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#1 2010-02-24 19:40:29

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"Combine" My Story-In Progress

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This is a short story that I wrote, nothing too good, just something I did when I was bored. If you have played Half-Life, this will sound familiar because I use some names from there. Here goes
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                                        Prologue
   The year was 2002. The governments from every country in the world had come together to create the "United Nations". People did not like the idea of being all in one nation, so they started to rebel. Meanwhile, scientists had made an anti-depressant drug that could completely relax people. In the first test of the drug, the subject showed no sign of any problems, so they gave the drug out through the world. After days, they realized that people got addicted to the medicine, and were taking too much of it. The drug started to take a strong effect. People were losing brain cells, they started bleeding out of their body. They were becoming almost zombie like, being controlled by the drug. The government decided to kill the infected, about 2/5 of the world population. They sent out armies of soldiers, bombed infected zones, and killed innocent people. They were all innocent, destroyed by a drug. But the government did more literally corrupting themselves....
    Before all the infected were killed, they took some for research. The others died in no time. By now, the world had gone in to a war zone, being killed by their own government. The survivors were only a few thousand, scattered in rubble. But there were still some infected, but were keeping it under control. The survivors had set up camps for them to live, and treated for infected instead of killing them. The infected were known as the "EM" for emotionally drugged. While this was going on, the government, a mix of the governments from different countries, were planning ways to keep this from happening again. But not all of them agreed with each other, and soon fighting broke out between them. Scientists seemed forced to do something, so they created the Combine. The Combine are special actual-intelligence robots which were made to be the new government. But the Combine learned much more, and killed the government person by person. They started the "ECW", emotional communist world. They made laws against thinking and dreaming and planned to end love. They set up cities, numbered from 1-17. City 17 was the main base, and throughout the cities they numbered each survivor, and jailed them. A world of terror had started. A man rose up and took over the Combine, but he used his powers badly. He was a G-Man, shall we say the G-Man. He kept the government the way it was, ECW. He made more laws, and sent combine to different planets, different worlds. The survivors, now refugees, lived in the Combine jails and were each assigned numbers. Breaking the laws resulted in death. Cities were surrounded by walls, and Combine were always keeping their eyes on the population. They let some people, the Barons, live better than the others. They were treated as royalty. One was Isaac Bromley. He was a Combine supporter who became City 17 spokesman.
    Many people have tried to revolt against the Combine. Some have succeeded, most have not. The Combine are watching over the survivors almost all the time. It is hard to do, but can be done. This is the story of how Ross Scott rebels against the Combine....
                                                      Chapter 1
    Hello. My name is Ross Scott, id number 20233. I was born on September 19th, 2020. The year is now 2049. We live under the Combine rule, we as in the 10,000 survivors. We are not allowed to think, or dream, or love. Emotions are forbidden. The breaking of the rules leads to death, something, at this point, that we want. I live in City 17, the main base of the Combine. City 17 has most of the survivors, some not in jail yet. One of those people is me. Another is Eli Daniel. He is the oldest of the survivors. He was born in 1992, he was ten when the incident happened. He knows most about it, so he is in hiding at all times so that the Combine will not find him. My plan is to ask him everything he knows so I can lead the revolt wisely. The hard thing is getting to him. I have heard people talking about this Combine free area where he hides, but I can never be sure. It is my only hope.
    I left early in the morning, when the Combine go back to the base. The hidden area was dark and plain. There was a small fire. I took some steps in, then I was thrown to the ground. I was rolled over and a man was looking at me. He was old, but he looked like he could kill me. It was him. "Are you Eli Daniel?""Shush, boy! You trying to get me caught?" He grabbed my shirt and pulled me up. He started pacing. "You a Combine spy?" he asked. "No, I was going to talk to you about that though". "I want to take over City 17. This is the main base of the Combine. If it ends here, we can end it anywhere. So I need you to tell me what you know. You were the one who experienced all of this. You know the most". There was a pause of silence. He stopped pacing, and then looked down."I'm afraid I can't tell you much. Sound waves stay in the air too long. Any suspicious high-frequency hearing and Combine will be surrounding us in seconds. I will have to talk quietly and in parts" he said. There was a long pause again, I guessed it was because of what he just said. " In 2002, the year of the incident, the government wasn't keeping eyes everywhere like now""But---" he stopped me. "Let me finish. Most people in non-third world countries lived in free societies. When the United Nations was formed, communism ended in all countries. The United Nation was a free society. Dictators were not happy about that. They plotted against each other." 'Pause' he mouthed and I understood. After about 3 minutes, he began again. "Before the dictators could start a government war, the infection broke out. The United Nations began the ECW. They thought emotions led to trouble, so ending them all would make a peaceful world. That's when it back fired. Some government officials became infected and their brain was under control by the drug, so they were forced to try and end the ECW. That's where the Combine ruined everything.""Freeze! Put your hands up!" I heard a Combine shouting. I peeked to my side and saw only one Combine soldier. "Pzhh-One, one, section 5- vrrrr---" When I turned again, the Combine was down. The chatter was coming from the radio. Eli started to walk over there, and then stepped on the radio. He picked up the body and dragged it. "Walk" he said. I turned around and started walking. I saw a small shed and I walked through a broken door on the side of it. "Get down, and speak quietly" he said. He took out a pocket-size crow-bar. "This is something I think you should see" he said. Then he slammed the crowbar on the Combine's head. He pulled hard, while making a grunting voice, and it came off. What was under that helmet changed everything. "It's a human" I said astonishingly. "That it is. The Combine weren't made by scientists, they were formed by the governments. Some of the Combine even are government officials. It was all part of their plan. They wanted to start dictatorship, but it would not be easy if it they just tried to make it happen. That is why they made all of this happen. They wanted to rule over everyone.""Then who is the G-Man?" I asked, still jumbled with all of this. "You wouldn't believe me if I told you""I need as much information as I can get. Tell me""See, in the future, they started to time travel. They tried to fix things. They tried to stop bad things from happening. You see, the infection and all of this wouldn't happen if they didn't time travel. The time-traveling caused this. They created millions of paradoxes. So they tried to fix it. They told a man specific directions to fix their mistakes""And what happened?" I interrupted. "He became the G-Man""Who was the person?""You". I was shocked. I dropped on the floor and looked up. I started sweating, but it wasn't sweat, it was blood."You are the first of the infected. You started the disease, the time paradox version of you. The middle man."To be continued...

