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#1 2013-04-09 17:56:39

7734f
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Some Poetry I Wrote

Feel free to post your poetry here! I'll start off with some poetry I wrote  smile

Here are some haikus I wrote. They aren't really profound and serious, so don't expect anything too amazing:

Clouds are meaningless

To the eye, when one is seen

Until the storm comes.

Not too good right? This one's worse:

A headache pounding

Like a jackhammer on full

Can be disturbing.

Yeah, yeah, not too good. Here is a Shel Silverstein style poem:

If breakfast is for dinner,
And dinner's for breakfast,
What's for dinner?
And what's for breakfast?

Sorta paradoxy  tongue

Here are more profound poems, that I wrote while thinking hard.

If a creek is cold,
Oh so freezing in the winter,
And oh so pleasantly warm,
In the summer,
Why is it,
That one human does not change,
According to the season?

Yeah, more serious and deep-thinking. Here's another:

I wake up
For the long day ahead
I leave for my obligation
Depressing to my head
I must go to my home
The place called my own

And repeat the cycle again.

But why is it
Things are like this
If robots are only science-fiction?

And yes, take that literally  tongue

Here's one more:

I am climbing
Climbing to my victory,
The place I want to be
And live and prosper
And I grab
For what I think is the last hold
And grasp nothingness

I tumble down, down
Into the deep dark clutches of depression
Where I am no longer accepted
And can no longer be

And the fall
The fall lasts forever
Until I thud on the ground
And lay there

Forever

One of my more depressing poems.

Please comment on what you think! I really appreciate feedback!

Tacos and happiness,

~7734f

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#2 2013-04-09 18:24:59

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

Yay! Poetry! Nice job!

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#3 2013-04-09 19:23:33

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

Nomolos wrote:

Yay! Poetry! Nice job!

Thanks! That means a lot!

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#4 2013-04-09 20:12:52

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

I really like the first one
I also like the second last one
and the last one too
good job

the sun still shines

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#5 2013-04-09 20:52:02

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

bananaman114 wrote:

I really like the first one
I also like the second last one
and the last one too
good job

Thank you so much!!  big_smile

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#6 2013-04-09 22:53:02

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

B.
U.
M.
P.

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#7 2013-04-09 23:05:43

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Amazing! Although robots are real.  neutral

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#8 2013-04-10 09:26:13

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OrcaCat wrote:

Amazing! Although robots are real.  neutral

True. But still.  You get it, right? The, 'I Will Obey Your Every Command Robots' only exist in labs xD

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#9 2013-04-11 18:34:18

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B.u.m.p

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#10 2013-04-11 18:38:00

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Here's another:

Crash
Bang
Boom
The lightning strikes
Kaboom
Flash
Crack
The thunder that follows soon after
Silence
Shuffling
Crack
The lightning has struck the house

Onomatopoeia poem! Hope you like!

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#11 2013-04-11 18:43:02

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The tv is black
A screen with no glow
I am so bored
I need something to do

I try to eat
The hot dogs are tasteless
I am so hungry
Yet the food is not filling

Poetry is hard
Especially
When I'm explaining
How bored I am

With that said
I am bored
Out
Of my mind

I have no idea if that's poetry or not. xD

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#12 2013-04-11 21:41:36

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

Nomolos wrote:

The tv is black
A screen with no glow
I am so bored
I need something to do

I try to eat
The hot dogs are tasteless
I am so hungry
Yet the food is not filling

Poetry is hard
Especially
When I'm explaining
How bored I am

With that said
I am bored
Out
Of my mind

I have no idea if that's poetry or not. xD

Poetic license my friend, poetic license xD

I have poetic license
One you can't take away
I have poetic license
And it's here to stay
I have poetic license
I have it my way

Yup, off the top of my head xD
As I said, poetic license my friend....xD

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#13 2013-04-11 22:31:52

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if I remind you, will you go away again?
I'm so disjointed, my circles have endpoints
the lesson for today is: floss your teeth

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#14 2013-04-12 09:34:46

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dontbombiraq wrote:

if I remind you, will you go away again?
I'm so disjointed, my circles have endpoints
the lesson for today is: floss your teeth

I never went away....?

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#15 2013-04-12 15:25:32

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that appears to just be a poem to me

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#16 2013-04-12 16:07:05

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I don't really like any of these. They seem kind of empty and don't make me feel anything and seem more like you forced yourself to write a poem rather than decided to put your insides on paper

I would rather be alone than pretend I feel alright

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#17 2013-04-12 16:45:01

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Sellout wrote:

I don't really like any of these. They seem kind of empty and don't make me feel anything and seem more like you forced yourself to write a poem rather than decided to put your insides on paper

Except for the last one, he seemed to have a humorous or lighthearted touch to the poems.

But the last one was good

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#18 2013-04-12 18:02:11

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I'm going to go back and re'think my initial post

The first one I initially said was good
It sort of feels more like advice you'd get from a monk who has lived on top of a rather large hill intentionally isolating himself from society for a couple decades than a cool poem

I really wasn't big one the one that ended with the thing about robots until the bit about robots, but ok

last one
okay cool

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#19 2013-04-12 18:08:22

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Sellout wrote:

I don't really like any of these. They seem kind of empty and don't make me feel anything and seem more like you forced yourself to write a poem rather than decided to put your insides on paper

Well, I actually like writing poems. That sort of hurt. Why does it feel empty to you?

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#20 2013-04-12 18:53:48

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Well

Sellout's "deep" is sorta like death metal

It's like going "Halloween isn't violent compared to Saw"

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#21 2013-04-12 19:26:55

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mythbusteranimator wrote:

Well

Sellout's "deep" is sorta like death metal

It's like going "Halloween isn't violent compared to Saw"

Pretty accurate

I would rather be alone than pretend I feel alright

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#22 2013-04-12 19:27:34

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I tried to write something...

Gone Forever by NoxSpooth

I cried
But nothing happened
I screamed
But no one listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared.

There's nothing I can say
I don't know what I've done
It's getting worse everyday
So I'll just be gone...

What do you guys think?

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#23 2013-04-12 20:36:43

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NoxSpooth wrote:

I tried to write something...

Gone Forever by NoxSpooth

I cried
But nothing happened
I screamed
But no one listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared.

There's nothing I can say
I don't know what I've done
It's getting worse everyday
So I'll just be gone...

What do you guys think?

too sad; it's shallow water as well

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#24 2013-04-12 20:38:11

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Re: Some Poetry I Wrote

NoxSpooth wrote:

I cried
But nothing happened
I screamed
But no one listened

This part sounded like the start to a children's picture book somehow

I would rather be alone than pretend I feel alright

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#25 2013-04-12 20:48:05

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poem thing:

optimists
you may find
if you keep your eyes on the sun, you're bound to go blind

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