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Metal. Clanging. Swords swung near certain places that hurt if smacked or cut. Anger. Yelling. Sweat.

enjoy c:

Mikhael stared at Daniel, his rapier drawn and a sneer distorting Mikhaels' face. Finally it was time to avenge his father. Daniel smirked.
"Finally you come. I was waiting for you," Daniel drew his rapier, its blade gleaming in the faint torchlight. "Let us finish this matter of revenge."
Mikhael stood in a fighting stance, "En Garde" He pronounced, saying the words that killed thousands of men and brought honor to many Spaniards.
The two men met in the middle of the room, clashing and growling like mad dogs over a bone. Mikhael's sword, Montoya, clanged into Daniel's sword, Rugen. The swords attacked each other like they were free of their masters, for when they were forged, their cores were the polar opposite and to keep the balance of honor equal, they must duel every hundred years.
Mikhael danced around Daniel, stabbing and slashing, only to be parried by Rugen. Daniel swirled and twisted around Montoya, saving himself by a few centimeters.

You get the gist of it. Or should I write more?

calebxy wrote:

svinnik wrote:

Mikhael stared at Daniel, his rapier drawn and a sneer distorting Mikhaels' face. Finally it was time to avenge his father. Daniel smirked.
"Finally you come. I was waiting for you," Daniel drew his rapier, its blade gleaming in the faint torchlight. "Let us finish this matter of revenge."
Mikhael stood in a fighting stance, "En Garde" He pronounced, saying the words that killed thousands of men and brought honor to many Spaniards.
The two men met in the middle of the room, clashing and growling like mad dogs over a bone. Mikhael's sword, Montoya, clanged into Daniel's sword, Rugen. The swords attacked each other like they were free of their masters, for when they were forged, their cores were the polar opposite and to keep the balance of honor equal, they must duel every hundred years.
Mikhael danced around Daniel, stabbing and slashing, only to be parried by Rugen. Daniel swirled and twisted around Montoya, saving himself by a few centimeters.

You get the gist of it. Or should I write more?

That's really good. Did you write that yourself, or is it from a book? And yes, I get the gist, thanks. 

I wrote that myself. Thanks. Get the princess bride references?

svinnik wrote:

calebxy wrote:

svinnik wrote:

Mikhael stared at Daniel, his rapier drawn and a sneer distorting Mikhaels' face. Finally it was time to avenge his father. Daniel smirked.
"Finally you come. I was waiting for you," Daniel drew his rapier, its blade gleaming in the faint torchlight. "Let us finish this matter of revenge."
Mikhael stood in a fighting stance, "En Garde" He pronounced, saying the words that killed thousands of men and brought honor to many Spaniards.
The two men met in the middle of the room, clashing and growling like mad dogs over a bone. Mikhael's sword, Montoya, clanged into Daniel's sword, Rugen. The swords attacked each other like they were free of their masters, for when they were forged, their cores were the polar opposite and to keep the balance of honor equal, they must duel every hundred years.
Mikhael danced around Daniel, stabbing and slashing, only to be parried by Rugen. Daniel swirled and twisted around Montoya, saving himself by a few centimeters.

You get the gist of it. Or should I write more?

That's really good. Did you write that yourself, or is it from a book? And yes, I get the gist, thanks. 

I wrote that myself. Thanks. Get the princess bride references?

lol yeah, I do. 

calebxy wrote:

svinnik wrote:

calebxy wrote:

That's really good. Did you write that yourself, or is it from a book? And yes, I get the gist, thanks. 

I wrote that myself. Thanks. Get the princess bride references?

lol yeah, I do. 

Wanna do a tag story? I write one chapter, email it to you, and you do one, then email me that one?

Maybe look up fencing/sword fight terms? That might help 

TVflea wrote:

Why would you want to

Because sword fights are exciting, and therefore make a story exciting. And they are also quite a necessary part of the story, if it's a story like The Three Musketeers, or a fantasy story, etc.

lilacfuzz101 wrote:

Maybe look up fencing/sword fight terms? That might help 

But that would probably confuse the reader, unless they are familiar with those terms. There are simple ones that most people would know, such as block and parry.

lilacfuzz101 wrote:

calebxy wrote:

lilacfuzz101 wrote:

Maybe look up fencing/sword fight terms? That might help 

But that would probably confuse the reader, unless they are familiar with those terms. There are simple ones that most people would know, such as block and parry.

Yeah, that's sort of what I ment... I'm not very good at action scences either. I have major writer's block on this one story I'm working on because the next scene sort of needs to be action-y (I haven't updated it in over 2 months now....).

lol. I tend to get writers block when I'm writing something that isn't action! 

WindowsExplorer wrote:

TVflea wrote:

Why would you want to

[offtopic]TVflea, how did you get all those sig lines?[/offtopic]

I know some tricks. 

calebxy wrote:

lilacfuzz101 wrote:

calebxy wrote:

But that would probably confuse the reader, unless they are familiar with those terms. There are simple ones that most people would know, such as block and parry.

Yeah, that's sort of what I ment... I'm not very good at action scences either. I have major writer's block on this one story I'm working on because the next scene sort of needs to be action-y (I haven't updated it in over 2 months now....).

lol. I tend to get writers block when I'm writing something that isn't action! 

Cal, check your messages.

CheeseMunchy wrote:

"He hits the guys sword and he falls on the ground and he gets stabbed!"
Hows mine    great huh.             incase you didn't know that was a joke.