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imnotbob wrote:

A drew his sword, and B, with a shaky hand, did also.
They glared at each other, hatred in A's eyes, fear in B's.
"I'll make you pay!" A said.
"Pay for what?" replied B. "What did I do?" B put his head down, trying to keep A from seeing him choke back tears.
"My wife... you KILLED HER!"
B lifted his head. Out of anger, he lifted his sword, saying, "I LOVED HER! WHY WOULD I DO THAT?!" A smiled. He had B right where he wanted him.
"I know you loved her. But I had her. She was MINE. You couldn't bear that."
B blushed, then clenched his jaw. He swung. The sword nearly hit A in the face.
There was a clang, a sound of metal hitting metal. A and B were trying their best. A wanted B to pay for what he did, and in his anger pinned him down on the ground.
B thrashed around until he got so tired he could barely see straight. As A retracted the sword, a single tear shed from B's eye. A swung down the sword, puncturing B in the heart. With that, A said, "You belong to the devil now."

Anybody? I changed it a bit, but it's too late to revise it now. I edited it in my topic about it, though.

ImagineIt wrote:

svinnik wrote:

calebxy wrote:

That's really good. Did you write that yourself, or is it from a book? And yes, I get the gist, thanks. 

I wrote that myself. Thanks. Get the princess bride references?

Write more!!!! 

I will, eventually. This plot seems interesting.

imsosuperswell1 wrote:

Me and my brother swordfight with nerf swords, jabs, perrys, blocks, jumping back, and all that other fencing stuff applies. Ask somebody who fences. 

As in not you?

svinnik wrote:

calebxy wrote:

svinnik wrote:

Mikhael stared at Daniel, his rapier drawn and a sneer distorting Mikhaels' face. Finally it was time to avenge his father. Daniel smirked.
"Finally you come. I was waiting for you," Daniel drew his rapier, its blade gleaming in the faint torchlight. "Let us finish this matter of revenge."
Mikhael stood in a fighting stance, "En Garde" He pronounced, saying the words that killed thousands of men and brought honor to many Spaniards.
The two men met in the middle of the room, clashing and growling like mad dogs over a bone. Mikhael's sword, Montoya, clanged into Daniel's sword, Rugen. The swords attacked each other like they were free of their masters, for when they were forged, their cores were the polar opposite and to keep the balance of honor equal, they must duel every hundred years.
Mikhael danced around Daniel, stabbing and slashing, only to be parried by Rugen. Daniel swirled and twisted around Montoya, saving himself by a few centimeters.

You get the gist of it. Or should I write more?

That's really good. Did you write that yourself, or is it from a book? And yes, I get the gist, thanks. 

I wrote that myself. Thanks. Get the princess bride references?

Um, 'refernces'?  I get Montoya, but that's it.

maxskywalker wrote:

I suggest doing some research, both on methods/strategies/moves and terminology.  You don't wanna call a longsword a claymore, or some other embarrassing mistake.

I don't know what either of those words mean.    Well, I can guess what a longsword is. 

PlutoIsHades wrote:

calebxy wrote:

brettman98 wrote:

what's so funny about blood and violence? You sick person.

Sword fights are a fundamental part of certain genres of stories. While sword fights are nasty things, there was really no need for that comment. It's like if I was saying "How to think up an unusual plot for an art stealing story" and then you say "Stealing great pieces of art is an awful, terrible thing to do."

Exactly.  It makes an interesting story.  And it's way better than resolving things through words.

that's rather twisted. words are much better than swords, and saying you enjoy people trying to kill each other is macabre. also, you are mostly wrong. there are hundreds upon thousands of great stories (classics) that don't include swords. To kill a mockingbird, Alice in wonderland, Black beauty, etc.

brettman98 wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

calebxy wrote:

Sword fights are a fundamental part of certain genres of stories. While sword fights are nasty things, there was really no need for that comment. It's like if I was saying "How to think up an unusual plot for an art stealing story" and then you say "Stealing great pieces of art is an awful, terrible thing to do."

Exactly.  It makes an interesting story.  And it's way better than resolving things through words.

that's rather twisted. words are much better than swords, and saying you enjoy people trying to kill each other is macabre. also, you are mostly wrong. there are hundreds upon thousands of great stories (classics) that don't include swords. To kill a mockingbird, Alice in wonderland, Black beauty, etc.

And none of those books involve swords as a fundamental part of the story.

Guy A kicks Guy B where it hurts then stabs him. 'nuff said.

calebxy wrote:

Star_the_fox wrote:

Guy A kicks Guy B where it hurts then stabs him. 'nuff said.

Star! You are still here?!?!?!? I haven't seen you in AGES!!!!!!!!!!!

Excessive exclamation points noted, but hello to you too, Caleb. I assume life has been going well?

PlutoIsHades wrote:

brettman98 wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

Exactly.  It makes an interesting story.  And it's way better than resolving things through words.

that's rather twisted. words are much better than swords, and saying you enjoy people trying to kill each other is macabre. also, you are mostly wrong. there are hundreds upon thousands of great stories (classics) that don't include swords. To kill a mockingbird, Alice in wonderland, Black beauty, etc.

There are a few classics that I like - Tom Sawyer, Huck Finn - that are like that, but everyone has different tastes.  Just because something is a classic doesn't mean that I have to like it.  In fact, I prefer little-known books.   And just because you don't like fighting doesn't mean my opinion is wrong.  I like action-filled, fantasy-sci fi, fighty books.  It's wrong to judge me like that just because I like those types of books.
And have you seen the new Alice in Wonderland movie?  Alice vs. Jabberwocky?

Brett, *cough*.  Do you believe my opinion is wrong?

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

PlutoIsHades wrote:

There are a few classics that I like - Tom Sawyer, Huck Finn - that are like that, but everyone has different tastes.  Just because something is a classic doesn't mean that I have to like it.  In fact, I prefer little-known books.   And just because you don't like fighting doesn't mean my opinion is wrong.  I like action-filled, fantasy-sci fi, fighty books.  It's wrong to judge me like that just because I like those types of books.
And have you seen the new Alice in Wonderland movie?  Alice vs. Jabberwocky?

Brett, *cough*.  Do you believe my opinion is wrong?

*cough*

lol

Let's see it then.