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#2 2010-02-24 19:42:18

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Re: "Combine" My Story-In Progress

A new trend in Scratch I see.  Long written fiction stories are popping up alot...

Mostly concerning zombies...

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#3 2010-02-24 19:44:44

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Kileymeister wrote:

A new trend in Scratch I see.  Long written fiction stories are popping up alot...

Mostly concerning zombies...

These weren't zombies, I said they were like zombies  wink


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#4 2010-02-24 19:49:56

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adriangl wrote:

Kileymeister wrote:

A new trend in Scratch I see.  Long written fiction stories are popping up alot...

Mostly concerning zombies...

These weren't zombies, I said they were like zombies  wink

I said mostly concerning zombies.
And still, zombie stories are popping up pretty fast, so even not counting yours, they are still everywhere.

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#5 2010-02-24 19:54:04

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Kileymeister wrote:

adriangl wrote:

Kileymeister wrote:

A new trend in Scratch I see.  Long written fiction stories are popping up alot...

Mostly concerning zombies...

These weren't zombies, I said they were like zombies  wink

I said mostly concerning zombies.
And still, zombie stories are popping up pretty fast, so even not counting yours, they are still everywhere.

Well, this one is original. People sort of turning into zombies while the government is going corrupt while robots are making laws that don't allow you to dream.


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#6 2010-02-24 20:10:31

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#7 2010-02-24 20:29:37

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Lol, its a short, short story.

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#8 2010-02-24 20:30:53

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TheSaint wrote:

Lol, its a short, short story.

Still working on it. So far, it is just at the prologue. Once I finish that, I get in to the real story.


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#9 2010-02-24 21:11:39

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Huh, great for being written when you were born

Great story idea UNTIL this part:
"They started the "ECW", emotional communist world. They made laws against thinking and dreaming and planned to end love."

Seems very cliched, I almost groaned when I read this. Otherwise, I was engaged in the idea of this. I think that you're adding too much to it though, you don't need robots, zombies and corrupt governments all in one  tongue

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#10 2010-02-24 21:20:44

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warioandbob wrote:

Huh, great for being written when you were born

Great story idea UNTIL this part:
"They started the "ECW", emotional communist world. They made laws against thinking and dreaming and planned to end love."

Seems very cliched, I almost groaned when I read this. Otherwise, I was engaged in the idea of this. I think that you're adding too much to it though, you don't need robots, zombies and corrupt governments all in one  tongue

Please read my zombie-type story too!

I really like yours  smile  And I like it when many things are brought together  big_smile

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#11 2010-02-25 06:43:32

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K, I actually read it now. I say that its a bit overdone. Robots, corrupt governments, zombies, and a rebellion. I would suggest you cut out the zombie part, and just leave the Combine to kill everyone, seeing as so far the zombies have no real effect on the story.

