captivating either.

When I meant dialogue I also sort of meant point of view, forgot to mention that.

I found Animeboy's plot sequence to be all right, I liked how it would fast forward between different periods of time.

I agree that the suspense was a bit lacking, like soup said, we don't know what the furby is going to do. Murder the main character? That's just left for us to assume, really.

Some assumption is alright, but there needs to be some element explained in the story. Some visible consequence before the end.
Not to praise myself, but if you remember Parasitic, we have the consequence being the town falling apart and people dyeing. This builds up drama, and with the ending, it leaves it open with the implication that the whole world will suffer this and the main character needs to stop it, but doesn't know how. Throughout that story, the random pieces of time where he "forgets" everything due to his self-diagnosed amnesia keep suspense open regarding what happened in the empty spots.

I do remember that story, and remember it being quite good (and remember being the first replier on that topic as well!).

But I thought that the whole parasite thing in the back of his mind was just himself, I didn't figure it would lead to a pandemic.

I'm not too great at writing horror, but I'm trying my hand at a psychological thriller and it should end up being pretty long (most of my short stories do, going up to usually 4000-6000 words...)

soupoftomato wrote:

banana500 wrote:

soupoftomato wrote:

Some assumption is alright, but there needs to be some element explained in the story. Some visible consequence before the end.
Not to praise myself, but if you remember Parasitic, we have the consequence being the town falling apart and people dyeing. This builds up drama, and with the ending, it leaves it open with the implication that the whole world will suffer this and the main character needs to stop it, but doesn't know how. Throughout that story, the random pieces of time where he "forgets" everything due to his self-diagnosed amnesia keep suspense open regarding what happened in the empty spots.

I do remember that story, and remember it being quite good (and remember being the first replier on that topic as well!).

But I thought that the whole parasite thing in the back of his mind was just himself, I didn't figure it would lead to a pandemic.

I'm not too great at writing horror, but I'm trying my hand at a psychological thriller and it should end up being pretty long (most of my short stories do, going up to usually 4000-6000 words...)

Calling 4000 to 6000 words long seems weird to me
Regardless of it being a short story
My pitiful attempt at NaNoWriMo, what did you do to my sense of scale!

I know, most short stories reach to about 11000, from the ones I've read, but eh, 6000 is a pretty big accomplishment for me, considering how my first attempt at NaNoWriMo (at age nine, not too long before I made this account in fact) was only 15000, and that was a huge undertaking back then.