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Try to show, not tell. I noticed in the description of the alien you said
" I kneeled down next to it to inspect it closer, but I didn’t dare touch it, and found it had four, four inch fangs that stuck out of it’s mouth (two in front and two in back). "
Rather than that, which makes the reader (Or at least me  ) feel like reading a history book, put somthing like this.
" I kneeled down next to it to inspect it closer, but I didn’t dare touch it, for it might wake up. The fangs in its mouth looked mighty sharp, and it had at least four of the nasty things. So, I kept my distance."
This way, you show the information through plot rather than telling it. He doesn't want to touch the thing because it has four fangs rather than he notices it has four fangs after not wanting to touch it.
This is just a suggestion, and should be taken with a grain of salt.  Or a shaker full. 

It was a good story though, and I look forward to reading the rest.