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KalinaStar, the third verse and second verse need some work. The rest are great! Focus on the points: 'I want you so bad, you're driving me mad' (second verse) and 'When for us the sky was all blue, we would have a good time, just me and you (third verse). Currently, you are singing it off beat and it doesn't seem like you stumble in those places. Sing it to the rhythm of the song and it'll turn out fine! 

KalinaStar wrote:

Oh!!! I think I fixed it:

Sorry, I accidentally titled 'Verse 2' as Reload Verse 1 and 'Verse 3' as Reload Verse 2! Sorry!
Verse 2

Verse 3

Oh no, that's not what I meant. You stumble through the words in a wrong manner for both verses at the points I told you. Listen to the pan flute and come in at the right points, if you get what I mean. 

KalinaStar wrote:

This better be right or I'm going to bang my head against a wall 

Verse 2
Verse 3

I'm off to bed now, it's 12:00 AM in California. Thanks for all your help! I hope to talk to you more tomorrow.

Oh, don't bang you head against a wall! Failing is a part of learning, right? 

The problem you are facing at the moment is that the verses are broken up too much. You may notice that the end of each line in the verse rhymes with the other. You have to sing Verse 2 and 3 the same way you sang Verse 1, except with the different words of course. Pay careful attention to the rhythmic manner of the pan flute.

You are the best vocalist who has auditioned for Reload, so all that is required is a little more effort in the areas I suggested and you'll pull through beautifully!

Your vote of thanks is warmly welcome. I look forward to talking to you tomorrow too! 

I also did some parts of When I'm Beside You.

Verse 1

Pre-Chorus

Verse 2

Ending (Long break is because of guitar solo)

Last edited by KalinaStar (2012-04-01 14:30:26)

DIY wrote:

KalinaStar wrote:

Verse 2

Verse 3

If there is still something wrong, then I must be doing something incorrectly.

I will try to explain as well as I can. You still don't sing it entirely perfect. Instead of starting your recording from 'bad', record the whole verse. There should not be a rest between 'driving' and 'me'. Most importantly, 'me' should not be stressed or dragged. It is a rather insignificant word in this context, so do not stress on it. Also, later on in the verse, there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this'. Again you stress 'this', which shouldn't happen since it is also a rather insignificant word to the meaning of the song.

That's verse 2, but verse 3 needs a lot more work. Firstly, there is no pause between 'such' and 'a'. 'A' is unstressed, but 'time' needs to be stressed. 'Oh just me and you' needs to come earlier than you sing it. You stress 'me', but its should not be so. The word 'just' needs to be stressed instead. In the next line, there is no pause between 'picnic' and 'down'. Stress 'oak' instead of 'big' (which you are currently singing it as, it's wrong).

Please look into what I've said in detail and upload the tracks. It should be fine then. Keep the current tracks though, do not delete them! In the case you mess up in the new recordings, we won't have a better track to resort to. That's if you really can't perfect it.

Don't concentrate on 'When I'm Beside You' at the moment. I think I know someone who's voice would suit it more.

I don't know any better way to say this, but I feel like I've been singing what the Noteflight says! Like, I understand what you're trying to say, but it doesn't make sense to me when I listen to the track.

Here is what I mean in more detail:

You told me that there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this' in the second verse, but on the score there is a rest (quaver) between the two words, explaining my pause.

I don't mean to sound argumentative! This is just what I am seeing at the moment and right now it doesn't make much sense.

Last edited by KalinaStar (2012-04-01 23:35:34)

KalinaStar wrote:

DIY wrote:

KalinaStar wrote:

Verse 2

Verse 3

If there is still something wrong, then I must be doing something incorrectly.

I will try to explain as well as I can. You still don't sing it entirely perfect. Instead of starting your recording from 'bad', record the whole verse. There should not be a rest between 'driving' and 'me'. Most importantly, 'me' should not be stressed or dragged. It is a rather insignificant word in this context, so do not stress on it. Also, later on in the verse, there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this'. Again you stress 'this', which shouldn't happen since it is also a rather insignificant word to the meaning of the song.

That's verse 2, but verse 3 needs a lot more work. Firstly, there is no pause between 'such' and 'a'. 'A' is unstressed, but 'time' needs to be stressed. 'Oh just me and you' needs to come earlier than you sing it. You stress 'me', but its should not be so. The word 'just' needs to be stressed instead. In the next line, there is no pause between 'picnic' and 'down'. Stress 'oak' instead of 'big' (which you are currently singing it as, it's wrong).

Please look into what I've said in detail and upload the tracks. It should be fine then. Keep the current tracks though, do not delete them! In the case you mess up in the new recordings, we won't have a better track to resort to. That's if you really can't perfect it.

Don't concentrate on 'When I'm Beside You' at the moment. I think I know someone who's voice would suit it more.

I don't know any better way to say this, but I feel like I've been singing what the Noteflight says! Like, I understand what you're trying to say, but it doesn't make sense to me when I listen to the track.

Here is what I mean in more detail:

You told me that there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this' in the second verse, but on the score there is a rest (quaver) between the two words, explaining my pause.

I don't mean to sound argumentative! This is just what I am seeing at the moment and right now it doesn't make much sense.

