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Jack: My First Attempt at a Really Gory Creepypasta

"Mom, please let me play out with Mike, just this once?" Jack pleaded, he had always dreamed of playing out with his friends. His mum said no. As usual. Jack lived with his mum and dad in a small bungalow. Jack was treated like dirt and he was lucky to get two meals a day. Jack paced around his room. He decided to play on his GameCube, but which game should he play?

He decided on Luigi's Mansion. The nostalgia soaked Jack back, to the days when he still had his origanal mother and father. Oh how they had so much fun! They played in the park, they went to the zoo. But that fateful day, when everything changed. They were driving home from the carnival, and they were following a narrow road through the forest. They asked a passer-by for directions.

"I do not know of that place," the man sighed, "but, I think you should play a game." The family agreed and followed the man to his house. It looked like a stereotypical haunted house, so Jack knew it wasn't life-threatening, but it was. They entered the foyer and there stood a stall, explaining the rules:

This is a game of determination. You shall select the fittest person from your group to be placed in one chamber. There he will wait. You will then put the second fittest person in the chamber next to them. Acid will slowly start to flow to them, and pressing the button opposite a chamber will stop the acid, whilst the acid quickly reaches the second chamber, and vise versa. Choose wisely, pressing both won't work, they can notice the difference, no matter how small. The prize for the one who lives is a mystery, it may be thousands of dollars in riches, or the tiniest of all. By the way, there is no going back.

This had horrified Jack and his family. They wouldn't have wanted to play, even for the prize. The door was locked, so Jack's parents had to go in the chambers.


Jack didn't want to remember even more of the story, so he started playing the game. It had been a while since he played it. He picked to play a new game, and the cutscene showing Luigi walking through the forest was recognisable. When he opened the door though, things went weird.

It was still dark, but the set up was different, the foyer was exactly the same to the old man's, the one who he had met all those years ago. And there was another thing, the lights came on straight away. Thent he man came out of the large door opposite Luigi. He was still the same.

He asked Luigi if he wanted to play his 'game of wonders'. Jack, knowing this was just a video game, said yes. The rules came up again, but Jack just skipped them, and the old man lead Luigi into the room behind the large door.

There were two chambers, each with a button. There was acid at the top of each of them, but they were sealed in a large container. The old man said, "You are the weakest, but here are the strongest."

Then, by magic, my parents appeared in the chambers. It looked like this would be a tutorial of how to play. My parents, were crying tears of joy when they saw me, because they were staring at me and crying and saying things like, "Jack! We missed you so much!" then some ghostly figure came up between the two chambers.

The acid started, but slowly, to pour down the chambers. "You will have 60 seconds to save the one you love most from acid. If you do not make a choice in the time given, both chambers will fill with acid." The ghostly figure loomed over to my mother. "To save a loved one from the acid, you press the button opposite their chamber."

The ghost pressed the button. The acid stopped pouring for my mother, but my dad was soaked with the dreadful liquid. He was screaming an shouting as the acid ripped the skin of his body, and his face. His face melted away, with blood everywhere. He cried as he fell to the ground, and his cries stopped.

Then, this action was reversed and for both my father and my mother, the acid was back in their chambers. "But, if you do not make a decision in the time as I said, the consequence will go for them both." Then, after 60 seconds, the acid drenched them both, and after their bloody demise, they had died, as they did all those years ago.

"Now it is your go." And my step-mother and step-father we transported into the chambers. They shouted at me to stop what they thought was a prank, and then the acid started pouring. I still felt hate at them for treating me so cruelly, but then I knew that I had to save one of their lives.

"Come on Jack, what is this?" My step-father asked, and I replied, "I have to save either one or none of your lives." They saw the acid reaching them, and I could take no more. I switched off the GameCube. After a few seconds, I heard them screaming, "What have you done Jack? The acid!" And the screams continued, until blood leaked out.



Is that a proper Creepypasta?

Last edited by NeilWest (2012-03-10 06:18:59)

there is a Missingno creepypasta. Its not scary though it does creep me out. Its a glitch pokemon and if you catch it it restarts your game from the begininning or just ruins it.

