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ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

speaking of the book, when we have chapter 1 we should actually make something with the book. we can't just have the "pages awaiting book placement" page on the wiki filled with the entire book. we need something to put the prologue and chapter 1 in.

I can start putting them in a book template, of site.

We will need a cover soon. * thoughtful look*

Also, I think Amaya's part in Madbunnys part need s desperate change. She sounds like a fairy princess. O;o

in the cover can we include
a. Coil destroying a boat
or
b. Coil fighting a shark

destructo-serpent wrote:

ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

speaking of the book, when we have chapter 1 we should actually make something with the book. we can't just have the "pages awaiting book placement" page on the wiki filled with the entire book. we need something to put the prologue and chapter 1 in.

I can start putting them in a book template, of site.

We will need a cover soon. * thoughtful look*

Also, I think Amaya's part in Madbunnys part need s desperate change. She sounds like a fairy princess. O;o

in the cover can we include
a. Coil destroying a boat
or
b. Coil fighting a shark

Or
C. Coil with pink all over him and heart for eyes looking at crystal.

/shot

ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

ShadowOfArt wrote:

I can start putting them in a book template, of site.

We will need a cover soon. * thoughtful look*

Also, I think Amaya's part in Madbunnys part need s desperate change. She sounds like a fairy princess. O;o

in the cover can we include
a. Coil destroying a boat
or
b. Coil fighting a shark

Or
C. Coil with pink all over him and heart for eyes looking at crystal.

/shot

>_<
better idea.
how about Amaya swooning over a human >:3

now we can get serious XD
madbunny, can you add more desciption to your chapter 1?

ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

Changed what Rarse said.

cool 
changed what Coil said.

Fixed Amaya's speech.

changed what Coil said.

ShadowOfArt wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

madbunnygalquote wrote:

Changed what Rarse said.

cool 
changed what Coil said.

Fixed Amaya's speech.

changed what Coil says

]"Huh?" Rarse whipped around, looking at the kelp forest behind him. "Did you guys hear something?"

"Yeah. Sounds like singing to me." Coil stated.

"Where from?" Epher said.

"It... It looks like... A siren... By the sevens seas, she looks terrible!" Amaya said, gesturing towards something.

Crystal was slowly swimming across the sand towards them brushing past the corals. She attempted to catch a fish, but the fish was ten times faster than her, the way she was. Her feathers and blue eyes seemed dull, and the crystal drops which hung from her head jingled. She tried to swim to the top of the ocean, but sank the moment she tried. She realized that there was some easier prey to catch, and made her way towards the whale meat.

"Well I'm not helping her, she might try to steal our whale." Coil said.

Crystal collapsed in a heap in front of them, and started to sing.

"Everyone, don't listen!" Amaya shrieked. Amaya knew little of sirens, but she heard fish talk about their cruelty and powers.

"Give me food." Crystal said eerily.

Amaya glanced at the group, not noticing Coil seemed perfectly fine, she quickly said, "Guys do not listen to her. I will talk to her." Amaya turned, and contained to Crystal,
"You look... Terrible. You need food. I can try to heal you, after you eat. We have plenty of whale."

"No." Crystal glared, her blonde hair covered her face and have her a terrifying look.

"Are you always this stubborn? Eat. Right. Now."

"Fine. Don't tell anyone I am making the most of your help. If you do, I will kill you."

Amaya whispered under her breath, "Like you could kill me," In a louder voice, "Whatever. Just. Eat."

Crystal drank her portion of whale soul, and was just about to steal some of the others whale as well. Already she was looking better, no longer slumped on the seabeds. Her attitude had clearly made its way back to her.

"What are you doing here, and what happened to you?" Rarse asked.

"What happened to me is none of your concern." Crystal exclaimed.

"Did the humans hurt you or something?" Coil asked indifferently.

"Maybe, maybe not."

"Join us then, to give the humans what they deserve." Epher said proudly.

"No. If I wanted to erase the human race, I will do it by myself." Crystal said.

"I totally bet you can, you definitely look the part," Rarse said sarcastically, eyeing Crystal's ripped clothes.

"Don't underestimate me merman, I am capable to look after myself. I'm leaving."

"Wait! Are you sure?" Epher asked.

"I can make my own decision." and with that she turned around and swam into the reef, then quickly whipped around and said, "I'll join!"

fixed what coil said

you know what would be cool? if we had two parts of this collab, one that writes the stories and one that makes games about them    or just a partner collab.

destructo-serpent wrote:

you know what would be cool? if we had two parts of this collab, one that writes the stories and one that makes games about them    or just a partner collab.

You were saying?

http://scratch.mit.edu/forums/viewtopic.php?id=116218

destructo-serpent wrote:

lundfamily3 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

you know what would be cool? if we had two parts of this collab, one that writes the stories and one that makes games about them    or just a partner collab.

