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#1 2011-03-23 07:02:44
My song writing :/
me wrote:
Don't Go
[i]
Don't go on without me
Please don't leave
for without the courage you give me
I ain't who you think
Chorus:
Oh no, Oh no
Don't you go!
I'll hold you down by the hands
For when you leave,
my courage leaves me
So Oh No Don't go
If you leave,
My life leaves me,
'cause it follows you
So when you see me trail behind
You'll know who i am
Chorus...
So please don't go,
Please stay with me,
Cause i'm always behind you,
when you leave.
There's no place to go.
/There's more to life\
I woke up in the morning,
saw the sun bright,
There was nothing out,
of the ordinary
Just normal life
chorus
There's more to life then you think,
More than i can know,
more than a scientist dreams of,
More than they care
When the night creeps up,
i think what's out there
But what i know is this
we can't live alone.
I'm tired. I'll think better next time 
Hey. It's me SSSS, back from the dead!
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#2 2011-03-23 07:15:04
- ProgrammingFreak
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- Registered: 2010-09-04
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Re: My song writing :/
I like 'em! But there were spots I might tweak into ryhming. Thats just me though. 
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#3 2011-03-23 07:30:42
Re: My song writing :/
here are lyrics from one of my favourite songs:
blink-182 wrote:
Are we all victims of opportunity
Locked outside the door back in '83.
I heard the angry voice of the man
inside and saw the look of fear
in my mother's eyes.
GO GO GO GO
I don't wanna know
I don't wanna know
Mom get in the car and let's
drive away she said "I'm
sorry Mark but there's
nowhere to stay", gave up
all her hope and went back inside
hid her broken heart and let
the engine die.
GO GO GO GO
I don't wanna know
I don't wanna know
Why do evil man get away with
it? Can't you see that I'm in a
world of #$%$#? Turn your back
on hope and go back inside,
stop my bleeding heart and
let the engine die.
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
I DON'T WANNA KNOW
notice how the lyrics aren't cliche' and cheesy.
good luck! 
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