The quavers are tied, so there is one count for every two quavers. The are a lot of ties throughout the song. If you listen to the flute only, you will get what I mean. You can then determine where you sing wrongly. I created the song, so I would know better than anyone else about the specific notes. And I thought you didn't read music?

I don't mean to sound argumentative or pushy either, but the point of redoing the first two songs and holding auditions for a proper, 'mature' vocalist was to make our songs sound as professional as possible. You are doing a good job so far, but it's just these points I really need you to focus on. Don't worry one bit about the other two songs.

DIY wrote:

KalinaStar wrote:

DIY wrote:

I will try to explain as well as I can. You still don't sing it entirely perfect. Instead of starting your recording from 'bad', record the whole verse. There should not be a rest between 'driving' and 'me'. Most importantly, 'me' should not be stressed or dragged. It is a rather insignificant word in this context, so do not stress on it. Also, later on in the verse, there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this'. Again you stress 'this', which shouldn't happen since it is also a rather insignificant word to the meaning of the song.

That's verse 2, but verse 3 needs a lot more work. Firstly, there is no pause between 'such' and 'a'. 'A' is unstressed, but 'time' needs to be stressed. 'Oh just me and you' needs to come earlier than you sing it. You stress 'me', but its should not be so. The word 'just' needs to be stressed instead. In the next line, there is no pause between 'picnic' and 'down'. Stress 'oak' instead of 'big' (which you are currently singing it as, it's wrong).

Please look into what I've said in detail and upload the tracks. It should be fine then. Keep the current tracks though, do not delete them! In the case you mess up in the new recordings, we won't have a better track to resort to. That's if you really can't perfect it.

Don't concentrate on 'When I'm Beside You' at the moment. I think I know someone who's voice would suit it more.

I don't know any better way to say this, but I feel like I've been singing what the Noteflight says! Like, I understand what you're trying to say, but it doesn't make sense to me when I listen to the track.

Here is what I mean in more detail:

You told me that there shouldn't be a pause between 'down' and 'this' in the second verse, but on the score there is a rest (quaver) between the two words, explaining my pause.

I don't mean to sound argumentative! This is just what I am seeing at the moment and right now it doesn't make much sense.

The quavers are tied, so there is one count for every two quavers. The are a lot of ties throughout the song. If you listen to the flute only, you will get what I mean. You can then determine where you sing wrongly. I created the song, so I would know better than anyone else about the specific notes. And I thought you didn't read music?

I don't mean to sound argumentative or pushy either, but the point of redoing the first two songs and holding auditions for a proper, 'mature' vocalist was to make our songs sound as professional as possible. You are doing a good job so far, but it's just these points I really need you to focus on. Don't worry one bit about the other two songs.

Well, I used to be able to read some music, but I hadn't done so for a few years. I knew that the little mark was a sort of rest.

Anyway, thanks for your time, but I've decided that I'm not going to continue auditioning. I've come to the conclusion that I can't make the commitment, especially since I've had to record so many times (not like it's your fault, it wasn't) and the tolls of seventh grade homework are beginning to dawn on me.

Thanks for all your help, and I wish you the best of luck in finding a vocalist.

@DIY
Have you listened to mine yet? Any comments on it?

DIY wrote:

KalinaStar wrote:

DIY wrote:

The quavers are tied, so there is one count for every two quavers. The are a lot of ties throughout the song. If you listen to the flute only, you will get what I mean. You can then determine where you sing wrongly. I created the song, so I would know better than anyone else about the specific notes. And I thought you didn't read music?

I don't mean to sound argumentative or pushy either, but the point of redoing the first two songs and holding auditions for a proper, 'mature' vocalist was to make our songs sound as professional as possible. You are doing a good job so far, but it's just these points I really need you to focus on. Don't worry one bit about the other two songs.

Well, I used to be able to read some music, but I hadn't done so for a few years. I knew that the little mark was a sort of rest.

Anyway, thanks for your time, but I've decided that I'm not going to continue auditioning. I've come to the conclusion that I can't make the commitment, especially since I've had to record so many times (not like it's your fault, it wasn't) and the tolls of seventh grade homework are beginning to dawn on me.

Thanks for all your help, and I wish you the best of luck in finding a vocalist.

Alright, I'm sorry to hear that, but I guess the band will have to move on from here. I hope we'll find a great vocalist, but please keep those tracks on SoundCloud up so that we can contact you and use those if we find no better singer. It's your choice I suppose if you don't want to be a part of this great band and I understand since I've been through seventh grade a long time ago, work gets harder through the years. Thank you for your time, it's been a pleasure talking to you.

Same goes to you. Don't worry, I'll keep the tracks. They'll still be up there.

Bump!

Geekish wrote:

Do you have an instrumental of any of those songs?

You mean master tracks? Yeah, but I won't be uploading them anytime at all as I don't want others doing a mere cover with singing since it's rather pointless. The album isn't released yet in addition to that, so the public must not listen to the mixed tracks (with vocals of course) prior to its official release. Sorry, but why do you ask? 

Geekish wrote:

Err I was going to... ya know... - audition..........

Really? You don't need the mixed tracks. Just listen to the linked scores (on the first post) on a headset and sing into a microphone while it's playing. The backing track should not be heard and the recording should be of good quality. That's all there's to it.