You were saying?

http://scratch.mit.edu/forums/viewtopic.php?id=116218

oh, come on. we might at least wait for Waffle to approve 

*Innocent look* We aren't even doing anything yet, just making a topic... xD

destructo-serpent wrote:

lundfamily3 wrote:

destructo-serpent wrote:

oh, come on. we might at least wait for Waffle to approve 

*Innocent look* We aren't even doing anything yet, just making a topic... xD

fine. but Waffle still has to agree b4 any games are made.
madbunny's chapter1 is really slowing us down. some editor should add more description.

I can.

I gtg, I'll post the edited version when I can. Here's what I got so far though:

"Huh?" Rarse whipped around, staring at the kelp forest behind him. "Did you guys hear something?"
     "Yeah. Sounds like singing to me." Coil stated, also turning.
     "Where from?" Epher questioned, looking around, and then they all saw it,
A figure was emerging from the kelp, bruised and tired, sinking to the ground every time she tried to swim upward.
     "It...It looks like...A siren... By the sevens seas, she looks terrible!" Amaya said, gesturing towards the cryptid
The siren slowly swam across the sand towards them, brushing past the corals. She attempted to catch a fish, but the fish was ten times faster than her weakened state, and it shot away. The siren's feathers and blue eyes seemed dull, and the crystal drops which hung from her head jingled. She tried to swim to the top of the ocean, but sank the moment she tried. She realized that there was some easier prey to catch, and made her way towards the whale meat.
     "Well I'm not helping her, she might try to steal our whale." Coil said reluctantly.
The siren collapsed in a heap in front of them, and started to sing. Rarse and Epher's eyes glazed over, and their mouths dropped, but Coil stayed focused, eyeing the siren with contempt and suspicion.
     "Everyone, don't listen!" Amaya shrieked. Amaya knew little of sirens, but she heard fish talk about their cruelty and powers.
     "Give me food." The siren said eerily.
Amaya frowned at the rest of the group, and inhaled sharply at their expressions, not noticing Coil seemed perfectly fine. Quickly she said, "Snap out of it! I will talk to her." Amaya turned, and continued to Crystal,
     "You look... Terrible. No offense, but you look absolutely terrible. You need food. Look, stop doing," Amaya glanced back at the others, "whatever you're doing, and I can try to heal you, after you eat. We have plenty of whale."
     "No," the siren glared, her blonde hair covered her face and have her a terrifying look, but the spell seemed to lift off of Epher and Rarse, and they shook their heads vigorously, looking back at the siren with a confused expression.
     "Are you always this stubborn?" Amaya asked, exasperated. " Eat. Right. Now."
     "Fine. But don't you dare tell anyone I am making the most of your help. If you do, I will kill you."
"Like you could kill me," Amaya whispered under her breath, and then, in a louder voice, "Whatever. Just eat."
The siren drank her portion of whale soul, and was just about to steal some of the others whale as well. Already she was looking better, no longer slumped on the seabeds. Her attitude had clearly made its way back to her.
     "What's you're name, what are you doing here anyway, and what happened to you?" Rarse asked.
     "My name is Crystal," the siren said, "and what happened to me is none of your concern."
     "Did the humans hurt you or something?" Coil asked indifferently.

"Maybe, maybe not."

"Join us then, to give the humans what they deserve." Epher said proudly.

"No. If I wanted to erase the human race, I will do it by myself." Crystal said.

"I totally bet you can, you definitely look the part," Rarse said sarcastically, eyeing Crystal's ripped clothes.

"Don't underestimate me merman, I am capable to look after myself. I'm leaving."

"Wait! Are you sure?" Epher asked.

"I can make my own decision." and with that she turned around and swam into the reef, then quickly whipped around and said, "I'll join!"

Nomolos wrote:

I gtg, I'll post the edited version when I can. Here's what I got so far though:

"Huh?" Rarse whipped around, staring at the kelp forest behind him. "Did you guys hear something?"
     "Yeah. Sounds like singing to me." Coil stated, turning his head.
     "Where from?" Epher questioned, looking around, and then they all saw it,
A figure was emerging from the kelp, bruised and tired, sinking to the ground every time she tried to swim upward.
     "It...It looks like...A siren... By the sevens seas, she looks terrible!" Amaya said, gesturing towards the cryptid
The siren slowly swam across the sand towards them, brushing past the corals. She attempted to catch a fish, but the fish was ten times faster than her weakened state, and it shot away. The siren's feathers and blue eyes seemed dull, and the crystal drops which hung from her head jingled. She tried to swim to the top of the ocean, but sank the moment she tried. She realized that there was some easier prey to catch, and made her way towards the whale meat.
     "Well I'm not helping her, she might try to steal our whale." Coil said protectively.
The siren collapsed in a heap in front of them, and started to sing. Rarse and Epher's eyes glazed over, and their mouths dropped, but Coil stayed focused, eyeing the siren with contempt and suspicion.
     "Everyone, don't listen!" Amaya shrieked. Amaya knew little of sirens, but she heard fish talk about their cruelty and powers.
     "Give me food." The siren said eerily.
Amaya frowned at the rest of the group, and inhaled sharply at their expressions, not noticing Coil seemed perfectly fine. Quickly she said, "Snap out of it! I will talk to her." Amaya turned, and continued to Crystal,
     "You look... Terrible. No offense, but you look absolutely terrible. You need food. Look, stop doing," Amaya glanced back at the others, "whatever you're doing, and I can try to heal you, after you eat. We have plenty of whale."
     "No," the siren glared, her blonde hair covered her face and have her a terrifying look, but the spell seemed to lift off of Epher and Rarse, and they shook their heads vigorously, looking back at the siren with a confused expression.
     "Are you always this stubborn?" Amaya asked, exasperated. " Eat. Right. Now."
     "Fine. But don't you dare tell anyone I am making the most of your help. If you do, I will kill you."
"Like you could kill me," Amaya whispered under her breath, and then, in a louder voice, "Whatever. Just eat."
The siren drank her portion of whale soul, and was just about to steal some of the others whale as well. Already she was looking better, no longer slumped on the seabeds. Her attitude had clearly made its way back to her.
     "What's you're name, what are you doing here anyway, and what happened to you?" Rarse asked.
     "My name is Crystal," the siren said, "and what happened to me is none of your concern."
     "Did the humans hurt you or something?" Coil asked indifferently.