Have either of you two read my story?

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#12 2010-02-25 19:16:10

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TheSaint wrote:

K, I actually read it now. I say that its a bit overdone. Robots, corrupt governments, zombies, and a rebellion. I would suggest you cut out the zombie part, and just leave the Combine to kill everyone, seeing as so far the zombies have no real effect on the story.

Have either of you two read my story?

Yup. But I am not that into nerdy dragon killer stories  tongue

And once I add the rest of the story, all of this will make sense.....sort of.


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#13 2010-02-25 20:51:44

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Okay, added the first part of chapter one  big_smile


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#14 2010-02-25 22:42:50

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Updated  big_smile  Added a ton more to first chapter, and I added some twists. I left off at a real cliff-hanger  wink


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#15 2010-02-26 00:25:11

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That's very detailed... are you writing it on the forums, or in a word processor? The forums would be too basic for that - no proper formatting.


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#16 2010-02-26 07:02:53

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good, but i have a couple minor questions:
1. you said you wrote this when you were born? how is that even... possible?
2. at one point you say governments of companies, but i don't think companies have governments. what do you mean by that?
3. lol you said non-third world. that can't be right. do you mean first (USA, Canada, etc.) or second(Russia, etc.)?

I think you should make it... better lol. because even though you left it at a cliffhanger, i personally don't really care if i read more or not. the point of cliffhangers is to make you want to read more so....

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#17 2010-02-26 07:15:33

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#18 2010-02-26 20:41:38

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funkymonkey wrote:

good, but i have a couple minor questions:
1. you said you wrote this when you were born? how is that even... possible?
2. at one point you say governments of companies, but i don't think companies have governments. what do you mean by that?
3. lol you said non-third world. that can't be right. do you mean first (USA, Canada, etc.) or second(Russia, etc.)?

I think you should make it... better lol. because even though you left it at a cliffhanger, i personally don't really care if i read more or not. the point of cliffhangers is to make you want to read more so....

OMG. Why the heck did I say I wrote it when I was born? And government of companies is supposed to be government of countries. And third-world as in countries in Africa and what not, countries that really haven't excelled as much as others. And thank you for your opinion.

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#19 2010-02-26 21:44:59

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Updated  big_smile


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#20 2010-02-26 23:34:25

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Like Kileymeister said, I think zombie stories are becoming pretty cleche now. Although it was still a cool story. I posted my story, and I might even post the entire thing.


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#21 2010-02-27 00:03:22

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Half life is the best video game series ever concieved. Also, awesome story!
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#22 2010-02-27 00:10:11

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half_life_2 wrote:

Half life is the best video game series ever concieved. Also, awesome story!
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Best games, true that, thanks, and lol  tongue


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#23 2010-02-27 14:09:45

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adriangl wrote:

funkymonkey wrote:

good, but i have a couple minor questions:
1. you said you wrote this when you were born? how is that even... possible?
2. at one point you say governments of companies, but i don't think companies have governments. what do you mean by that?
3. lol you said non-third world. that can't be right. do you mean first (USA, Canada, etc.) or second(Russia, etc.)?

I think you should make it... better lol. because even though you left it at a cliffhanger, i personally don't really care if i read more or not. the point of cliffhangers is to make you want to read more so....

OMG. Why the heck did I say I wrote it when I was born? And government of companies is supposed to be government of countries. And third-world as in countries in Africa and what not, countries that really haven't excelled as much as others. And thank you for your opinion.

cool thanks for clearing that up  tongue  nice update. also i know what third world countries are, i just meant when you said non-third world countries did you mean second or first world countries? it doesn't really matter


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#24 2010-02-27 14:20:00

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funkymonkey wrote:

adriangl wrote:

funkymonkey wrote:

good, but i have a couple minor questions:
1. you said you wrote this when you were born? how is that even... possible?
2. at one point you say governments of companies, but i don't think companies have governments. what do you mean by that?
3. lol you said non-third world. that can't be right. do you mean first (USA, Canada, etc.) or second(Russia, etc.)?

I think you should make it... better lol. because even though you left it at a cliffhanger, i personally don't really care if i read more or not. the point of cliffhangers is to make you want to read more so....

OMG. Why the heck did I say I wrote it when I was born? And government of companies is supposed to be government of countries. And third-world as in countries in Africa and what not, countries that really haven't excelled as much as others. And thank you for your opinion.

cool thanks for clearing that up  tongue  nice update. also i know what third world countries are, i just meant when you said non-third world countries did you mean second or first world countries? it doesn't really matter

Both. 2nd is normal, 1st is above, I meant anything that was not third-world. And thanks  big_smile


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