Garr8 wrote:

there is a Missingno creepypasta. Its not scary though it does creep me out. Its a glitch pokemon and if you catch it it restarts your game from the begininning or just ruins it.

Smells like somelia

Animeboy975 wrote:

Stickman704 wrote:

^What?

The Theater
Have you ever heard of an old PC game called “The Theater”? Yeah, I didn’t think so. Probably because many people say it doesn’t even exist. You see, The Theater is an old computer game released around the same time as Doom. Today, if you ever find it, it’s only available on * bootleg CD-ROMs, which, more often than not, don’t even actually contain the game. The actual legitimate copies that they say were released back in the day feature a blank cover with nothing but the sprite of what has since been named the ‘the Ticket-Taker’. He is simply a poorly drawn, pixelated Caucasian, bald man with large red lips wearing a red vest over a white shirt and black pants. He is completely emotionless, though some say that if you smash the disc his face is shown as angry the next time you look at the cover, though this is just dismissed as an urban myth. What is peculiar about The Theater, though, is that there is no developer named on the jewel case, nor a game description on the back. It is simply the Ticket-Taker on a white backdrop on both sides.
The game was initially known for its inability to install correctly. The installation process immediately locks up the computer when the user reaches the licensing agreement. Also strange about the licensing agreement for The Theater is that whenever the development studio is supposed to be named, the text is simply a blank line. Anyways, most people who have claimed to owning one of the original CDs say that they figured out how to install the game by simply rebooting their computer on the licensing agreement with the disc still inside. Then they are prompted to press ‘I AGREE’ on startup. Then they continue with the installation. The game then starts up without any introduction besides a main menu that is simply the sprite of a movie theater’s exterior on an empty city street. The title fades in and then the 3 menu buttons ‘NEW GAME, LOAD, OPTIONS’. Selecting OPTIONS immediately crashes the game to the desktop. LOAD is said not to function at all. Even if you do have a saved game, nothing happens when you press it. Thus, NEW GAME is the only working menu option.

Once it is selected you are in the first person view. You are standing in an empty movie theater lobby, with the exception of the Ticket-Taker standing in front of a dark hallway which one can only assume leads to the theaters themselves. There’s nothing to do but look at the poorly-drawn, mostly illegible movie posters or approach the Ticket-Taker. Once the player moves towards the Ticket-Taker a very low-quality sound clip plays saying “THANK YOU PLEASE ENJOY THE MOVIE” along with a speechbox saying the same thing. You then walk into the hallway and the screen fades to black and you’re back in the empty lobby and you do the exact thing again and again and again.

While this may sound like a really horrible game, a number of peculiar things occur as you continue to play it. The number of times that you have to continue into the hall after giving your ticket to the Ticket-Taker before the strange events happen is unknown. Most state that it’s completely random and could take anywhere from the first playthrough to the four hundredth. What happens, though, has deeply disturbed some players.

The first occurrence is when the player fades back in after walking into the hallway. This time they will notice the Ticket-Taker is completely absent. The player then, without any other options, decides to walk into the dark hallway. The sound clip and text box mentioned previously still play in the absence of the Ticket-Taker, but when the player walks into the hallways the screen does not fade out. It goes pitch black as they walk deeper into the hall, but the player’s footstep sound clip is still playing as they continue to push the up button on their keyboard. Those claiming to have played the original game report to have felt extremely uncomfortable walking down the hallway, anticipating the whole way something horrible happening. Well, eventually the player is unable to move forward. There is nothing for a few moments before a strange sprite that is described as ‘the Ticket-Taker but with a swirl for a face’ appears and stands before the player. The original players of the game say their bodies immediately froze up and their stomachs churned they saw this sprite (which has been appropriately named the ‘Swirly Head Man’). Nothing happens as the Swirly Head Man stands before them. Then suddenly a piercing screech plays as the game glitches out. This lasts for a few minutes, with the screeching being continuous. Then the player is abruptly returned to the lobby with all the sounds and graphics being as they should be.