"Maybe, maybe not."

"Join us then, to give the humans what they deserve." Epher said proudly.

"No. If I wanted to erase the human race, I will do it by myself." Crystal said.

"I totally bet you can, you definitely look the part," Rarse said sarcastically, eyeing Crystal's ripped clothes.

"Don't underestimate me merman, I am capable to look after myself. I'm leaving."

"Wait! Are you sure?" Epher asked.

"I can make my own decision." and with that she turned around and swam into the reef, then quickly whipped around and said, "I'll join!"

changed a couple of things Coil does.

destructo-serpent wrote:

Nomolos wrote:

I gtg, I'll post the edited version when I can. Here's what I got so far though:

"Huh?" Rarse whipped around, staring at the kelp forest behind him. "Did you guys hear something?"
     "Yeah. Sounds like singing to me." Coil stated, turning his head.
     "Where from?" Epher questioned, looking around, and then they all saw it,
A figure was emerging from the kelp, bruised and tired, sinking to the ground every time she tried to swim upward.
     "It... It looks like... A siren... By the sevens seas, she looks terrible!" Amaya said, gesturing towards something.

The siren slowly swam across the sand towards them, brushing past the corals. She attempted to catch a fish, but the fish was ten times faster than her weakened state, and it shot away. The siren's feathers and blue eyes seemed dull, and the crystal drops which hung from her head jingled. She tried to swim to the top of the ocean, but sank the moment she tried. She realized that there was some easier prey to catch, and made her way towards the whale meat.
     "Well I'm not helping her, she might try to steal our whale." Coil said protectively.
The siren collapsed in a heap in front of them, and started to sing. Rarse and Epher's eyes glazed over, and their mouths dropped, but Coil stayed focused, eyeing the siren with contempt and suspicion.
     "Everyone, don't listen!" Amaya shrieked. Amaya knew little of sirens, but she heard fish talk about their cruelty and powers.
     "Give me food." The siren said eerily.
Amaya glanced at the group, not noticing Coil seemed perfectly fine, she quickly said, "Guys do not listen to her. I will talk to her." Amaya turned, and contained to Crystal,
"You look... Terrible. You need food. I can try to heal you, after you eat. We have plenty of whale."
     "No," the siren glared, her blonde hair covered her face and have her a terrifying look, but the spell seemed to lift off of Epher and Rarse, and they shook their heads vigorously, looking back at the siren with a confused expression.
     "Are you always this stubborn?" Amaya asked, exasperated. " Eat. Right. Now."
     "Fine. But don't you dare tell anyone I am making the most of your help. If you do, I will kill you."
"Like you could kill me," Amaya whispered under her breath, and then, in a louder voice, "Whatever. Just eat."
The siren drank her portion of whale soul, and was just about to steal some of the others whale as well. Already she was looking better, no longer slumped on the seabeds. Her attitude had clearly made its way back to her.
     "What's you're name, what are you doing here anyway, and what happened to you?" Rarse asked.
     "My name is Crystal," the siren said, "and what happened to me is none of your concern."
     "Did the humans hurt you or something?" Coil asked indifferently.

"Maybe, maybe not."

"Join us then, to give the humans what they deserve." Epher said proudly.

"No. If I wanted to erase the human race, I will do it by myself." Crystal said.

"I totally bet you can, you definitely look the part," Rarse said sarcastically, eyeing Crystal's ripped clothes.

"Don't underestimate me merman, I am capable to look after myself. I'm leaving."

"Wait! Are you sure?" Epher asked.

"I can make my own decision." and with that she turned around and swam into the reef, then quickly whipped around and said, "I'll join!"

changed a couple of things Coil does.

Nomolos, you changed what Amaya did. *Annoyed Anime Face here* Now she sounds creepy o.o

I will change it back in a second.
Edit: Changed 

Last edited by lundfamily3 (2013-03-27 14:16:05)