The game continues normally for the next couple of ‘cycles’ of entering the hallway, with a couple of the original players claiming the Swirly Head Man would briefly appear and disappear in the corner of the screen as a brisk ‘yelp’ sound effect plays. Then, at some point after meeting the Swirly Head Man, the player sees the Ticket-Taker pacing back and forth (though there is no walking animation - the sprite’s limbs are completely static, so he just hops up and down slightly as a substitute) with his eyes being wide and his mouth open to simulate a worried facial expression. Some players noted that the movie posters had been replaced with images of the Swirly Head Man, which caused them to immediately turn their character’s head away from the posters and approach the Ticket-Taker. Then another, different, low-quality sound clip plays, but the speech box contains nothing but corrupted characters that cause whatever text that would have been in the box to be completely illegible. Due to the extremely low quality of the sound, it is debated by players what exactly the Ticket-Taker says at this point, though it is widely agreed that he says ‘NEVER REACH THE OTHER LEVELS’. Then the screen fades out once again and returns the player back to their starting point in the lobby, but the Ticket-Taker is gone and the hallway is blocked by a large brick wall sprite. Touching the brick wall will immediately crash the game. And that’s all there is to it. No one knows what the ‘Other Levels’ are or how to gain access to them, nor is it known why the Swirly Head Man causes such acute fear in those who have seen him in the game. All the original copies of The Theater have either been lost or destroyed. But the creepiest part is the fact that is that all the original players of the game claim to occasionally see a brief glimpse of the Swirly Head Man out of the corner of their eyes…

As a side note has anyone seen the trailer for 'The Devil Inside'? THAT looks scary 

Edit: Since I'm on a scare rampage, here's another one.

In rural Wisconsin, there is an old abandoned park. Built in the 1920s, it served as the town’s gathering place for everyone. That is, until a newly developed Train and Tunnel for Tots™ ride was installed in 1932. It was an innocent looking childish train, with one main (mechanized) head car, with three small trolleys pulled behind it. It went around some loops before going into a small tunnel.

But this is where the story gets weird. There were numerous cases of child deaths that year, all of them happening after the child rode on that train system. Some kids disappeared without explanation during the ride in that short tunnel (about ten feet), and others went comatose after leaving, only to die from sudden un-explained death syndrome (SUDS) shortly afterwards. One, upon exiting, was found to be simply dead. Her dress was covered in what looked like small bloody handprints. Some killed themselves by scratching at their throats until they bled out, and one of them even killed another child before hanging herself with razor wire at the family’s farm. The park was closed, and the town’s popularity as a tourist town plummeted. Recently, a team of scientists were sent out to the park. They taped a video camera to the train, and put a crash-test dummy in with it, before sending it on its way onto the tracks. When the train left the tunnel, it was empty, except for the camera. The video was completely black, with very faint sounds of distortion and gurgling and the last ten seconds were nothing but static, save for the sound of children laughing.

The 2nd one is one of the best creepypastas ever.

this is getting scarier and scarier.

Finished my latest Creepypasta.

Agentpieface wrote:

anyone believe in ghosts? 

my mom saw a spirit that resembled my great- great grandparent standing at my crib when i was a baby. It scared her. The spirit looked at her, grinned and vanished

Agentpieface wrote:

anyone believe in ghosts? 

*raises claw awkwardly* ....Me.

samid11 wrote:

GLaDOS2 wrote:

Agentpieface wrote:

anyone believe in ghosts? 

*raises claw awkwardly* ....Me.

*holds up hand* me too

nope


C-C-C-COMBO BREAKER

soupoftomato wrote:

I am apparently the only one that can read or see these without being scarred.

I brushed off Cupcakes easily, if that means anything.

I brushed off BEN and the sequel like i do rain, if that means ANYTHING.

veggieman001 wrote:

Garr8 wrote:

here's a very creepy pasta

Obama was elected as president

:IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII

PRICE CHECK ON ISLE FOUR.

Why is no-one looking at my creepypasta Jack?

knuckIes2001 wrote:

+1 Slenderman

Have you returned from being banned by your parents?